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james011137UID: 2280989

Topic: Movies and televisions make more negative effects than positive

Nowadays, from ocean of sports games such as NBA to operations such as Prison Break, movies and televisions take more and more time in our life. Someone claims that these medias include movies and televisions exert negative efforts to our life. However, in the point of my view, movies and televisions play both negative and positive factors in our life.

To begin with, compared to traditional education methods, movies and televisions provide an alternative educational approach. Some scientists found that people are inclined to accept visual information, which the movies and televisions provide. Vivid images and videos are conducive to our understanding of abstract concept. Especially to children, they are easily to learn new words or action with the television. Furthermore, televisions and movies were regarded as a helpful assist method to help people study in university. Even there are some of televisions universities, students here have class by television instead of go to classroom. In addition, as recreational activities, movies and televisions absolutely make our life more colorful (colorful). Consider that, after a hard day's work, lying on sofa watching the TV with a cup of coffee is a really relaxed and happy time. Therefore, movies and televisions have its advantages due to its educational and recreational activities.

Nevertheless, it has disadvantages as well. Majority of movie and television companies are operated by profitable company, which purpose is to maximum (maximum) profits. In this sense, the purpose of some television program is to attract audience as much as possible instead of education or pure recreation. So we can easily understand why so many unhealthy programs in our screen. Such programs full of violent scenes and so forth exert very bad effort to people, especially those teenagers. Some researches indicate that there are a dramatic increase in crime rates with the popularity of movies and televisions. Those results lead credence to the view that some unhealthy programs might provoke people to do something illegal. Accordingly, we should take some efficient actions to prevent the negative efforts of movies and televisions.

To sum up, movies and televisions provide an imposing alternative way of education and entertainment meanwhile we can not ignore some negative efforts it bring about. Accordingly, we'd better a make suitable laws and regulations to restrict (restrict) the free development of movies and televisions for the consideration that maximum the profits from television for ourselves (ourselves).  

cos7jUID: 2492350

Nowadays, from ocean of sports games such as NBA to operations such as Prison Break, movies and televisions take more and more time in our life. Someone claims that these medias include movies and televisions exert negative efforts to our life. However, in the point of my view, movies and televisions play both negative and positive factors in our life.
To begin with, compared to traditional education methods, movies and televisions provide an alternative educational approach. Some scientists found that people are inclined to accept visual information, which the movies and televisions provide. Vivid images and videos are conducive to our understanding of abstract concept. Especially to children, they are easily to learn new words or action with the television. Furthermore, televisions and movies were regarded as a helpful assist method to help people study in university. Even there are some of televisions universities, students here have class by television instead of go to classroom. In addition, as recreational activities, movies and televisions absolutely make our life more colorful (colorful). Consider that, after a hard day's work, lying on sofa watching the TV with a cup of coffee is a really relaxed and happy time. Therefore, movies and televisions have its their advantages due to its educational and recreational activities.

Nevertheless, it has disadvantages as well. Majority of movie and television companies are operated by profitable company, whichwhose purpose is to maximum (maximum) profits. In this sense, the purpose of some television program is to attract audience as much as possible instead of education or pure recreation. So we can easily understand why so many unhealthy programs in our screen. Such programs full of violent scenes and so forth exert very bad effort to people, especially those teenagers. Some researches indicate that there are is a dramatic increase in crime rates with the popularity of movies and televisions. Those results lead credence to the view that some unhealthy programs might provoke people to do something illegal. Accordingly, we should take some efficient actions to prevent (好句,学习了)the negative efforts of movies and televisions.
To sum up, movies and televisions provide an imposing alternative way of education and entertainment meanwhile we can not ignore some negative efforts it brings about. Accordingly, we'd better a make suitable laws and regulations to restrict (restrict) the free development of movies and televisions for the consideration that maximum the profits from television for ourselves (ourselves).

写得挺好,我就主改语法了,楼下评内容吧

[ 本帖最后由 cos7j 于 2009-1-9 19:55 编辑 ]

xlwxxyUID: 2568970

Nowadays, from ocean of sports games such as NBA to operations such as Prison Break, movies and televisions take more and more time in our life.（这句感觉有点突兀和别扭，前后没有什么因果强烈关系吧！而且对文章贡献极微!） Someone claims that these medias include movies and televisions exert negative efforts to our life. However, in the point of my view, movies and televisions play both negative and positive factors in our life. （跑题了，题目问你是否消极影响更多，你却写两个都重要。没有回答问题啊！）

To begin with, compared to traditional education methods, movies and televisions provide an alternativeavailable educational approach. Some scientists found that people are inclined to accept visual information, which the movies and televisions provide. Vivid images and videos are conducive to our understanding of abstract concept. Especially to children, they are easily to learn new words or action with the television. Furthermore, televisions and movies were regarded as a helpful assist method to help people study in university. Even there are some of televisions universities, students here have class by television instead of go to classroom. In addition, as recreational activities, movies and televisions absolutely make our life more colorful (colorful). Consider that, after a hard day's work, lying on sofa watching the TV with a cup of coffee is a really relaxed and happy time. Therefore, movies and televisions have its advantages due to its educational and recreational activities.

Nevertheless, it has disadvantages as well. Majority of movie and television companies are operated by profitable company, which purpose is to maximum (maximum) profits. In this sense, the purpose of some television program is to attract audience as much as possible instead of education or pure recreation. So we can easily understand why so many unhealthy programs in our screen. Such programs full of violent scenes and so forth exert very bad effort to people, especially those teenagers. Some researches indicate that there are a dramatic increase in crime rates with the popularity of movies and televisions. Those results lead credence to the view that some unhealthy programs might provoke people to do something illegal. Accordingly, we should take some efficient actions to prevent the negative efforts of movies and televisions.

To sum up(好像你很喜欢用这个词组，个人感觉口语化了点，可以尝试更换一下), movies and televisions provide an imposing alternative way of education and entertainment meanwhile we can not ignore some negative efforts it bring about. Accordingly, we'd better a make suitable laws and regulations to restrict (restrict) the free development of movies and televisions for the consideration that maximum the profits from television for ourselves (ourselves).
注意题目问题啊！
题目是 Movies and televisions make more negative effects than positive effects on young people s behavior.
如果没有理解错是agree or disagree的类型吧！先回答问题在阐述！
我知道你应该是想挑战折中主义的文章，但这个不是很好写的。
还是安全起见，选一方面写有点让步为妙！

[ 本帖最后由 xlwxxy 于 2009-1-9 20:53 编辑 ]

james011137UID: 2280989

原帖由 xlwxxy 于 2009-1-9 20:48 发表
Nowadays, from ocean of sports games such as NBA to operations such as Prison Break, movies and televisions take more and more time in our life.（这句感觉有点突兀和别扭，前后没有什么因果强烈关系吧 ...

第一句  是像引出话题来的~TV series 吧 电视剧忘了怎么说了~
我第一段是没有照应好题目
谢谢你的建议:)