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roinyouUID: 2447501

这是dec 31的作业， argument111
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The memo claims that Dura-Sock is wasting money it spends on its patented ‘Endure’ technology, and recommends that Dura-sock should raise the profits by cut the investment on the use of the ‘Endure’ process. To support this conclusion, it cites a study which shows that the average customer purchases new Dura-Sock every 3 month, and a survey which presents that customers value more Dura-sock’s stylish appearance and availability in many colors. However, with close scrutiny of these evidence, we found the argument logical flaws in several respects.

First of all, the author assumes that the phenomenon that customers purchase new Dura-sock every three month, which presents that the Dura-Sock’s life-time the customers use is only three month and that the endurance is no longer important for them. However, the author provides little evidence showing how long Dura-Sock really use. It is entirely possible that they use every pair of socks long than one year, and they buy new sock for necessary condition that all the sock had not been washed or for the change of season. Frequently purchasing socks lends unconvincing support that the customers are less need the socks endure for a long time.

Secondly, the author cites the survey which collects the opinions from the customers in one of the largest market in northeastern U.S cities, and incline to infer that all of the Dura-Sock customers value more on products’ style, and various color availability. However, we can not assert that the customers’ opinions in this market typify the opinion of customers nationwide. Perhaps, the northeastern customers have totally different preference of character for socks, or maybe the customers from the largest market also have different preference with ones from small market. To bolster the effectiveness of the survey, the author has to offer more information about the Dura-Sock customers.

Finally, even if the survey is sufficient to claim that Dura-Sock customers are value style of socks and the various color availability, nevertheless, the author have no mention about the their value on the endurance of socks. The customers may require the style and color resting on the qualification of endurance. We can not rule out the possibility that the customers may never buy stylish and pretty socks without endurance.

To sum up, the author provides unsubstantiated evidence and fact to draw the conclusion. To strengthen it, he/she has to give more statistics or evidence to persuade us that the customers use the sock for not very long, and that they value no endurance at all. For better evaluate the recommendation, I would also need the information about the expected consequence and side effect when we increase the profits by discarding the ‘Endure’ manufacturing process

[ 本帖最后由 roinyou 于 2008-12-31 23:29 编辑 ]

comb300UID: 2443633

happy new year!!  haha,,, ^^


The memo claims that Dura-Sock is wasting money it spends on its patented ‘Endure’ technology, and recommends that Dura-sock should raise the profits by cut the investment on the use of the ‘Endure’ process. To support this conclusion, it cites a study which shows that the average customer purchases new Dura-Sock every 3 month, and a survey which presents that customers value more Dura-sock’s stylish appearance and availability in many colors. However, with close scrutiny of these evidence, we found the argument logical flaws in several respects -> aspects.

First of all, the author assumes that the phenomenon that 两个that 看的别扭 customers purchase new Dura-sock every three month, which presents that the Dura-Sock’s life-time the customers use ?? is only three month and that the endurance is no longer important for them.这个句子可以重新组织一下 However, the author provides little evidence showing how long Dura-Sock really use. It is entirely possible that they use every pair of socks long->longer than one year, and they buy new sock for necessary->particular condition that all the sock had not been washed or for the change of season .....  我昏··改卷子可不是大学生，3个月洗一次?.. = =! 逻辑没错，不过这例子也太... . Frequently purchasing socks lends unconvincing support that the customers are less need the socks endure for a long time // endure 已经有了长时间的意思.

Secondly, the author cites the survey which collects the opinions from the customers in one of the largest market in northeastern U.S cities, and incline to infer that all of the Dura-Sock customers value more on products’ style, and various color availability. However, we can not assert that the customers’ opinions in this market typify the opinion of customers nationwide. Perhaps, the northeastern customers have totally different preference of character for socks, or maybe the customers from the largest market also have different preference with ones from small market. To bolster the effectiveness of the survey, the author has to offer more information about the Dura-Sock customers.

Finally, even if the survey is sufficient to claim that Dura-Sock customers are value style of socks and the various color availability, nevertheless, the author have no mention about the their value on the endurance of socks. The customers may require the style and color resting on the qualification of endurance. We can not rule out the possibility that the customers may never buy stylish and pretty socks without endurance.

To sum up, the author provides unsubstantiated evidence and fact to draw the conclusion. To strengthen it, he/she has to give more statistics or evidence to persuade us that the customers use the sock for not very long, and that they value no endurance at all. For better evaluate the recommendation, I would also need the information about the expected consequence and side effect when we increase the profits by discarding the ‘Endure’ manufacturing process


呵呵，写得不错啊，这篇比前一篇写得好多了。
第二段某些地方写得和上篇感觉有些相似，后面两段论证和用词感觉很到位了，貌似没什么要改的。
PS. 下次再提交的时候最好把题目原文也贴上，方便看一点点·· :)