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Educational issue always arouses polemic, and many people think that education helps promote social harmony, while some other peoplesome others 尽量减少名词重复.believe that education impedes the development of social harmony 还是觉得重复. What I support is中式思维。 In my opinion or in my point of view 之类的就行了 that education makes effort to magnify social harmony to the largest extent not only by offering the ability of questioning and criticizing. 意思明白,可句式感觉比较混乱,感觉还没说完。
To begin with, the purpose of education is the most important definition for us to understand its effects( 罗嗦, education 后面的都删掉) which is to enlighten people, to construct their knowledge structure, and to promote the development of society. As a result, people learn knowledge transmitted by teachers and they also learn how to learn such as to question and criticize which helps them pursue their self-study further(去) after leaving campus in the future. Questioning and criticizing are the abilities for people to study more with their own thoughts of problems instead of confessing 这个词放这里感觉不太对 accepting 感觉都顺眼些and swallowing blindly all that they have got from books, teachers, and authorities. Possessing such abilities helps them and the society as well to search for facts, overthrow pseudo-science and establish new theories which are quoted by some one to prove the side effect of education that breaks the balance of society, whereas, they ignore the substance that the social harmony bases on social development. 这句经典! 我怎么没想到呢 。这里观点不错 After deliberately questioning and criticizing, individuals hold a new knowledge in their minds as their own. Thus, they would repay the society what they have been taught, and keep the consequence意思是结果,后果 ,换个吧 of society.
Secondly, the ability of questioning and criticizing assists society with its harmony. Social harmony is always expressed by religious harmony, racial harmony, cultural harmony and harmony among citizens in society. Someone may argue that criticizing and questioning are only resisting the harmony, however, they only consider superficially 好词. In fact, criticizing and questioning do not represent quarrelling and complaining. 赞 The aim of criticizing and questioning is to attain the approbation of the different ideas which leads to harmonize the distinct opinions. For example, at late 19th century, missionaries came to China to prevail the Christian, while lots of people believed in Buddhism. After learning differences between the religious beliefs, lots of Chinese began to believe in God which was not so as, the same as what was in western country but had its own characteristics through the campaign of questioning and criticizing. The capability of Christian in China shows us that criticizing and questioning are the facilities which attend to make religious harmony balanced and also with other harmony as social harmony. 我把这个论点放在了第一点,把education 放在了第二点: 这一段比上一段感觉好多了
However, sticking to criticizing and questioning on mouth without devoting to build a perfect society by heart and mind would truly cumber the consequence of society by one who only protects his own extreme opinion. For instance, the terrorists who made the July 7th explosion in London were these people who insist on their extreme pattern of thinking, and perturb the tranquility and peace in London, they "criticized and questioned" the problems of society, but did little on solving them, and finally they did harm to the masses and the society. Yet, education is a process which cultivates the all-facet ability of students including questioning and criticizing, and others such as getting along with people and accustoming to the surroundings which promote social harmony. ( 例子,偶观点同楼上大家的。)
In sum, education does optimize the social relationship through its encouraging on students' ability of questioning and criticizing, along with the ability of other aspects.
Commentary:
1. 观点很明确,论证还是很充分的 赞
2. 词汇很丰富,尤其是名词。 羡慕ing. However, 词的使用错误太多! 要不就是不恰当。 建议适当查查字典,看看英文解释。 还有,注意增加代词使用。
3. 句子还不够精练。 不过GRE 重逻辑,也没啥啦
Last but not least, 偶下手够狠的。。。。~~~~回拍狠的我也受得住 ;P
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