Issue4 第一篇issue求拍 8.30考>.<

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Issue 4: Outsiders are necessary for significant advances in a study field.
在电脑前磨了一个半钟头……再也写不多了@.@

Generally speaking, the access to a certain field of study is limited to a certain group of people. However talented they maybe, outsiders are usually deprived of their oppotunity to be involved in the study. Supposing what will happen to a college student major in eighteen-century literature, when he steps into the classroom of mordern physics.  Obvious it maybe, that outsiders are not allowed in because of their unfamilarity of a study, we cannot make such assertion before looking back into history.
The development of modern chemistry, for example, well defines how properous studies can benefit and help build a new one. The origin of chemistry, as we know, is alchemistry, something like a pseudoscience. And it is with the rapid development and achievements of modern physics, can the pioneers build the foundations of modern chemistry. Moreover, those early chemists, are mostly physicists themselves. And further interference of physics, together with mathimatics, contributed a lot to the maturity of modern chemistry. It is hard to imagine how the principles of chemistry will be founded, without the advanced technics and experiment methods, both of which benefit from the innovations of physicists.
Conceding that outsiders did make essential contribution to the establishment of chemistry, some people argue that it is only because nature sciences are similar in their early stages, and today it is impossible for a scientist to spread his access to many different fields, since accumulation of knowledge in a study field is so fast that anyone canbe an outsider soon if he does not always keep in step with the information boom, which is a mission impossible. Then advance in a study can only be made by the work of specialists in that field, and the contribution of outsiders is neither possible nor neccesary.
Although it seems to be a sound assumption, several even live examples can unveil the speciosity of it, the most well known of which is the success apply of computer science to genetics. Classic genetics, founded by Mondel, concerns nothing more than certain phenotypes of a species, for example, the color of a flower and the number of petals of it. The early geneticists realized that there are underlying factors, genes as we know it today, which contribute to the appearance of organisms. However, the data are too complex for human beings to discover any secrets behind them, considering the huge number of species on the earth and differences between their apperance. The discovery of computer, with the development of computer science, largely help alter this condition. As to programmers, there is nothing easier to deal with than data. With the help of computer scientists, genetics can now concentrate on the meanings of the natural code despite of its size. If it is not by the use of computer science, the human genome project will be totally impossible, let alone further efforts to improve human health.
To draw a conclusion, it is sometimes possible for researchers to make advances in their own field, but the contribution of outsiders cannot be omitted. It is easy to understand that, those who are not familiar with the study do not submit to any false authority in that field, and have little limitation of imagination, which is usually vital in great discoveries and inventions. Probably, the participation of outsiders is essential to significant advances in a field, because of their great and undispensable innovative ideas.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-21 at 01:17 ]

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我也是8月30号考作文，也才开始没几天，人总是这样，浪费了一些不值得的时间。
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最好还是来个开头段，摆明观点。   
    Generally speaking, the access to a certain field of study is limited to a certain group of people. However talented they maybe, outsiders are usually deprived of their oppotunity to be involved in the study. Supposing what will happen to a college student major in eighteen-century literature, when he steps into the classroom of mordern physics.  Obvious it maybe, that outsiders are not allowed in because of their unfamilarity of a study, we cannot make such assertion before looking back into history.:)很流畅，观点也很新颖。
   这段开头直接蹦到例子，少了过渡，最好加一句和主题相关的话，表明自己的观点。The development of modern chemistry, for example, well defines how properous studies can benefit and help build a new one. The origin of chemistry, as we know, is alchemistry, something like a pseudoscience. And it is with the rapid development and achievements of modern physics, can the pioneers build the foundations of modern chemistry. （私人问题;)：这个例子能具体解释一下么？化学的发展怎么会和物理学相关？谢谢！）Moreover, those early chemists, are mostly physicists themselves.（the majority of those early chemists are physicists themselves. better?个人意见,感觉本段的插入语和断句用的有些频繁。） And further interference（interference<derog>改成participation吧） of physics, together with mathimatics, contributed a lot to the maturity of modern chemistry. It is hard to imagine how the principles of chemistry will（would?) be founded, without the advanced technics and experiment methods, both of which benefit from the innovations of physicists.（例子虽然简单，但分析很透彻）
    Conceding that outsiders did（do) make essential contributions to the establishment of chemistry, some people argue that it is only because nature(natural) sciences are similar in their early stages, and today it is impossible for a scientist to spread(extend) his access to many different fields, since accumulation of knowledge in a study field is so fast that anyone can be an outsider soon(might soon become an outsider) if he does not always删掉 keep in step with（这样用可以吗？呵呵我也不确定哦，还请赐教 keep abreast of 肯定没错！） the information boom, which is a mission impossible. Then advance in a study can only be made by the work of specialists in that field, and the contribution of outsiders is neither possible nor neccesary.
    Although it seems to be a sound assumption, several even live examples(怪怪的，可以这么说吗？:confused:） can unveil the speciosity of it, the most well known of which（指代不明拉） is the success apply of （applying to)computer science to genetics. Classic genetics, founded by Mondel, concerns nothing more than certain phenotypes of a species, for example, the color of a flower and the number of petals of it. The early geneticists realized that there are underlying factors, genes as we know it删掉 today, which contribute to the appearance of organisms. However, the data are too complex for human beings to discover any secrets behind them, considering the huge number of species on the earth and differences between their apperanceS. The discoveryINVENTION of computer, with the development of computer science, largely helpS alterING this condition. As to programmers, there is nothing easier to deal with than data. With the help of computer scientists, genetics can now concentrate on the meanings of the natural code despite of its sizeamount?. If it is not byWithout the use of computer science, the human genome project will be totally impossible, let alone further efforts to improve human health.(这段例子太长了，有点丢失论证过程的感觉，注意夹叙夹议哦）
    To draw a conclusion, it is sometimes possible for researchers to make advances in their own field, but the contribution of outsiders cannot be omitted. It is easy to understand that, those who are not familiar with the study do not submit to any false authority in that field, and have little limitation of imagination, which is usually vital in great discoveries and inventions.（突然冒出新的论点？） Probably, the participation of outsiders is essential to significant advances in a field, because of their great and undispensable innovative ideas.
1，语言功底不错，句式多变流畅。
2，建议动笔之前列个提纲，理清思路，方便拍砖。
3，例子不错，注意论据为论点服务。
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的确，我没注意结构，还有例证和论点的关系
今天写的时候改进^^
谢谢！已回拍~