Issue36 heart to heart 15楼zhangheng1020第6次作业

zhangheng1020UID: 2130513

Issue 36 The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries
TOPIC: partly rejected
1 Greatness of individuals should be judged by an objective attitude which has no relation/connection with time.
2 Effects from which greatness was made as a judgment of its own can also be well recognized in the current time. is affected by the current constituents.  
3 Admittedly, lots of judgments are by the contemporaries, the effects can see in the sort term. However, in the long term, the side effect will appear, People's attitude might change in history.
4 in sum, by contemporaries, individual greatness can be judged. But the judgment from those who live after the current time is more valuable.

14:50~~ 16:27 however, 修改到刚才:L:L   652words   

The writer argued that the greatness can only be decided in the later time. From the contemporaries, individuals can not be judged. In my opinion, I believe, we can award a dead person by his historical record. The way we objectively warded/ raised the greatness of individuals is by its effects. However, though be less objective, lots of comments can be made in the current time. My reasons are as follows:

Admittedly, any judgment should be made in an objective and scientific attitude. And the objective attitude comes from a promotion that rooted deeply under the belief of "truth is above all". Distinguished by some biases that after the contemporaries those who live after them can be absolutely objective, someone argues that only after one's death, the greatness can be decided. Those who believe that time will correct the bias is definitely wrong. Time and times again, in history, numerous facts told us the historical records were cooked by the government; past truth might be misled by the reign for his stable domination. And those elements as greedy or desire which effects the objective judgments will still exist in future. Think about the middle age, you can see those greatness from ancient Greek were juggled by the Roman Catholicism; the precious knowledge is forcibly hided and pirated by monks. The best artifices were made in Churches or castles for the praise of religion and region and the names of their creators were faded in time.   

In another way, following the principle that one should be honest to what he saw, the bias can be provided. With the development of human civilization, in nowadays, we have formed a mature scientific researching system which contents the strict science ethic. And an objective attitude is as a common sense that every scientific researcher should throw away personal emotions, forget about the race difference and leave the governmental benefits under the benefits of the whole human beings when judging the researching acknowledges. That rule is popular educated in every collage and followed by every lab. It makes it possible for an objective judgment for every individual achievement. Think about the formation of modern quantum theory, though mote supporters were against wave theory, after wave model suites the quantum behavior and explains some quanta phenomena. Those authorities accepted the later theory and a new theory "-wave model" was built.
      
However, we have to admit that not only from some subjective factors bias may also cause from some involuntary factors. For example, lots of judgments made by the contemporaries can not see their side effects in sort term. However, in long term, the side effect will appear. There is a miserable accident in the human history, with the discovery of thalidomide, a new drug believed by which, the pregnant lady can be released from morning sickness. It dose work effectively in reducing the discomfort. And inevitably, it soon became popular in upper class between European countries. Tragedy happened in 1950 but after 12 year people recognized what actually happened---statistic data shows a positive connection between thedrug and new oaf rate. 18 years later, people made sure that thalidomide is a teratogen which hurts the embryo development and cause fetal compromise. The seal fetus can not be cured at that time and it takes longer time for people to forget that nightmare. With that gloomy record, people take lessons from past events and strict the progress of the new drug production. From that day on, such misery rare happened in pharmacology history.  

In sum, by contemporaries, individual greatness can be judged both in today and tomorrow. But the judgment from those who live after the current time is more valuable as we can see the side effects in the long term. However, that should not be a excuse to stop our searching steps, in contrast, we should learn from past lessons and consummate the current judgment for individuals greatness.

[ 本帖最后由 zhangheng1020 于 2006-2-5 20:52 编辑 ]

dinddind2003UID: 196353

Issue 36 The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries
TOPIC: partly rejected
1 Greatness of individuals should be judged by an objective attitude which has no relation/connection with time.
2 Effects from which greatness was made as a judgment of its own can also be well recognized in the current time. is affected by the current constituents.  
3 Admittedly, lots of judgments are by the contemporaries, the effects can see in the sort term. However, in the long term, the side effect will appear, People's attitude might change in history.
4 in sum, by contemporaries, individual greatness can be judged. But the judgment from those who live after the current time is more valuable.

14:50~~ 16:27 however, 修改到刚才     652words   

The writer argued that the greatness can only be decided in the later time. From the contemporaries, individuals can not be judged. In my opinion, I believe, we can award a dead person by his historical record. The way we objectively warded/ raised the greatness of individuals is by its effects. However, though be less objective, lots of comments can be made in the current time. My reasons are as follows: （这段你的思路：我们能看出前人的成就---我们应该通过影响评价成功---当时人们也能看出成功，和你前面的提纲不一致啊，也许这段你不是想交待出文章的提纲吧）

Admittedly, any judgment should be made in an objective and scientific attitude. And the objective attitude comes from a promotion that rooted deeply under the belief of "truth is above all". Distinguished by some biases that after the contemporaries those who live after them can be absolutely objective, someone argues that only after one's death, the greatness can be decided. Those who believe that time will correct the bias is definitely wrong. Time and times again, in history, numerous facts told us the historical records were cooked by the government; past truth might be misled by the reign for his stable domination. And those elements as greedy or desire which effects the objective judgments will still exist in future. Think about the middle age, you can see those greatness from ancient Greek were juggled by the Roman Catholicism; the precious knowledge is forcibly hided and pirated by monks. The best artifices were made in Churches or castles for the praise of religion and region and the names of their creators were faded in time （你这段应该讲成功应该被客观的没有时间限制的观察评价，可是你的例子好像在证明时间不能陈清真理，你觉得这两个观点一样吗？）.   

In another way, following the principle that one should be honest to what he saw, the bias can be provided. With the development of human civilization, in nowadays, we have formed a mature scientific researching system which contents the strict science ethic. And an objective attitude is as a common sense that every scientific researcher should throw away personal emotions, forget about the race difference and leave the governmental benefits under the benefits of the whole human beings when judging the researching acknowledges. That rule is popular educated in every collage and followed by every lab. It makes it possible for an objective judgment for every individual achievement. Think about the formation of modern quantum theory, though mote supporters were against wave theory （quantum theory不等于wave theory）, after wave model suites the quantum behavior and explains some quanta phenomena. Those authorities accepted the later theory and a new theory "-wave model" was built （这段你的主题好像是现在人们可以正确评价一些成功，和你的提纲又不一样，不过这段的论点倒是论证的可以了，就是建议你把例子中的quantum theory改成wave theory）.
      
However, we have to admit that not only from some subjective factors bias may also cause from some involuntary factors （这句话有问题吧，语法好像不对哦）. For example, lots of judgments made by the contemporaries can not see their side effects in sort term. However, in long term, the side effect will appear. There is a miserable accident in the human history, with the discovery of thalidomide, a new drug believed by which, the pregnant lady can be released from morning sickness. It dose work effectively in reducing the discomfort. And inevitably, it soon became popular in upper class between European countries. Tragedy happened in 1950 but after 12 year people recognized what actually happened---statistic data shows a positive connection between thedrug and new oaf rate. 18 years later, people made sure that thalidomide is a teratogen which hurts the embryo development and cause fetal compromise. The seal fetus can not be cured at that time and it takes longer time for people to forget that nightmare. With that gloomy record, people take lessons from past events and strict the progress of the new drug production. From that day on, such misery rare happened in pharmacology history. （呵呵，好像就这段和你的提纲吻合的最好，论述也可以了）

In sum, by contemporaries, individual greatness can be judged both in today and tomorrow. But the judgment from those who live after the current time is more valuable as we can see the side effects in the long term. However, that should not be a excuse to stop our searching steps, in contrast, we should learn from past lessons and consummate the current judgment for individuals greatness.

说实话，看了你的提纲，第一段，以及各段后我真有点迷茫你的总体提纲应该是什么希望你下一次能在每段的第一句就是该段的主题句

zhangheng1020UID: 2130513

谢谢老大，其实，我每次写了提纲以后开始动笔，写到最后就必须要重新总结一遍提纲了，
在写作过程中，提纲已经变成完全和原来另一种不一样的了 ~~~~

然后，今天我就不写提纲直接写了，这样果然顺手了很多很多，我果然是传说中的“跑题大王”=== 竟然自己的提纲都可以完全跑调。

However, we have to admit that not only from some subjective factors， bias were also caused by  some involuntary factors. (这里应改用虚拟语气的，谢谢！)

dinddind2003UID: 196353

呵呵，你的文章其实感觉像GRE阅读，长句啦词组啦难词啦都很多，如果主题再不点得清楚一些我真的看得有点累。