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guoshishuoUID: 2467577

TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
WORDS: 536          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2008-3-23 21:52:37

This statement concludes that the socialization of children determines the destiny of society while we are not clear of how to raise them who can bring a better society. I concede that socialization plays a vital role in the development of society but not as seriously as the statement intends. And actually, we are trying our best to cultivate children like that.
To begin with, socialization is only one factor that influences the society's future. There are amounts of other factors such as culture, moral, science and technology which will certainly have an impact on the development of our society. Without culture, we will lose ourselves in the flood of times. Without moral, the society will be a mass where a number of crimes happen every day. Also, without science and technology we cannot enjoy a better life. Consequently, socialization is a merely part of them all.
But socialization is really of great importance to our society. If we want to contribute to the society, we will have to know how to become a member of it. Thus, we can let others know our thoughts, new ideas which will do good to the development of the society because many inventions, excellent answers generate from discussion, which shows the strength of group rather than individuals. If children do not have a command of the ability to communicate with others, they can not express themselves, which, in many cases, will lead to misunderstanding. Children themselves will feel lonely and be even more out of words, from which we can see that socialization has the effect to exclude misunderstanding and gaps between people.
Admittedly, schools play an important role in the process of helping children to form their ability of socialization. Schools offer an atmosphere where can assist children to build their vale system. Teachers can give advices and indication. What's more, children can learn how to deal with their peers. They will know how to negotiate, bargain, compromise, even how to relieve the conflicts with others. From those behaviors, children will develop psychological and social maturity. And if they do not try those, they will probably be excluded from the group he hopes to belong.
Actually, socialization is a kind of emotional quotient whose importance is well known by more people. Mr. Li Kaifu, the vice president of Microsoft, once said and I paraphrase that emotional quotient reflects the self-control and coordinate ability , which includes relationship, group work, compassion, passion and self-conscience. There was a famous investigation including 188 corporations and their senior managers, which concluded that compared to the performances in the work, the impact of EQ was 9 times larger than IQ. Consequently, we can see the importance of EQ and its branch socialization.
In China, score seems to be the first. But we can see that more and more schools and parents have thought over their ways of education and place more importance on the socialization ability of children. They encourage their children to take part in more activities, learn to listen to others' advices as well as express their owns'. Also, parents and teachers can help children make a plan on making friends when they are too shy to show themselves to others.
Of course, it is not enough if children are equipped only with the ability of socialization. They also have to command knowledge and make use of them . Only when the two factors are combined together can children shoulder the responsibility to make our society better in the future.

jenniferganUID: 2443583

This statement concludes that the socialization of children determines the destiny of society while we are not clear of how to raise them who can bring a better society. I concede that socialization plays a vital role in the development of society but not as seriously as the statement intends. And actually, we are trying our best to cultivate children like that.

To begin with, socialization is not the only one factor that influences the society's future. There are amounts of other factors such as culture, moral, science and technology which will certainly have an impact on the development of our society. Without culture, we will lose ourselves in the flood of times(time). Without moral, the society will be a mass where a number of crimes happen every day. Also, without science and technology we cannot enjoy a better life. Consequently, socialization is a merely part of them all.

But socialization is really of great importance to our society. If we want to contribute to the society, we will have to know how to become a member of it. Thus, we can let others know our thoughts, new ideas which will do good to the development of the society加个逗号好一点, because many inventions, 用个and 比逗号好excellent answers generate from discussion, which shows the strength of group rather than individuals. If children do not have a command of the ability to communicate with others, they can not express themselves, which, in many cases, will lead to misunderstanding. Children themselves will feel lonely and be(去掉) even more out of words, from which we can see that socialization has the effect to exclude misunderstanding and gaps between people.

Admittedly, schools play an important role in the process of helping children to form their ability of socialization. Schools offer an atmosphere where(which) can assist children to build their vale(value) system. Teachers can give advices and indication. What's more, children can learn how to deal with their peers. They will know how to negotiate, bargain, compromise, even how to relieve the conflicts with others. From those behaviors, children will develop psychological and social maturity. And if they do not try those, they will probably be excluded from the group he hopes to belong.

Actually, socialization is a kind of emotional quotient whose importance is well known by more people. Mr. Li Kaifu, the vice president of Microsoft, once said and I paraphrase that emotional quotient reflects the self-control and coordinate ability , which includes relationship, group work, compassion, passion and self-conscience. There was a famous investigation including 188 corporations and their senior managers, which concluded that compared to the performances in the work, the impact of EQ was 9 times larger than IQ. Consequently, we can see the importance of EQ and its branch socialization.

In China, score seems to be the first. But we can see that more and more schools and parents have thought over their ways of education and place more importance on the socialization ability of children. They encourage their children to take part in more activities, learn to listen to others' advices as well as express their owns'. Also, parents and teachers can help children make a plan on making friends when they are too shy to show themselves to others.

Of course, it is not enough if children are equipped only with the ability of socialization. They also have to command knowledge and make use of them . Only when the two factors are combined together can children shoulder the responsibility to make our society better in the future.

yt-sophiaUID: 2342654

This statement concludes that the socialization of children determines the destiny of society while we are not clear of how to raise them who can bring a better society. I concede that socialization plays a vital role in the development of society but not as seriously as the statement intends. And actually, we are trying our best to cultivate children like that.（开头直接，意思明确，鼓掌...）
To begin with, socialization is only one factor that influences the society's future. There are amounts of other factors such as culture, moral, science and technology which will certainly have an impact on the development of our society. Without culture, we will lose ourselves in the flood of times. Without moral, the society will be a mass where a number of crimes happen every day. Also, without science and technology we cannot enjoy a better life. Consequently, socialization is a merely part of them all.
But socialization is really of great importance to our society. If we want to contribute to the society, we will have to know how to become a member of it. Thus, we can let others know our thoughts, new ideas which will do good to the development of the society because many inventions, excellent answers generate from discussion, which shows the strength of group rather than individuals. If children do not have a command of the ability to communicate with others, they can not express themselves, which, in many cases, will lead to misunderstanding. Children themselves will feel lonely and be even more out of words, from which we can see that socialization has the effect to exclude misunderstanding and gaps between people.
Admittedly, schools play an important role in the process of helping children to form their ability of socialization. Schools offer an atmosphere where can assist children to build their vale system. Teachers can give advices and indication. What's more, children can learn how to deal with their peers. They will know how to negotiate, bargain, compromise, even how to relieve the conflicts with others. From those behaviors, children will develop psychological and social maturity. And if they do not try those, they will probably be excluded from the group he hopes to belong. （家庭也可以哦，要是加上就完美了）
Actually, socialization is a kind of emotional quotient whose importance is well known by more people. Mr. Li Kaifu, the vice president of Microsoft, once said and I paraphrase that emotional quotient reflects the self-control and coordinate ability , which includes relationship, group work, compassion, passion and self-conscience. There was a famous investigation including 188 corporations and their senior managers, which concluded that compared to the performances in the work, the impact of EQ was 9 times larger than IQ. Consequently, we can see the importance of EQ and its branch socialization.
In China, score seems to be the first. But we can see that more and more schools and parents have thought over their ways of education and place more importance on the socialization ability of children. They encourage their children to take part in more activities, learn to listen to others' advices as well as express their owns'. Also, parents and teachers can help children make a plan on making friends when they are too shy to show themselves to others.（这一段结合自身很好哦）
Of course, it is not enough if children are equipped only with the ability of socialization. They also have to command knowledge and make use of them . Only when the two factors are combined together can children shoulder the responsibility to make our society better in the future.

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ellisUID: 2256846

TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."WORDS: 536          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2008-3-23 21:52:37This statement concludes that the socialization of children determines the destiny of society while we are not clear of how to raise them who can bring a better society. I concede that socialization plays a vital role in the development of society but not as seriously as the statement intends. And actually, we are trying our best to cultivate children like that.To begin with, socialization is only one factor that influences the society's future. There are amounts of other factors such as culture, moral, science and technology which will certainly have an impact on the development of our society. Without culture, we will lose ourselves in the flood of times. Without moral, the society will be a mass where a number of crimes happen every day. Also, without science and technology we cannot enjoy a better life. Consequently, socialization is a merely part of them all.But socialization is really of great importance to our society. If we want to contribute to the society, we will have to know how to become a member of it. Thus, we can let others know our thoughts, new ideas which will do good to the development of the society because many inventions, excellent answers generate from discussion, which shows the strength of group rather than individuals. If children do not have a command of the ability to communicate with others, they can not express themselves, which, in many cases, will lead to misunderstanding. Children themselves will feel lonely and be even more out of words, from which we can see that socialization has the effect to exclude misunderstanding and gaps between people.

个人认为，第2段和第3段的顺序交换下比较好

Admittedly, schools play an important role in the process of helping children to form their ability of socialization. Schools offer an atmosphere where can assist children to build their vale system. Teachers can give advices and indication. What's more, children can learn how to deal with their peers. They will know how to negotiate, bargain, compromise, even how to relieve the conflicts with others. From those behaviors, children will develop psychological and social maturity. And if they do not try those, they will probably be excluded from the group he hopes to belong. Actually, socialization is a kind of emotional quotient whose importance is well known by more people. Mr. Li Kaifu, the vice president of Microsoft, once said and I paraphrase that emotional quotient reflects the self-control and coordinate ability , which includes relationship, group work, compassion, passion and self-conscience. There was a famous investigation including 188 corporations and their senior managers, which concluded that compared to the performances in the work, the impact of EQ was 9 times larger than IQ. Consequently, we can see the importance of EQ and its branch socialization.In China, score seems to be the first. But we can see that more and more schools and parents have thought over their ways of education and place more importance on the socialization ability of children. They encourage their children to take part in more activities, learn to listen to others' advices as well as express their owns'. Also, parents and teachers can help children make a plan on making friends when they are too shy to show themselves to others.Of course, it is not enough if children are equipped only with the ability of socialization. They also have to command knowledge and make use of them . Only when the two factors are combined together can children shoulder the responsibility to make our society better in the future.

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