【12月-1月IBT综合备考活动】之【TWE写作】12月7日作业

LonelydanceUID: 2456465

Do you agree or disagree:People who do not work because they have enough money are rarely happy?
    Some people, perhaps most of us, want to get more and pay less. They dream of getting a large amount of money by accident, claiming those who inherit considerable legacy are most happy man in the world. However, there are also numerous cases where people, the fortune’s favored children, are not happy in their life with such a sizable wealth, having nothing to do except staying at home lonely and desperately. In this case, the so called blessing turns to be a curse, which supports those who hold the opposite arguments that “only those who pay much deserve a happy life”. I support the latter opinion.
      As for me, if I can’t work for my life, I will deem myself as a loser regardless how much money I posses. I believe that spending the money I get through my painstaking work is an enjoyable experience. Because I am acknowledged by the company or someone I devote to, I get paid. I can spend the money peacefully. Instead, spending the money which doesn’t derive from my work, I will feel guilty and unfair to others, who work harder but get less than me. With the thought, I can’t be happy.
   Under the circumstance, I will lose all my friends. They will look down upon me and even envy my “good fortune”. When friends gather around and talk about what’s going with them, some of them always complain about life. If I am asked about my job and salary, what should I say? I don’t want to tell them that I don’t need to do any work with a considerable fortune as if I show off myself before them. However, I don’t even want to tell a lie. Consequently, they will realize I am not in the same boat with them. With the feeling of disorder, they will keep distance from me. Without a friend, how can I be happy?
      Fortunately, I am not this kind of a lucky guy. I have a satisfactory job with a descent salary. I spend everyday happily with my family and friend, because I know I’ve got lots of work to do and many responsibility to take, I enjoy the feeling of being valued and paid off.

[ 本帖最后由 Lonelydance 于 2008-12-7 18:50 编辑 ]

jackallen0714UID: 2510951

Some people, perhaps most of us, want to get more and pay less. They dream of getting a large amount of money by accident, claiming those who inherit considerable legacy are most happy man in the world. However, there are also numerous cases where people, the fortune’s fortune favored children, are not happy in their life with such a sizable wealth, having nothing to do except staying at home lonely and desperately. In this case, the so called blessing turns to be a curse, which supports those who hold the opposite arguments that “only those who pay much deserve a happy life”. I support the latter opinion.

As for me, if I can’t work for my life, I will deem myself as a loser regardless how much money I posses. I believe that spending the money I get through my painstaking work is an enjoyable experience. Because I am acknowledged by the company or someone I devote to, 这句放这什么意思 I get paid. I can spend the money peacefully. Instead, spending the money which doesn’t derive from my work, I will feel guilty and unfair to others, who work harder but get less than me. With the thought, I can’t be happy.}        Z0^-?        ?H/l^

Under the circumstance, I will lose all my friends. They will look down upon me and even envy my “good fortune”. When friends gather around and talk about what’s going on with them, some of them always complain about life. If I am asked about my job and salary, what should I say? I don’t want to tell them that I don’t need to do any work with a considerable fortune as if I show off myself before them. However ->Meanwhile, I don’t even want to tell a lie. Consequently, they will realize I am not in the same boat with them. With the feeling of disorder, they will keep distance from me. Without a friend, how can I be happy?bbs.gter.netuN#B}!d'y.gl8?wrp

Fortunately, I am not this kind of a lucky guy. I have a satisfactory job with a descent salary. I spend everyday happily with my family and friend, because I know I’ve got lots of work to do and many responsibility to take, I enjoy the feeling of being valued and paid off.

个人感觉中间的论述过程可以更一般化一点，扩大到someone
整体感觉很流畅！！！

LonelydanceUID: 2456465

Because I am acknowledged by the company or someone I devote to,  I get paid   我想表达的是: 由于我对我所在的公司或个人的付出获得了承认,我才得到了报酬

ammyanaUID: 2529083

Some people, perhaps most of us, want to get more and pay less. They dream of getting a large amount of money by accident, claiming those who inherit considerable legacy are most happy man in the world. However, there are also numerous cases where people, the fortune’s favored children, are not happy in their life with such a sizable wealth, having nothing to do except staying at home lonely and desperately. In this case, the so called blessing turns to be a curse, which supports those who hold the opposite arguments that “only those who pay much deserve a happy life”. I support the latter opinion.这个开头不落俗套，我喜欢。|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE8f Y*_        ["Q]L        a3c
      As for me, if I can’t work for my life, I will deem myself as a loser regardless how much money I posses. I believe that spending the money I get through my painstaking work is an enjoyable experience. Because I am acknowledged（如果是认可的意思用recognized比较好理解） by the company or someone I devote to, I get paid. I can spend the money peacefully（freely）. Instead, spending the money which doesn’t derive from my work, I will feel guilty and unfair to others, who work harder but get less than me. With the thought, I can’t be happy.1M(D3u$X4V)z        kf
   Under the circumstance, I will lose all my friends. They will look down upon me and even envy my “good fortune”. When friends gather around and talk about what’s going with them, some of them always complain about life. If I am asked about my job and salary, what should I say? I don’t want to tell them that I don’t need to do any work with a considerable fortune as if I show off myself before them. However, I don’t even want to tell a lie. Consequently, they will realize I am not in the same boat with them. With the feeling of disorder, they will keep distance from me. Without a friend, how can I be happy?xy4x
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      Fortunately, I am not this kind of  lucky guy. I have a satisfactory job with a descent salary. I spend everyday happily with my family and friend, because I know I’ve got lots of work to do and many responsibility to take, I enjoy the feeling of being valued and paid off

语言很平实，也不是一般五段论式的作文，很生动，最后如果可以把你的个人感觉稍稍升华一下会更好留。。。。。。。。学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文

LonelydanceUID: 2456465

Thank you!!

xiaojing1115UID: 2578357

麻烦帮我批下7号的作文，轮到你哦，还没有改呢，大家一起加油