【12月-1月IBT综合备考活动】之【TWE写作】12月10日作业

LonelydanceUID: 2456465

  In our life, we face different choices that difficult for us to decide. I think the topic of the way to spend money is just one of them. Some people prefer to use their money for something long existent, claiming that it is wise way to save money. Others, however, used to spend their money on short term things, stating that it is the function of money to enable you get things you want at present. Although both sides have reasonable arguments, I prefer to support the former.
  If I get a large amount of money by accident, I will invest it on my education. First, if I get a advanced degree with the money, I can find a decent job where I get fair salary after graduation. What I get will outweigh what I pay. It is a profitable deal. Besides, I will get chance to receive professional training, specializing in particular field, benefiting for my whole life. In addition, I can also communicate with my college mate, making friends with them. You know, college is a elite gathered place, in which every one is so excellent that a load of merits and good way of thinking you can learn from them. With the precious wealth I can get by spending money on education, how can I waste it on short term stuffs, such as vacation, which just enjoy me for a blink of eye?
  If I have already satisfied with my degree, I will save the money in order to buy a BMW automobile. It has been one of my dreams to posses one. I imagine how proud I will be when I appreciate my car everyday. With its powerful engine, I can ride it on the highway with an amazing speed, seeing happily that all the cars are left behind in the distance. With its exquisite figure and renowned brand, I can show off it before my friends, enjoying envy showing in their eyes. I will be one of the happiest men in the world, realizing that it belongs to me forever, or at least, for a long time.
  In a word, I will spend my money for something that’s beneficial to my development, or, long existent to make me satisfactory about my life all the time.

transformersUID: 2307599

这篇没思路~看看你的文章借思路但是看了感觉有点跑题~~中间两段您写您有钱怎么花~~题名是二选一~~个人意见哈~~写去了~~

jackallen0714UID: 2510951

In our life, we face different choices that difficult for us to decide. I think the topic of the way to spend money is just one of them. Some people prefer to use their money for something long existent, claiming that it is wise way to save money?花钱能省钱. Others, however, used to spend their money on short term things, stating that it is the function of money to enable you get things you want at present. Although both sides have reasonable arguments, I prefer to support the former.寄托家园        i8J
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  If I get a large amount of money by accident, I will invest it on my education. First, if I get a advanced degree with the money, I can find a decent job where I get fair salary after graduation. What I get will outweigh what I pay. It is a profitable deal. Besides, I will get chance to receive professional training, specializing in particular field, benefiting for my whole life. In addition, I can also communicate with my college mate, making friends with them. You know太口语化啦, college is a elite gathered place, in which every one is so excellent that a load of merits and good way of thinking you can learn from them. With the precious wealth I can get by spending money on education, how can I waste it on short term stuffs, such as vacation, which just enjoy me for a blink of eye -> amuse me for only several days?|
     If I have already satisfied with my degree, I will save the money in order to buy a BMW automobile. It has been one of my dreams to posses one. I imagine how proud貌似有些不妥 I will be when I appreciate my car everyday. With its powerful engine, I can ride it on the highway with an amazing speed, seeing happily that all the cars are left behind in the distance. With its exquisite figure and renowned brand, I can show off it before my friends, enjoying envy showing in their eyes. I will be one of the happiest men in the world, realizing that it belongs to me forever, or at least, for a long time.这段的理由……貌似有点汗啊寄
       In a word, I will spend my money for something that’s beneficial to my development, or, long existent to make me satisfactory about my life all the time.

有些偏题，题目关注的是long-term和short-term

闹闹喵UID: 2500331

In our life, we face different choices that are difficult for us to decide. I think the topic of the way to spend money is just one of them. Some people prefer to use their money for something long existent, claiming that it is a wise way to save money. Others, however, used to spend their money on short term things, stating that it is the function of money to enable you get things you want at present. Although both sides have reasonable arguments, I prefer to support the former.


  If I get a large amount of money by accident, I will invest it on my education. First, if I get a advanced degree with the money, I can find a decent job where I get fair salary after graduation. What I get will outweigh what I pay. It is a profitable deal. Besides, I will get chance to receive professional training, specializing in particular field, benefiting for my whole life. In addition, I can also communicate with my college mate, making friends with them. You know, college is a elite gathered place(不地道，用a place where elites gather比较好), in which every one is so excellent that a load of merits and good way of thinking you can learn from them. With the precious wealth I can get by spending money on education, how can I waste it on short term stuffs, such as vacation, which just enjoy me for a blink of eye?（我觉得你这里理解的不大正确，题目所指的long-term是那些实物类型的比如珠宝啊书籍啊邮票啊什么的，你这里说的education其实也属于short-term，它最多也只能last a couple of years吧）

  If I have （am） already satisfied with my degree, I will save the money in order to buy a BMW automobile. It has been one of my dreams to posses one. I imagine how proud I will be when I appreciate my car everyday. With its powerful engine, I can ride it on the highway with an amazing speed, seeing happily that all the cars are left behind in the distance. With its exquisite figure and renowned brand, I can show off it before(show it off in front of) my friends, enjoying envy showing in their eyes. I will be one of the happiest men in the world, realizing that it belongs to me forever, or at least, for a long time.


  In a word, I will spend my money for something that’s beneficial to my development, or, long existent to make me satisfactory about my life all the time.

着墨较多在你愿意在长久事物上投资，我觉得再加一段你为什么不愿再短期事物上花钱比较好