【12月-1月IBT综合备考活动】之【TWE写作】☆月☆12月12日作文

d596086UID: 2522476

Organization,
Thesis and support;
Unity and coherence;
Grammar and vocabulary.
Those are standards of TOEFL Writing Task, and every of which have 5 scores from WEAK to STRONG.
e.g. organization 5
        thesis and support 3
        unity and coherence 4
        grammar and vocabulary 3
Thus, total score is 5+3+4+3=15
给我打个分

12.12日作业：Topic:call:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People will spend less time in cooking or preparing food in twenty years than nowadays.
Body ( about 500 words ; using up to 1 hour)::)

Twenty years later, what the cooking will be like? Boldly imaging, people put fresh food into a heating machine and wave a finger pressing one button, then a delicious meals came out in few minutes; or even simpler, give a direction to a cooking robot, a plenteous meal will be prepared immediately. I am not a dreamer, according to such rapid pace of technical development currently, everything is probably true in twenty years. So this development of cooking technology already decided the trends that people are able to spend less and less time in preparing food.

To prove it, let's look back the last twenty years. Twenty years age, to prepare a single meal, people had to do a lot of works: firstly buy vegetables and meets, raw and dirty, from food stand, then wash and slice them, finally fry them one by one. Besides, it is hardly inevitable to wash the dishes after meal. But now, things are entirely different. You can buy clean vegetables and neat meat from supermarket, some of them even have relevant ingredients. Were you put the food in the microwave or oven, only with a few minutes, you can enjoy a nice meal. And I can say without a doubt that in twenty later, more ready-made foods are offered in the market; more advanced machines are available to help cooking. These objective improvements make people in the future are much easier to cook than nowadays; at the same time, saving more time from cooking.

But something can be changed; something can not. From some sense, cuisine is a kind of culture, a traditional convention that can never be changed. Food-culture, which has been come down and spread for thousand and thousand years, still maintain its original mode, and definitely can not be replaced in the nearly future. Before Dragon Boat Festival, Chinese always use up to half a mouth  for preparing food by themselves: such as ZongZi or other flouring ones; before the Thanksgiving Day, almostly every american family will spend one or two days preparing dishes personally, including turkey and so on. People are not willing to save time from these kinds of cooking works.

From another aspect, the process of cuisine itself brings individual a special kind of joy. As for me, I enjoy learning cooking skills from my family after a long day working; I enjoy creating my own special recipes when I am boring; I enjoy sharing my tasty food with all of my dear friends at the night party. Nothing can allow me feeling better than a praise from my friends and family, and from myself. Cooking is a best way to reduce our work pressure, to hobnob with family and friends, and to taste the truly wonderful life!

In a word, although we can not change the current of cooking development that allow people saving more time from preparing food to do other things in the future, something undoubtedly can not be changed, the food culture is immutable, and the joy of cooking is eternal, no matter how long it is lasting: two years, twenty years, two hundred years, or even two thousand years!

[ 本帖最后由 d596086 于 2008-12-13 10:23 编辑 ]

nickey0809UID: 2349468

论证得很彻底……
科大的吧，我在那读过一年书呵呵

[ 本帖最后由 nickey0809 于 2008-12-12 23:32 编辑 ]

nickey0809UID: 2349468

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1
也请你多多指教了

d596086UID: 2522476

不是科大的。。。你学术能力很强啊，上过科大

那句改成：Nothing allow me feeling better than the praise from my friends and family
你说的没错，有问题

有2个句子颜色是蓝色的，你也没改，那个是什么意思啊？有问题么？

[ 本帖最后由 d596086 于 2008-12-13 09:38 编辑 ]

nickey0809UID: 2349468

蓝色觉得写得好呵呵

d596086UID: 2522476

哦啊，呵呵....最后一句写得挺满意的
下面是我姨娘的评价：
organization 4
thesis and support 3
unity and coherence 4
grammar and vocabulary 3
See partial correction of your grammar in red.  
The angles are right.  Modern technology will speed up the process in grocery shopping and food preparation.  But people also enjoy the process of traditional cooking.  To many people, cooking is a relaxing family activity.  ......
我费心写了那么长文章，给她一句话就完全概括了，佩服哦

chineseladyUID: 2403976

Twenty years later(In two decades) 我会用这个,呵呵, what the cooking will be like? Boldly imaging, people put fresh food into a heating machine and wave a finger pressing one button, then a delicious meals came out in few minutes; or even simpler, give a direction to a cooking robot, a plenteous meal will be prepared immediately. I am not a dreamer, according to such rapid pace of technical development currently, everything is probably true in twenty years. So this development of cooking technology already decided the trends that people are able to spend less and less time in preparing food.

To prove it, let's look back the last twenty years. Twenty years age, to prepare a single meal, people had to do a lot of works: firstly buy vegetables and meets, raw and dirty, from food stand, then wash and slice them, finally fry them one by one. Besides, it is hardly inevitable to wash the dishes after meal. But now, things are entirely different. You can buy clean vegetables and neat meat from supermarket, some of them even have relevant ingredients. Were you put the food in the microwave or oven, only with a few minutes, you can enjoy a nice meal. And I can say without a doubt that in twenty later, more ready-made foods are offered in the market; more advanced machines are available to help cooking. These objective improvements make people in the future are much easier to cook than nowadays; at the same time, saving more time from cooking.
But something can be changed; something can not. From some sense, cuisine is a kind of culture, a traditional convention that can never be changed. Food-culture, which has been come down and spread for thousand and thousand years, still maintain its original mode, and definitely can not be replaced in the nearly future. Before Dragon Boat Festival, Chinese always use up to half a mouth  for preparing food by themselves: such as ZongZi or other flouring ones; before the Thanksgiving Day, almostly拼写错误ery american family will spend one or two days preparing dishes personally, including turkey and so on. People are not willing to save time from these kinds of cooking works.sqt.b,ij]From another aspect, the process of cuisine itself brings individual a special kind of joy. As for me, I enjoy learning cooking skills from my family after a long day working; I enjoy creating my own special recipes when I am boring; I enjoy sharing my tasty food with all of my dear friends at the night party. Nothing can allow me feeling better than a praise from my friends and family, and from myself. Cooking is a best way to reduce our work pressure, to hobnob with family and friends, and to taste the truly wonderful life!
In a word, although we can not change the current of cooking development that allow people saving more time from preparing food to do other things in the future, something undoubtedly can not be changed, the food culture is immutable, and the joy of cooking is eternal, no matter how long it is lasting: two years, twenty years, two hundred years, or even two thousand years LZ写的很好作文方式有意思,值得借鉴.你是交作业迟了吗我2天前找你的没找到

chineseladyUID: 2403976

天啊 怎么这么大啊啊啊:funk:

d596086UID: 2522476

我按时交的阿