Issue38 求拍！第一次写作

twobirdsUID：113329

昨天报的10G，今天第一篇Issue。水平很菜，真诚求拍。希望能够指出些思路上的问题。我老觉得有些跑题。

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Issue 38 "In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books." [05/57; 06/3]

在电视机时代，阅读书籍已经没有原来那样重要了。人们从电视上学到的东西丝毫不比从书本中学来的少。

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字数：370；时间：未限时（因为昨天就选中了这个题目，并想了下提纲，今天下午才动手写）

Outline:

总的持否定态度，理由：

1、载体：书本更能够阐述复杂的理论，而电视不能；

2、灵活性：书本能够随时随地参考，电视播放的固定时间限制了人们获取知识的充分性。

3、内容：书本内容的选择倾向于主观爱好，而电视则是被编辑的过的，而且很多对观众无益。

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With the advance in technology, there are more media channels and options to get information and knowledge, like television, internet, etc. But the availability of other media does not impair the importance of reading books; neither does it can provide so much resource as books. Books have some superior traits that television lacks.

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Books perform better effects than television in recording scientific process and outcome, as books are able to elaborate complicated scientific theories in logical written words with data and diagrams. So it is widely adopted by scientists to publish their works in the form of a book instead of a TV program. Naturally, those who need to reference the scientific works will turn to books for related information. In real life, if I need to finish the graduation paper, I will definitely go to the library to borrow related books other than considering television will help me with the thesis.

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Secondly, time and place of reading books is more flexibly controlled by readers. If a person does not understand some meanings in a book, he can review it as many times and at any places as he wishes, while a TV viewer may not catch the whole meaning of a TV program or miss important content forever as TV programs are played in a scheduled time and usually for limited times by the TV station. In some sense, the things people can lean from television are restricted by television’s live broadcasting nature.

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Additionally, book-reading is more apt to a subjective choice. We can choose what we like to benefit ourselves from a vast book ocean. As for television, I have to doubt what indeed we can learn from it. Most television stations are run for profits. We are unavoidable to view unaccountable commercials which have little meaning to our life and we are not willing to watch. Lots of TV series are full of violence, which has harmful influence on the kids. The questioning of television’s content undermines the importance of TV severely.

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Admittedly, television also brings us some entertainment, like we can get latest news, live basketball game or vivid wildlife world through television. But books are still our prior source and a better way to get the information or knowledge.

[ 本帖最后由 twobirds 于 2007-8-4 09:42 编辑 ]

迷失的自恋者UID：2374122

语言偶不好，提点思路上的建议～（可能偶受新东方毒害深了＝ ＝）
开头再直接点切入电视和书本的主题就好了～
中间论述，我觉得题目侧重知识方面比较两者，就是说电视能学到的和书一样多，所以觉得第1.3两点好，第2点有点偏（＝ ＝）
如果先写电视的好处，我们能从电视学到的知识，稍微展开说下，就像结尾段，然后再说书，第1.2点。。。。（新东方＝ ＝）论述的时候展开的多一点字数就上去了
结尾再统筹综述下电视和书，差不多500字＋了

另外，感觉语言有点简单，因为偶看得懂＝ ＝。。。不过我觉得句型有些很不错啊～～

[ 本帖最后由 迷失的自恋者 于 2007-8-3 22:24 编辑 ]

twobirdsUID：113329

谢谢“迷失的自恋者”。
你提的意见非常的中肯，建议也很到位。
其实我当时2，3点论据提出的时候，就觉得不妥。
希望以后能够多交流！