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westcowerUID: 2123051

Topic: some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes, others believe that going to classes should be optional for students, which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer:


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When asked about whether university students should be requied to attend classes, some people think that students should be required to do so. On the other hand, others argue that classes should be optional for students. There is probably some truth to both arguments, but as a university student, I prefer the classes are optional. Three conspicuous aspects are as follows:

No issues for my opinion is more significant than that I can schedule my time to do the part-time job as well as the classes. For example, last term I must spent the day time of Wednesdays and Fridays on the job, but there were three classes on the Wednesdays afternoon. So when the mid-term and final examinations came, it took me all the time in the classes and no time in the job. During the days, I had to borrow money for my rents. So it will benefit me if the classes are optional.

It is another point for my penchant that there is more time spent in studying by myself if the classes is aptional for students. We must continute to learn skills after graduation, it is well known. And there is no better time than the university for us to improve our ability of teaching ourselves. After experience, we can turn to our professors for the difficultis when we encount.

Further, the best time to accept knowledge is different due to everybody energy, personal trait,and emotional concern. Some of my friends like to study after his roomates go to sleep, but some prefer to do in the day.

Admittly, there are plenty of merifs if the students should be required to attend the classes. Howere, as a university student, I believe the advatages will outweight if the classes are optional for the students.

sandyfriendUID: 157486

When asked about whether university students should be required to attend classes or not, some people think that students should be required to do so. On the other hand, others argue that classes should be optional for students. There is probably some truth to both arguments, but as a university student, I prefer the classes are optional. Three conspicuous aspects are as follow

No issues for (改为in)my opinion is more significant than that I can schedule my time to do the part-time job as well as the classes. For example, last term I must spent spend the day time of Wednesdays and Fridays on the job, but there were three classes on the Wednesdays afternoon. So when the mid-term and final examinations came, it took me all the time in the classes and no time in the job. During the days, I had to borrow money for my rents. So it will benefit me if the classes are optional。

It is another point for my penchant that there is more time spent in studying by myself if the classes is aptional （optional）for students. We must continue to learn skills after graduation, it is well known.(It is well known that we must …..) And there is no better time than the University for us [/color]( college times)to improve our ability of teaching ourselves.(自学的话是self-studying or study or learn oneself) After experience,(好像没这么说的，) we can turn to our professors for the difficultis when we encount.（这句是表达什么？ Turn to somebody for help?）With the improvement of self-studying ability, there is no need of often turning to the professors for help when we encounter difficulties.)  

Further, the best time to accept knowledge is different due to everybody energy, personal trait,and emotional concern. 这样说好不好，Due to the diversity of men’ energy, trait and emotional concern, the best time to accept the knowledge tends to be different. Some of my friends like to study after his roomates go to sleep, but some prefer to do in the day.[这里还可以展开说吗，定点上课对这些人不公平，他们的效率降低了等等]

Admittly,[admittedly] there are also plenty of merits if the students should be required to attend the classes. However, as a university student, I believe the advantages will outweigh if the classes are optional for the students.
字数好像少了点,把第四段展开一下就好了,语法也有很多问题,不过我改的不一定对.
再叫人改改把.

归来的虎子UID: 181060

truth to both arguments  to -> on

aptional -> optional

no better time than the university 前后不一致

difficultis？？

lz理由段分配有点不平均啊，第一段是否有点收不住了？

westcowerUID: 2123051

修改稿

When asked whether university students should be requied to attend classes, some people think that students should be required to attend classes, and others argue that classes should be optional for students. There is probably some truth to both arguments, but based on my experience, I prefer the classes are optional for me. Three conspicuous aspects about my issue are sa follows:

No isses for my opinion is more significant than that I can schedule my time to do the part-time job as well as the classes. For example, last term I must spent the day time of Wednesdays and Fridays on the job, but there were three classes on the Wednesdays afternoon. So when the mid-term and final examinations came, it took me all the time in the classes and no time in the job. During the days, I had to borrow money for my rents. So it will benefit me if the classes are optional.

It is another point for my penchant that there is more time spent in studying by myself if the classes is aptional for students. We must continute to learn skills after graduation, it is well known. And there is no better time than the time for us to improve the ability of teaching ourselves when we are in the university. After experience, we can turn to our professors for the difficulties if we encount.

Further, the best time to accept knowledge is different due to everybody energy, personal trait,and emotional concern. Some of my friends like to study after his roomates go to sleep, but some prefer to do in the day. When required to the classes at the same time every day some have nap and some will do others. On the other hand, if the classes are optional, the students will have efficient classes

Admittedly, there are plenty of merifs if the students should be required to attend the classes. Howere, as a university student, I believe the advatages will outweight if the classes are optional for the students.

westcowerUID: 2123051

原帖由 归来的虎子 于 2006-5-6 14:45 发表
truth to both arguments  to -> on

aptional -> optional

no better time than the university 前后不一致

difficultis？？

lz理由段分配有点不平均啊，第一段是否有点收不住了？

谢谢.改过了.

这种文章有没有详写和略写之分?

westcowerUID: 2123051

原帖由 sandyfriend 于 2006-5-6 11:12 发表
When asked about whether university students should be required to attend classes or not, some people think that students should be required to do so. On the other hand, others a ...

谢谢你详细的修改.,很多问题自己都看不出来.自己修改的时间把第四段改了一些.