Issue228 [黄金十二宫]第二次作业(5.26)----射手宫

njutleeUID: 2179673

TOPIC: ISSUE  228  
"The best way to teach - whether as an educator, employer, or parent - is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones."


My position :Both positive actions and negative ones should be treated attentively.
中文提纲：
1、开头态度：良好行为与不良行为都应该认真对待；
2、赞赏良好行为，可以提高自信，鼓励人们更加地努力；
3、如果不对好的行为赞赏会导致的后果；
4、过分的赞赏有时适得其反，适当的批评也是必要的；
5、批评的好处
6、最后总结：
(375 words)
The speaker asserts that the best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.  However, in my opinion, it is apparently hasty for him to reach such a unwarranted conclusion.  It is true that praising positive actions does benefit teaching greatly, but it is also important for those people to treat the negative ones seriously.  In fact, a balance should be called in which both positive actions and negative ones could be treated attentively.

I’m sure that most people would agree on the fact that praising positive actions would make people more confident in learing, which would actually arouse their learning interests and improve their efficience. As it was to me, I remembered that when I was a little boy my father often commended at my little achievements, which would be so trivial in the opinion of nowadays, but what my father did indeed had given me  great courage and pushed me fordward in those days.

Simply put, without praising positive actions, we would feel depressed and even have neither interest nor courage to insist on our aim, especially in a difficult situation. Though it may still be fine for some people to learn easily in a short time even without a single world of commendation , it would be more diffilcult for one individual to struggle in an enduring and abstruse area . In a long and tiring period, which seems tedious and hopeless, one may be dismayed and eventually lose his faith, even when there is only a small step away from the success. At that time, a praising word may have helped him through that dilemma.

On the other hand, over praising may be counterproductive in some aspects. When a man lives in a world all of praise and without criticizing, he would be so proud and narrowminded that he would not find his fault which is still in him. So what would happended to him? Possibly just stay where he is ,without developments.


To sum, without praising of positive actions, people become dismayed and eventually lose confidence and courage. Without a opinion that recognizes the importance of critisizing negative actions, people become overproud and narrowminded.  Thus, while our form of teaching necessitates praising, critisisng is equally important.

[ 本帖最后由 njutlee 于 2006-5-27 10:47 编辑 ]

njutleeUID: 2179673

本来昨晚写好了，想早上早点起来再看下再贴的，谁知一觉就到现在了！可能昨天在外边跑了一天好累啊，又睡那么晚，实在抱歉阿！
这是我严格意义上的第一篇Issue，阿，我看了都惨不忍睹，小魏妹妹尽情地蹂躏我吧，我已经做好心理准备了，等会我也去你那挑错去1:lol:lol
引用下渡渡鸟的话吧？ 此刻莫大的悲哀莫过于写issue 字数却没有a 多！  说实在的，我感觉我有两大问题，一-论据素材实在太少了，二--一些语言表达方式太生疏； 至于逻辑性上，我想大家问题都不大；  今后的努力方向应该是“高筑墙，广积粮”了，增加阅读量，多总结有用的句子与表达方式，另外多储备些论据

魏玛竹林UID: 2201594

因为上过XDF，所以评判思路基本是按老师讲的来的~~可是渐渐发现也不全那么对
但先这么着吧 起码严格些总没错 对吧
The speaker asserts that the best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.直接表达法开头，充分利用原题信息快且省时。但是最好把原句改一下 我写的是The speaker maintains that by praise positive behaviors and ignore negative ones a teacher--whether an educator, employer, or parent--could attain his goal effectively.请指正啦  However, in my opinion（老师黑榜上的话 说是my太主观 而I应该冷静公正客观 建议用someone’s）, it is apparently hasty for him to reach such a unwarranted conclusion.  It is true that praising positive actions does benefit teaching greatly, but it is also important for those people to treat the negative ones seriously.  In fact, a balance should be called in which both positive actions and negative ones could be treated attentively.

I’m sure that（前面去掉 又主观了） most people would agree on the fact that praising positive actions would make people more confident in learing（learning）, which would actually arouse their learning interests and improve their efficience. As it was to me, I remembered that when I was a little boy my father often commended at my little achievements, which would be so trivial in the opinion of nowadays, but what my father did indeed had given me  great courage and pushed me fordward in those days. (以亲身经历作为论据 但是要展开讲啊老大 你不是觉得没话说吗 此时不说更待何时呢 能写多详细写多详细 有力支持你论点的同时也可以用发挥出漂亮的句子——体现语言的水平——你的强项哦  )
Simply put, without praising positive actions, we would feel depressed and even have neither interest nor courage to insist on our aim, especially in a difficult situation. Though it may still be fine for some people to learn easily in a short time even without a single world（word） of commendation , it would be more diffilcult for one individual (没见过这么说的~~查了一下~~真的有列~~学到了)to struggle in an enduring and abstruse area . In a long and tiring period, which seems tedious and hopeless, one may be dismayed and eventually lose his faith, even when there is only a small step away from the success. At that time, a praising word may have helped him through that dilemma.（我什么时候也能写出这些句子呢。。。不过我会胡扯例子你就不会了吧 老大 你理论分析得这么好 随便扯个例子也好啊 就按你分析的 套上时间地点人物不就是半百字了啊 而且还可以趁机拽文。。。）

On the other hand, over praising may be counterproductive in some aspects. When a man lives in a world all of praise and without criticizing, he would be so proud and narrowminded that he would not find his fault which is still in him. （这句话。。我读着别扭）So what would happended to him? Possibly just stay where he is ,without developments.（论据。。。）


To sum, without praising of positive actions, people become dismayed and eventually lose confidence and courage. Without a（an） opinion that recognizes the importance of critisizing negative actions, people become overproud and narrowminded.  Thus, while our form of teaching necessitates praising, critisisng is equally important.

确实是很短~~因为没例子
积累肯定是没错的 恰当而且有深度的例子会让文章很漂亮
可是在还没积累到的时候 也不是没有例子啊 比如你提到了自己的事 那就仔细说说啊 只要切中要害 也不会比牛顿的故事逊色的 而且 按照老师的说法 历史典故 名人逸事名言 统计数据 什么都是可以编的 作文没有真实性 只要能自圆其说（当然 她的说法待考）但至少 讲讲“我小的时候”以及类比些普遍接受的现实总是可以的啦
很严肃批评（也是自我批评）： 这篇文章还是赶出来的吧 我都说不急了 你要是真那么忙的话 就更要珍惜每次写作的机会啊 交作业只是形式 花在里面的时间要值会来啊！！！认真写认真写！！！竹林很生气 后果很严重——这篇文章必须动大手术——直到很好，有很多漂亮的句子给我学习为止。

[ 本帖最后由 魏玛竹林 于 2006-5-27 14:23 编辑 ]

魏玛竹林UID: 2201594

中文提纲：
1、开头态度：良好行为与不良行为都应该认真对待；
2、赞赏良好行为，可以提高自信，鼓励人们更加地努力；
3、如果不对好的行为赞赏会导致的后果；
4、过分的赞赏有时适得其反，适当的批评也是必要的；
5、批评的好处
6、最后总结：


审题的问题我不确定 但还是说说我的看法吧
题目那句话提出   
。。。是 TO TEACH的BEST WAY
这属于价值判断类的题目
我们讨论的重点是 到底是不是BEST
所以感觉LEE有些跑题

以上纯属个人看法 待考证~~

asong2004UID: 2178054

因为上过XDF，所以评判思路基本是按老师讲的来的~~可是渐渐发现也不全那么对
但先这么着吧 起码严格些总没错 对吧
The speaker asserts that the best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.直接表达法开头，充分利用原题信息快且省时。但是最好把原句改一下 我写的是The speaker maintains that by praise positive behaviors and ignore negative ones a teacher--whether an educator, employer, or parent--could attain his goal effectively.请指正啦  However, in my opinion（老师黑榜上的话 说是my太主观 而I应该冷静公正客观 建议用someone’s）, it is apparently hasty for him to reach such a unwarranted conclusion.  It is true that praising positive actions does benefit teaching greatly, but it is also important for those people to treat the negative ones seriously.  In fact, a balance should be called in which both positive actions and negative ones could be treated attentively.

I’m sure that（前面去掉 又主观了） most people would agree on the fact that praising positive actions would make people （have）more confident in learing（learning）, which would actually arouse their learning interests and improve their efficience.( 从句修饰谁？信心？那么它也是有助于提高学习兴趣吧help or conduce )As it was to me, I remembered that when I was a little boy my father often commended at my little achievements, which would be so trivial in the opinion of nowadays, but what my father did indeed had given me  great courage and pushed me fordward in those days. (以亲身经历作为论据 但是要展开讲啊老大 你不是觉得没话说吗 此时不说更待何时呢 能写多详细写多详细 有力支持你论点的同时也可以用发挥出漂亮的句子——体现语言的水平——你的强项哦  )
Simply put, without praising positive actions, we would feel depressed and even have neither interest nor courage to insist on our aim, especially in a difficult situation. Though it may still be fine for some people to learn easily in a short time even without a single world（word） of commendation , it would be more diffilcult for one individual (没见过这么说的~~查了一下~~真的有列~~学到了)to struggle in an enduring and abstruse area . In a long and tiring period, which seems tedious and hopeless, one may be dismayed and eventually lose his faith, even when there is only a small step away from the success. At that time, a praising word may have helped him through that dilemma.（我什么时候也能写出这些句子呢。。。不过我会胡扯例子你就不会了吧 老大 你理论分析得这么好 随便扯个例子也好啊 就按你分析的 套上时间地点人物不就是半百字了啊 而且还可以趁机拽文。。。）

On the other hand, over praising may be counterproductive in some aspects. When a man lives in a world all of praise and（这个and？） without criticizing, he would be so proud and narrowminded that he would not find his fault which is still in him. （这句话。。我读着别扭）So what would happended to him? Possibly just stay where he is ,without developments.（论据。。。）


To sum, without praising of positive actions, people become dismayed（dismay是不及物的吧） and eventually lose confidence and courage. Without a（an） opinion that recognizes the importance of critisizing negative actions, people become overproud and narrowminded.  Thus, while our form of teaching necessitates praising, critisisng is equally important.（感觉一样重要这种说法好像是中国人说的）

确实是很短~~因为没例子
积累肯定是没错的 恰当而且有深度的例子会让文章很漂亮
可是在还没积累到的时候 也不是没有例子啊 比如你提到了自己的事 那就仔细说说啊 只要切中要害 也不会比牛顿的故事逊色的 而且 按照老师的说法 历史典故 名人逸事名言 统计数据 什么都是可以编的 作文没有真实性 只要能自圆其说（当然 她的说法待考）但至少 讲讲“我小的时候”以及类比些普遍接受的现实总是可以的啦
很严肃批评（也是自我批评）： 这篇文章还是赶出来的吧 我都说不急了 你要是真那么忙的话 就更要珍惜每次写作的机会啊 交作业只是形式 花在里面的时间要值会来啊！！！认真写认真写！！！竹林很生气 后果很严重——这篇文章必须动大手术——直到很好，有很多漂亮的句子给我学习为止。


老大很有文才啊,呵呵就是例子再多些就好了

[ 本帖最后由 asong2004 于 2006-5-27 17:46 编辑 ]