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TOPIC: ISSUE7 - "The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."
WORDS: 481          TIME: 上午 12:45:00          DATE: 2007-2-14
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Has the video camera become a more important form of documentation than written records? The author says yes in that it provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life. Though I can not overlook the video camera's influence to contemporary documentation methods, I still concede that it pales in comparison to written records.

In such a digital world, video camera plays as a high-tech role in contemporary society, influencing our life to a broad extent. The convenience, accuracy, activity it provides for us convince people to acknowledge its effort. As we know, people thank scientists for bringing in camera for us to document individual's portray, the world history with accurate pictures. Without camera's convenience for schlepping, less astonishing photos in World War 2 would remain in the world to arouse the longing for peace in people's soul. More hi-tech than camera, the video camera brings about active pictures for us with more astonishing impression. Further, it has been utilized in special science fields such as space technology, which can document the change on the earth in each second. So the video camera's devotion to the contemporary world should not be neglected.

However, it is also a high-cost facility to possess which render it with limited popularity. Maybe the video camera is a popular facility in developed country, but it is truly unpopular in undeveloped country. It is doubted that Africans can afford the expensive cost to convey their poverty and famine to the world. Then though the video camera can be afforded in developing country in science, politics, media and so forth, it is hard to be prevalent in common families. On the contrary, the documentation for ordinary people is absolutely necessary which was categorized as "folk culture". And in these cases, some low-cost products such as papers and pens can be widely used for documentation.

Moreover, high-tech products always face the problem of fading away in the time splitting. For example, walkman was a common set decades of years ago, but now, when it pales in comporison with mp3, cd walkman and so on, old tapes gradually were eliminated in out life. Similarly, video tapes will probably disappear from the earth. Even though some rare documentation will still remain, the same as long-playing phonograph record which can only be played on expensive phonographs, the video record will fade away from our eyes finally. Nonetheless, though it is hard to understand some ancient languages, most of the written records which have been preserved for thousands of years can be read by nowaday people. Furthermore, the culture merit of written records such as rhythm in poems, artist conception in calligraphy and so on can not be replaced by video records.

To sum up, it is not sagacious to draw the conclusion that the video camera is more important for documentation than written records though its influence can not be overlooked.
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Has the video camera become a more important form of documentation than written records? The author says yes in that it provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life. Though I can not overlook the video camera's influence to contemporary documentation methods, I still concede that it pales好词 in comparison to written records.
In such a digital world我怎么没想到, video camera plays as a high-tech role in contemporary society, influencing our life to a broad extent. The convenience, accuracy, activity it provides for us convince people to acknowledge its effort. As we know, people thank scientists for bringing in camera for us to document individual's portray, and the world history with accurate pictures. Without camera's convenience for schlepping, less astonishing photos in World War 2 would remain in the world to arouse the longing for peace in people's soul. More hi-tech than camera, the video camera brings about active pictures for us with more astonishing impression. Further, it has been utilized in special science fields such as space technology, which can document the change on the earth in each second. So the video camera's devotion to the contemporary world should not be neglected. 只是列举勒一些例子,没有作更深入的论证.
However, it is also a high-cost facilityGOOD to possess which render it with limited popularity. Maybe the video camera is a popular facility in developed country, but it is truly unpopular in undeveloped country. It is doubted that Africans can afford the expensive cost to convey their poverty and famine to the world好句子!. Then though the video camera can be afforded in developing country in science, politics, media and so forth, it is hard to be prevalent好词 in common families. On the contrary, the documentation for ordinary people is absolutely necessary which was categorized as "folk culture"组头的词汇积累还真是让我汗流如注啊@.@. And in these cases, some low-cost products such as papers and pens can be widely used for documentation.

这一段点出勒Camera的软肋expensive,并且分别从发展中国家和发达国家的角度论述,条例比较清晰.
Moreover, high-tech products always face the problem of fading away in the time splitting.这句太精彩勒,摘录下来!! For example, walkman was a common set decades of years ago, but now, when it pales in comparison with mp3, cd walkman and so on, old tapes gradually were eliminated in out life. Similarly这个词用的好起到承接的作用^_^, video tapes will probably disappear from the earth. 这里是不是应该加上一句At that time 或者When that day comes之类的话承接一下Even though some rare documentation will still remain, the as same as long-playing phonograph这你都知道-.-~!@#$$%^&无敌勒你... record which can only be played on expensive phonographs, the video record will fade away from our eyes finally.

……………………………………………………………………以上全说的video,显然下面关于written record的内容过少,显得不平衡.


这里另起一段比较好,毕竟说的是两个问题 Nonetheless, though it is hard to understand some ancient languages, most of the written records which have been preserved for thousands of years can be read by nowadays people. Furthermore, the culture merit/对比我的culture value的低级用法-.-! of written records such as rhythm in poems, artist artistic conception in calligraphy and so on can not be replaced by video records.
To sum up, it is not sagacious to draw the conclusion that the video camera is more important for documentation than written records though its influence can not be overlooked.
结论只是简单复述论点,没有进一步引申.


我是抱着学习的目的来改组头的文章的,字里行间有很多牛词赶紧拿小本记下来.

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发表于 2007-2-15 14:16:32 |只看该作者
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It is doubted that Africans can afford the expensive cost to convey their poverty and famine to the world
that 和Africans 之间是不是要用个if或者whether之类的?我不是很清楚?

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