issue103 51互助组第4次作业 by ruczephyr

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题目：ISSUE103 - "The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."
字数：932       用时：01:14:17          日期：2007-6-4 20:19:45

Are the historical studies valuable only when they meet the needs of our daily lives, or at least have certain relations? Concerning this issue, fundamentally I am prone to assert that the studies of history, whether they are directly relevant to our daily lives or not, are of much benefit. Or else, no one would waste research resources to make inquire in the field which are useless to human beings.

Obviously, historical studies ,which have direct relations with daily lives of the public, are proved to provide us guide or assistance in outlining our life styles. An illustrating example involves that in ancient times, the Nile River flooded regularly every year, which not only destroyed house and yards of the people living nearby the river, but also carried with great amounts of nutrition to fertilize the soil. Naturally, sages of ancient Egypt carefully researched the flooding rules of the Nile River according to historical records, and made corresponding laws to inform the public when to keep away from the river and when to come back to restart their agriculture on the soil with nutrition.  Thus, suppose there was nobody to research the rules of Nile River, the result would, inevitably, turned out to be that when flood came, all Egyptian near the river had little time to escape from great danger, and they not only had their home destroyed, but even unfortunately lost their lives, let alone to enjoy the nutritional endeavor of the Nile River. Under this circumstance, researches of history could draw regular laws to guide the people how to get rid of misfortune and how to further promote living quality.

However, that is not to neglect the significance that the kind of historical studies which are irrelevant directly to our daily lives have on us. Hereby, I would claim that such kinds of historical studies are still able to admonish political leaders and the government not to follow evil way, but to copy beneficial examples of the ancestors. Consider, for example, studies and researches on one of the greatest tragedies in human history- The Second World War have warned German not to go on with Hitler’s fanatical activities to conquest the whole world. Fortunately, recently the Germany government has made much introspection of the guiltiness their ancestors once made. Accordingly, except for only a small proportion of Nazism zealots, the whole Europe has got rid of the nightmare of Nazism, which would eliminate significant obstacles on the way to world peace. Obviously, studies of this kind are not have close relation with the most ordinary public, for they, to some extant, only offer macro guide to the government in contrast to give direct regulation to citizens to form their ways of lives. While, indeed, these studies make extrordinary contributions to avoid disasters to grant safe and comfortable living environment for human beings.

What is more, the studies on history also have the ability to maintain cultures, and then soothe cultural loneness of the public. And such kind of studies, to much extent, are irrelevant to our daily lives, for we would seldom have deep thought about how did our ancestors live or the importance of certain historical events. Even though we may linger here and there in some historical spots, so little do we think about the background of such spots or their positions in history. More or less, we need to confess that we just consider them as direct sensual joy or satisfaction, instead of going to the level of historical studies. Thus, I can assert such kind is still irrelevant to the most ordinary lives.  However, such studies make history traceable, and then the very studies are able to soothe the serious loneness that we know nothing about our ancestors and our fathers were not with us. Consider, for instance, the history of The Summer Palace would not only lead us to admire the uniquely intelligence of ancient Chinese people, but reveals the tragedy of invasions. And the artwork presented in The Summer Palace also silently but impetuously tell their prosperity and pity faith, which inspires the desire to guard our motherland.When asked , we all have confidence not to confront denouncement for deserting our ancestors, or in other words, being deserted by our ancestors. So based on the comment above, the kind of historical studies, even though with little close relation with daily lives of the public, are still of much value.

While, I still need to confront a question that is there definitely no study of history has little or even no value, for I can not include all possible aspects of historical studies. Here I am not inclined to worship Hegel's aphorism" exist namely the truth", however, I would be for the point that without certain value, the amount of resource spent on studies of any kind would only turn to be a waste. Though, some zealots of a certain subject, which few people would babble in and in the eyes of the public would be entirely useless, would pursue their aim disregarding great loss or waste of material resources, they, to some extent, are just pursuing to obtain individual value and self-satisfaction by reaching their aim. To some extent, that is a certain form of value. As a result, there would never exist studies of no value at all, albeit that the amount of value-much or little- might differ from positions of each individual.

To sum up, historical studies no matter have direct or indirect relations with our daily lives, and the point would be that diverse individuals may have different judging criterions.

[ 本帖最后由 ruczephyr 于 2007-6-5 23:09 编辑 ]

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Are the historical studies valuable only when they meet the needs of our daily lives, or at least have certain relations? Concerning this issue, fundamentally I am prone to assert that the studies of history, whether they are directly relevant to our daily lives or not, are of much benefit. Or else, no one would waste research resources to make inquire in the field which are useless to human beings.

Obviously, historical studies ,which have direct relations with daily lives of the public, are proved to provide us guide or assistance in outlining our life styles. An illustrating example involves that in ancient times, the Nile River flooded regularly every year, which not only destroyed house and yards of the people living nearby the river, but also carried with great amounts of nutrition to fertilize the soil. Naturally, sages of ancient Egypt carefully researched the flooding rules of the Nile River according to historical records, and made corresponding laws to inform the public when to keep away from the river and when to come back to restart their agriculture on the soil with nutrition.  Thus, suppose there was nobody to research the rules of Nile River, the result would, inevitably, turned out to be that when flood came, all Egyptian near the river had little time to escape from great danger, and they not only had their home destroyed, but even unfortunately lost their lives, let alone to enjoy the nutritional endeavor of the Nile River. Under this circumstance, researches of history could draw regular laws to guide the people how to get rid of misfortune and how to further promote living quality. 作者写作能力挺好，知识面也够可以，但是，无用论述太多了，前面讲故事太详细，这样不是在写议论文了，成了记叙文后面加点评论，不符合AW的要求。AW中事例的作用是扶持TS，不能够喧宾夺主，看了那么多，怎样support TS的部分迟迟不出现。废话太多

However, that is not to neglect the significance that the kind of hiorical studies which are irrelevant directly to our daily lives have on us. Hereby, I would claim that such kinds of historical studies are still able to admonish political leaders and the government not to follow evil way, but to copy beneficial examples of the ancestors. Consider, for example, studies and researches on one of the greatest tragedies in human history- The Second World War have warned German not to go on with Hitler’s fanatical activities to conquest the whole world. Fortunately, recently the Germany government has made much introspection of the guiltiness their ancestors once made. Accordingly, except for only a small proportion of Nazism zealots, the whole Europe has got rid of the nightmare of Nazism, which would eliminate significant obstacles on the way to world peace. Obviously, studies of this kind are not have close relation with the most ordinary public, for they, to some extant, only offer macro guide to the government in contrast to give direct regulation to citizens to form their ways of lives. While, indeed, these studies make extrordinary contributions to avoid disasters to grant safe and comfortable living environment for human beings.

What is more, the studies on history also have the ability to maintain cultures, and then soothe cultural loneness of the public. And such kind of studies, to much extent, are irrelevant to our daily lives, for we would seldom have deep thought about how did our ancestors live or the importance of certain historical events. Even though we may linger here and there in some historical spots, so little do we think about the background of such spots or their positions in history. More or less, we need to confess that we just consider them as direct sensual joy or satisfaction, instead of going to the level of historical studies. Thus, I can assert such kind is still irrelevant to the most ordinary lives.  However, such studies make history traceable, and then the very studies are able to soothe the serious loneness that we know nothing about our ancestors and our fathers were not with us. Consider, for instance, the history of The Summer Palace would not only lead us to admire the uniquely intelligence of ancient Chinese people, but reveals the tragedy of invasions. And the artwork presented in The Summer Palace also silently but impetuously tell their prosperity and pity faith, which inspires the desire to guard our motherland.When asked , we all have confidence not to confront denouncement for deserting our ancestors, or in other words, being deserted by our ancestors. So based on the comment above, the kind of historical studies, even though with little close relation with daily lives of the public, are still of much value.

While, I still need to confront a question that is there definitely no study of history has little or even no value, for I can not include all possible aspects of historical studies. Here I am not inclined to worship Hegel's aphorism" exist namely the truth", however, I would be for the point that without certain value, the amount of resource spent on studies of any kind would only turn to be a waste. Though, some zealots of a certain subject, which few people would babble in and in the eyes of the public would be entirely useless, would pursue their aim disregarding great loss or waste of material resources, they, to some extent, are just pursuing to obtain individual value and self-satisfaction by reaching their aim. To some extent, that is a certain form of value. As a result, there would never exist studies of no value at all, albeit that the amount of value-much or little- might differ from positions of each individual.

To sum up, historical studies no matter have direct or indirect relations with our daily lives, and the point would be that diverse individuals may have different judging criterions.

整个文章看下来，写作很认真，很努力，写得文章水平也是不错的，最大的问题就是不符合AW的要求，issue是立论文，摆出观点，论证观点，总结陈述，这就是issue要完成的工作，一切与这三部关系不紧密的内容都不要写。
写作前lz想了很多，想得也很仔细，并且知识面丰富，但是，效果并不是很好。
建议这样做，拿到题目，想，漫无目的想，想到什么记下来什么，然后，看着纸上记得，开始筛选，偏向哪一方论点的思想多，就这样确定主题。确定下主题，想想，我所能够写出来的这些，可以分为怎样的TS，论据哪些是支持TS的，怎样支持的，怎样写出来最令人信服？
写issue就是在说服考官接受你的观点，不是在给考官讲故事，所以，陈述论据一定要简练，简练，简练，不能够支持TS的部分不要写

这样做，lz试试看

参考提纲：
First of all, to study history is to look at a road map of human behavior that has led us to where we are today in the world. For example, the lessons learned during all of the past wars can make for more effective wartime leadership by avoiding mistakes made by past commanders. From the ancient Chinese author Sun Tzu's book "The Art of War", today's military commanders and even business leaders gather valuable information that allows them to operate more efficiently and effectively.

Another example is that by studying history, parents can help to improve the lives of their children in the future.

Additionally, the study of medical advances made throughout history can be the foundation to build upon to make the medical advances of today and tomorrow to make people live longer and healthier lives.

A further example of the value of the study of history beyond its effect on daily life is the treatment of the environment and the earth as a whole

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斑斑辛苦了..

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Are the historical studies valuable only when they meet the needs of our daily lives, or at least have certain relations? Concerning this issue, fundamentally I am prone to assert that the studies of history, whether they are directly relevant to our daily lives or not, are of much benefit. Or else, no one would waste research resources to make inquire in the field which are useless to human beings.

Obviously, historical studies ,which have direct relations with daily lives of the public, are proved to provide us guide or assistance in outlining our life styles. An illustrating example involves that in ancient times, the Nile River flooded regularly every year, which not only destroyed house and yards of the people living nearby the river, but also carried with great amounts of nutrition to fertilize the soil. Naturally, sages of ancient Egypt carefully researched the flooding rules of the Nile River according to historical records, and made corresponding laws to inform the public when to keep away from the river and when to come back to restart their agriculture on the soil with nutrition.  Thus, suppose there was nobody to research the rules of Nile River, the result would, inevitably, turned out to be that when flood came, all Egyptian near the river had little time to escape from great danger, and they not only had their home destroyed, but even unfortunately lost their lives, let alone to enjoy the nutritional endeavor of the Nile River. （这缩减成两句话表达吧 太详细了 不像是在论证中举例子 如果嫌不够 可以再用一句话举个例子）Under this circumstance, researches of history could draw regular laws to guide the people how to get rid of misfortune and how to further promote living quality.

However, that is not to neglect the significance that the kind of historical studies which are irrelevant directly to our daily lives have on us. Hereby, I would claim that such kinds of historical studies are still able to admonish political leaders and the government not to follow evil way, but to copy beneficial examples of the ancestors. Consider, for example, studies and researches on one of the greatest tragedies in human history- The Second World War have warned German not to go on with Hitler’s fanatical activities to conquest the whole world. Fortunately, recently the Germany government has made much introspection of the guiltiness their ancestors once made. Accordingly, except for only a small proportion of Nazism zealots, the whole Europe has got rid of the nightmare of Nazism, which would eliminate significant obstacles on the way to world peace. Obviously, studies of this kind are not have close relation with the most ordinary public, for they, to some extant, only offer macro guide to the government in contrast to give direct regulation to citizens to form their ways of lives. While, indeed, these studies make extrordinary contributions to avoid disasters to grant safe and comfortable living environment for human beings.（尝试着用些小列举作为例子 觉得范文里特别喜欢用）

What is more, the studies on history also have the ability to maintain cultures, and then soothe cultural loneness of the public. And such kind of studies, to much extent, are irrelevant to our daily lives, for we would seldom have deep thought about how did our ancestors live or the importance of certain historical events. Even though we may linger here and there in some historical spots, so little do we think about the background of such spots or their positions in history. More or less, we need to confess that we just consider them as direct sensual joy or satisfaction, instead of going to the level of historical studies. Thus, I can assert such kind is still irrelevant to the most ordinary lives.  However, such studies make history traceable, and then the very studies are able to soothe the serious loneness that we know nothing about our ancestors and our fathers were not with us. Consider, for instance, the history of The Summer Palace would not only lead us to admire the uniquely intelligence of ancient Chinese people, but reveals the tragedy of invasions. And the artwork presented in The Summer Palace also silently but impetuously tell their prosperity and pity faith, which inspires the desire to guard our motherland.When asked , we all have confidence not to confront denouncement for deserting our ancestors, or in other words, being deserted by our ancestors. So based on the comment above, the kind of historical studies, even though with little close relation with daily lives of the public, are still of much value.

While, I still need to confront a question that is there definitely no study of history has little or even no value, for I can not include all possible aspects of historical studies. Here I am not inclined to worship Hegel's aphorism" exist namely the truth", however, I would be for the point that without certain value, the amount of resource spent on studies of any kind would only turn to be a waste. Though, some zealots of a certain subject, which few people would babble in and in the eyes of the public would be entirely useless, would pursue their aim disregarding great loss or waste of material resources, they, to some extent, are just pursuing to obtain individual value and self-satisfaction by reaching their aim. To some extent, that is a certain form of value. As a result, there would never exist studies of no value at all, albeit that the amount of value-much or little- might differ from positions of each individual.

To sum up, historical studies no matter have direct or indirect relations with our daily lives, and the point would be that diverse individuals may have different judging criterions.

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题目：ISSUE103 - "The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."
字数：932       用时：01:14:17          日期：2007-6-4 20:19:45

Are the historical studies valuable only when they meet the needs of our daily lives, or at least have certain relations? Concerning this issue, fundamentally I am prone to assert that the studies of history, whether they are directly relevant to our daily lives or not, are of much benefit. Or else, no one would waste research resources to make inquire in the field which are useless to human beings.这个开头写得很棒，句式精彩，很值得我学习啊

Obviously, historical studies ,which have direct relations with daily lives of the public, are proved to provide us guide or assistance in outlining our life styles. An illustrating example involves that in ancient times, the Nile River flooded regularly every year, which not only destroyed house and yards of the people living nearby the river, but also carried with great amounts of nutrition to fertilize the soil. Naturally, sages （红宝词汇，好啊）of ancient Egypt carefully researched the flooding rules of the Nile River according to historical records, and made corresponding laws to inform the public when to keep away from the river and when to come back to restart their agriculture on the soil with nutrition.  Thus, suppose there was nobody to research the rules of Nile River, the result would, inevitably, turned out to be that when flood came, all Egyptian near the river had little time to escape from great danger, and they not only had their home destroyed, but even unfortunately lost their lives, let alone to enjoy the nutritional endeavor of the Nile River. Under this circumstance, researches of history could draw regular laws to guide the people how to get rid of misfortune and how to further promote living quality.（例子举得很合适，也描述很详细，但是我也觉得偏长了点啊，可以概括一下哦）

However, that is not to neglect the significance that the kind of historical studies which are irrelevant directly to our daily lives have on us. Hereby, I would claim that such kinds of historical studies are still able to admonish （又一个红宝词汇）political leaders and the government not to follow evil way, but to copy beneficial examples of the ancestors. Consider, for example, studies and researches on one of the greatest tragedies in human history- The Second World War have warned German not to go on with Hitler’s fanatical activities to conquest the whole world. Fortunately, recently the Germany government has made much introspection of the guiltiness their ancestors once made. Accordingly, except for only a small proportion of Nazism zealots, the whole Europe has got rid of the nightmare of Nazism, which would eliminate significant obstacles on the way to world peace. Obviously, studies of this kind are not have close relation with the most ordinary public, for they, to some extant, only offer macro guide to the government in contrast to give direct regulation to citizens to form their ways of lives. While, indeed, these studies make extrordinary contributions to avoid disasters to grant safe and comfortable living environment for human beings.

What is more, the studies on history also have the ability to maintain cultures, and then soothe cultural loneness of the public. And such kind of studies, to much extent, are irrelevant to our daily lives, for we would seldom have deep thought about how did our ancestors live or the importance of certain historical events. Even though we may linger here and there in some historical spots, so little do we think about the background of such spots or their positions in history. （这句话写得好形象生动啊，佩服啊）More or less, we need to confess that we just consider them as direct sensual joy or satisfaction, instead of going to the level of historical studies. Thus, I can assert such kind is still irrelevant to the most ordinary lives.  However, such studies make history traceable, and then the very studies are able to soothe the serious loneness that we know nothing about our ancestors and our fathers were not with us. Consider, for instance, the history of The Summer Palace would not only lead us to admire the uniquely intelligence of ancient Chinese people, but reveals the tragedy of invasions. And the artwork presented in The Summer Palace also silently but impetuously tell their prosperity and pity faith, which inspires the desire to guard our motherland.When asked , we all have confidence not to confront denouncement for deserting our ancestors, or in other words, being deserted by our ancestors. So based on the comment above, the kind of historical studies, even though with little close relation with daily lives of the public, are still of much value.

While, I still need to confront a question that is there definitely no study of history has little or even no value, for I can not include all possible aspects of historical studies. Here I am not inclined to worship Hegel's aphorism" exist namely the truth", （这个名言引用在这里很恰当啊）however, I would be for the point that without certain value, the amount of resource spent on studies of any kind would only turn to be a waste. Though, some zealots of a certain subject, which few people would babble in and in the eyes of the public would be entirely useless, would pursue their aim disregarding great loss or waste of material resources, they, to some extent, are just pursuing to obtain individual value and self-satisfaction by reaching their aim. To some extent, that is a certain form of value. As a result, there would never exist studies of no value at all, albeit that the amount of value-much or little- might differ from positions of each individual.

To sum up, historical studies no matter have direct or indirect relations with our daily lives, and the point would be that diverse individuals may have different judging criterions.

水晶的issue，观点鲜明，例子引用非常丰富，语言表达更是让我佩服啊！！ 句式变化丰富而且很精彩! 只是，我也觉得例子描述可以再精炼概括些。其他的缺点，我实在是找不出来了啊！by candyyly