Issue185 【0710G-小猪快跑小组】第2次作业 by guangxu

guangxu3559UID: 2311047

Issue: 185 “Scandals-whether in politics, academia, or other areas-can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformers ever could.”

Words: 623         Time: 100 minutes

It is very frequent to hear some scandals from the media about corruption, crime, moral deterioration, etc, which can attract large amount of concentrations of people and become the focus of chatting. By being demonstrated to the public and monitored strictly, scandals-whether in politics, academia, or other areas can bring positive effect to the society.

First, scandals can be effective tools to force persons who make mistakes to realize their wrong doing and correct them. With the advanced development of technology, the mass media became more and more powerful, which can reflect almost all corners of the society, and report the news immediately. It is not strange that what you have done yesterday may be on a TV program tomorrow watched by millions of audience. Someone who has accepted bribery has to admitted to the public for his ugly behavior and receives punishment because of the effect that brought by the scandal, which gives him or her notorious reputation. For instance, Clinton, the former president of America, became the focus of the world in a period for his sexual scandal with Lewinsky-his secretary. Only by demonstrated to the public of this scandal has he acknowledged to the public for what he has done, although his wife has blamed him seriously and gave him some warnings. So we can see how effective the scandal is in revealing the wrong doings and bringing correction for them.

Second, it is no doubt that scandals can play an important role in protecting and monitoring all kinds of bad phenomenon in society like corruption, crime. Naturally, everyone is very pleased to win a good reputation, which is even the only aim of life. By considering the embarrass condition and wretched result of one who is punished for his or her scandal, the public is educated to obey the laws from conscious not just in oral. This ideal effect can not be obtained by the speakers of reformers who have making great efforts to call on the public to follow the laws even using the best results to persuade them, which gains only endless tiresome because they have heard them frequently and been accustomed to them. However, monitoring by the scandals and considering the effects brought by them, the public are spontaneous to obey the laws to regularize their behaviors, and then a harmonious society is formed.

Admittedly, there are some people who use the mass media to make them be famous to the public by making scandals. It is true that we admit the individualism but this does not mean that we can do anything just in our own opinion neglecting others' interest. Someone takes advantage of the curiosity of the public, who is boring with the regular news, and makes some scandals which can not be understood regularly, with the only help that his or her name can be known to the public. A case on this point is that there is a video widely spreading on the internet which records a procession of a young girl killing a cat by stomping the head of the cat with an ugly smile on her face while miserable crying from the cat. It truly attracts some people' curiosity but brings the loss of conscience and human nature of someone. Therefore, this kind of scandal can only bring some misleading to the society, which must be abandoned.

In conclusion, scandals truly play an important role in monitoring the behaviors of people, correcting wrong doing and educating the people to obey laws, which are sometimes more effective than the efforts of speaker and reformer. But we must treat scandals with a correct attitude, not always focus on them and give firmly no attention to whom that want to gain fame by making scandals.   


Issue: 142 "The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority."

提纲：
Authority dose not equal to the reality which means there are some deviations between them. It is a indispensable step of the approach to success to question the authority which is source if innovation and originality. So I agree with the statement that "The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority".  

First, authority does not always stand the reality, especially when it is manipulated by some interest group. Generally speaking, only the brilliant man who masters the highest level of the field can be an authority in this field. Taking the Ptolemaic system of astronomy as a case of this point.

Second, questioning the authority is the source of innovation and originality. The flaw of a theory can be questioned which gave some implications for the last success. Give the example of Copernicus and Galileo.

Third, questioning by any different opinion the authority can become more perfect. The authority must have the ability to treat any questions, or it can not stand up.

If we absolutely adore the authority, it is harmful to the development of the society.

In conclusion, by questioning the authority, we can analyze it thoroughly, rectify the defect of it and development it best. So we must have the courage to question the authority and by dong this the society will progress from it.

Issue: 160 "The most essential quality of an effective leader is the ability to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives. Any leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion will accomplish little."
提纲：
First, Sometimes it is meaningful for the leader to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives, which guarantees them to implement the policies in his opinion and avoid the influence which can hamper the implementation.


However, an effective leader must obtain the ability to hear the different opinions with patience and the courage to correct the mistake of him after accepting the useful advice from others.        

shalonbasUID: 2184474

By Shalonbas

Issue: 185 “Scandals-whether in politics, academia, or other areas-can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformers ever could.”

Words: 623         Time: 100 minutes

It is very frequent to hear some scandals from the media about corruption, crime, moral deterioration, etc, which can attract large amount of concentrations of people and become the focus of chatting [chat就可以吧]. By being [删掉]demonstrated to the public and monitored strictly, scandals-whether in politics, academia, or other areas can bring positive effect to the society.[感觉这两句话的连接有些生硬，而且第一段中只说了正面影响，与正文和结论段不相对应。所以是否应该在第一段中就把完整的观点表述清楚，将第二句改为一个让步的复合句呢？]

First, scandals can be effective tools to force persons who make mistakes to realize their wrong doing and correct them. With the advanced development of technology, the mass media became [becomes] more and more powerful, which can reflect almost all corners of the society, and report the news immediately. It is not strange that what you have done yesterday may be on a TV program tomorrow watched by millions of audience. Someone who has accepted bribery has to admitted to the public for his ugly behavior and receives punishment because of the effect that brought by the scandal, which gives him or her notorious reputation. For instance, Clinton, the former president of America, became the focus of the world in a period for his sexual scandal with Lewinsky-his secretary. Only by demonstrated to the public of this scandal has [did]he acknowledged [acknowledge] to the public for what he has [had] done, although his wife [might] has [have] blamed him seriously and gave [given] him some warnings. So we can see how effective the scandal is in revealing the wrong doings and bringing correction for them. [本段中心：舆论和大众的监督作用使得丑闻主角无所遁形，必须承认错误并改正]

Second, it is no doubt that scandals can play an important role in protecting [为何加protecting? 保护社会不良现象？]and monitoring [监督?] all kinds of bad phenomenon in society like corruption, crime [如果只是两个并列，那就直接加and好啦~]. Naturally, everyone is very pleased to win a good reputation, which is even the only aim of life. By considering the embarrass condition and wretched result of one who is punished for his or her scandal, the public is educated to obey the laws from conscious [consciousness] not just in oral [这句不太明白，是说公众从内心深处就要遵守法律而非仅仅停留在口上么？如果我没有理解错的话，感觉该表达似乎有些别扭，是地道的么？]. This ideal effect can not be obtained by the speakers of reformers who have making great efforts to call on the public to follow the laws even using the best results to persuade them, which gains only endless tiresome because they have heard them frequently and been accustomed to them. However, monitoring by the scandals and considering the effects brought by them, the public are spontaneous to obey the laws to regularize their behaviors, and then a harmonious society is formed. [本段中心：丑闻及其后果会给社会大众以警醒作用，从而使得大家遵纪守法。]

Admittedly, there are some people who use the mass media to make them be[删掉更好]famous to the public by making scandals. It is true that we admit the individualism but this does not mean that we can do anything just in our own opinion neglecting others' interest. Someone takes advantage of the curiosity of the public, who is boring with the regular news, and makes some scandals which can not be understood regularly, with the only help that his or her name can be known to the public. A case on this point is that there is a video widely spreading [spread] on the internet which records a procession of a young girl killing a cat by stomping the head of the cat with an ugly smile on her face while miserable crying from the cat [So 血腥的例子，狂汗~~]. It truly attracts some people' curiosity but brings the loss of conscience and human nature of someone. Therefore, this kind of scandal can only bring some misleading to the society, which must be abandoned. [本段中心：某些人利用丑闻来吸引大家眼球，进而提高知名度]

In conclusion, scandals truly play an important role in monitoring the behaviors of people, correcting wrong doing and educating the people to obey laws, which are sometimes more effective than the efforts of speaker and reformer. But we must treat scandals with a correct attitude, not always focus on them and give firmly no attention to whom that want to gain fame by making scandals.

[通读过后，俺的拙见如下：
对丑闻具有的正面效应提炼的两个观点不错，但对例子的驾驭能力还需要加强：第一个正文段中的克林顿性丑闻写得有些晦涩，第二段只有说理，不见例子，因此显得有些弱。
我很奇怪的就是正文中的让步段了，既然前面讲的丑闻的正面积极效应，那么让步中与其对应的应该是丑闻的负面效应才最为合适。作者为什么却提出一个某些人利用丑闻来提高知名度的观点呢？和前文如何形成让步关系？实际上，题目中给的信息已经比较明显了，即丑闻本身是带有极大负面影响的（比如政府受贿丑闻会降低民众公信力之类，这类例子也不难找）。
另外，即使假设这种让步关系存在，我建议以后尽量不要用那么血腥的例子，虽然我不确定考官看了会怎么想，至少我看着真的很难受。

作者的语言基础不错，复杂句（基本是宾从、定从和倒装）用的挺多，需要注意的是最好不要为了拉长句子而用，而且有些表达像是作者发明的，给人不太严谨的感觉：）

总之呢，Guangxu对文字的驾驭能力不错，能够把问题说得很转很完整，赞！我建议还需要在细节上多下点功夫，而且平时要注意对题目的思考和相应例子的积累。

互相学习，加油哈！！！]

[ 本帖最后由 shalonbas 于 2007-7-22 22:45 编辑 ]

ldongxpUID: 2311083

It is very frequent to hear some scandals from the media about corruption, crime, moral deterioration, etc, which can attract large amount of concentrations of people and become the focus of chatting. By being [删]demonstrated to the public and monitored strictly, scandals-whether in politics, academia, or other areas can bring positive effect to the society.[注意与后文的呼应]

First, scandals can be effective tools to force persons who make mistakes to realize their wrong doing and correct them. With the advanced development of technology, the mass media became more and more powerful, which can reflect almost all corners of the society, and report the news immediately. It is not strange that what you have done yesterday may be on a TV program tomorrow watched by millions of audience. Someone who has accepted bribery has to admitted to the public for his ugly behavior and receives punishment because of the effect that brought by the scandal, which gives him or her notorious reputation. For instance, Clinton, the former president of America, became the focus of the world in a period for his sexual scandal with Lewinsky-his secretary. Only by demonstrated to the public of this scandal has [did] he acknowledged [acknowledge] to the public for what he has [had] done, although his wife [might] has [have] blamed him seriously and gave [given] him some warnings. So we can see how effective the scandal is in revealing the wrong doings and bringing correction for them. [感觉表达有些汉语化，呵呵]

Second, it is no doubt that scandals can play an important role in protecting and monitoring all kinds of bad phenomenon in society like corruption, crime . Naturally, everyone is very pleased to win a good reputation, which is even the only aim of life. By considering the embarrass condition and wretched result of one who is punished for his or her scandal, the public is educated to obey the laws from conscious [consciousness] not just in oral. This ideal effect can not be obtained by the speakers of [or] reformers who have [been] making great efforts to call on the public to follow the laws even using the best results to persuade them, which gains only endless tiresome because they have heard them frequently and been accustomed to them. However, monitoring by the scandals and considering the effects brought by them, the public are spontaneous to obey the laws to regularize their behaviors, and then a harmonious society is formed. [观点不错，表达可以再推敲推敲]

Admittedly, there are some people who use the mass media to make them be[删掉更好]famous to the public by making scandals. It is true that we admit the individualism but this does not mean that we can do anything just in our own opinion neglecting others' interest. Someone takes advantage of the curiosity of the public, who is [are] boring with the regular news, and makes some scandals which can not be understood regularly, with the only help that his or her name can be known to the public. A case on this point is that there is a video widely spreading on the internet which records a procession of a young girl killing a cat by stomping the head of the cat with an ugly smile on her face while miserable crying from the cat [while the cat miserable crying]. It truly attracts some people' curiosity [好奇？attention?] but brings the loss of conscience and human nature of someone. Therefore, this kind of scandal can only bring some misleading to the society, which must be abandoned. [其实可以谈绯闻嘛~~]

In conclusion, scandals truly play an important role in monitoring the behaviors of people, correcting wrong doing and educating the people to obey laws, which are sometimes more effective than the efforts of speaker and reformer. But we must treat scandals with a correct attitude, not always focus on them and give firmly no attention to whom that want to gain fame by making scandals.

[沙龙哥批阅得太到位了，我没话说了，sorry

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