一起思考一道教育类雅思作文题

bqianaUID: 193168

不少学生来函问我此题，打算化点时间写一篇出来。

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Memorization of information by frequency repetition (rote learning) plays a role in education system to what extend do you agree or disagree.

信息的记忆来自重复的频率，那么机械学习扮演了一个重要角色在教育体系中！你同意吗？

lucy_zq2002UID: 177408

小猫初次写作，请bqiana老师指教！
不太喜欢firstly ,secondly ,可能思路有限：)
结尾草草收的，有点Chinenglish


It is a fact that memorization helps one to learn, to store and retrieve information .But I think it's not an effective way of learning and on the long run it doesn't do good to you as for developing such a learning habit.

The final goal of education is to make students use knowledge they have learned to facilitate and better understand their life. One probably shall not fully get the essence of knowledge without thinking or brainstorming, which can't be replaced by rote learning. Even if you manage to memorize it, you are not sure to tackle similar problems or more complicated ones. From this aspect, uncritical acceptance without real comprehension of what one reads or studies is not at least an effective learning.

Just ask yourself: "Why do you learn information?" If repetition is done only for memorizing, why not make access to advanced technology such as computers ? Advantages of computers in data storing and compiling is incomparable. Moreover, economizing labor and saving time is preferable for a sensible learner. Whereas if you learn in order to get good academic performance, rote learning is only a fundamental step .Without solid basis of knowledge , you can't go further. Also ,you learn for yourself, not for others, an active learner welcomes efficient learning methods ,such as compare and contrast, summary, so on and so forth, but not only memorization.

To sum up, rote learning is beneficial to learners but it only stays at a superficial level. Good knowledge structure demands us more to perfect !

bqianaUID: 193168

on the long run -> in the long run
it doesn't do good to you 避免用人称代词和口语句型
Just ask yourself: "Why do you learn information?"  避免提问
重复词汇learn
superficial level 和a fundamental step 不等同

小结：整体架构比较客观，句型变化较丰富；举例不够，所以有些抽象，改进后可拿7

GOOD JOB！

lucy_zq2002UID: 177408

My worries:会存在分段不够清晰的问题嘛？我没有第一，第二的举例，我的第三段似乎意思很多，是否需要分两段来写？我的考虑是布局上不适合再分段了，否则头重脚轻，其次我只能写这么多了：）

bqianaUID: 193168

建议每段的关键句出现在句首
至于第一第二排序可根据自己的需要来写，不必拘泥
第三段不需要再分段

lucy_zq2002UID: 177408

我喜欢机器猫的贴图：) 斑竹难得有这个风格的pp

weiyyUID: 191110

斑竹有什么好的冽字可以分享吗

bqianaUID: 193168

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