Issue221 熊熊的互拍组第一次作业--from 熊熊！

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issue221
221"The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."



学习历史的主要好处是去打破一种假象：不同时代的人之间是完全不同的。


大负小正，部分同意
I concede that the study of history can indicate that in different times there may be some same charicteristics among people.
However, I should claim that the study of history can also help us distingush different charicteristics of different times.
Further, other fuctions of history should not be overlooked.  


Issue221  第9篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：45分1秒     524 words
从2005年7月6日17时54分到2005年7月6日18时45分
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The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history.
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Is the chief benefit of history study is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from those who lived of any other time as the speaker claims? I concede that the history study can help us recognize some characteristics in common of different history stages. However I should assert that the speaker unfairly considers such function as the chief one, while neglects other functions of history including the opposite one, distinguishing people in different times.

To begin with, I agree with the speaker insofar that studying history can break down some bias and illusions, coming to recognize that there are some features in common though people are in different times. In every period of time, people may share some certain characteristics most of which are innate. And even evolving so many years, such features are still existing. Think about the crimes. Through history study, we will find the innate evil thoughts exist in each period time of human history. From Bibles we know there was seven sins, and from ancient record we know people in the past times also commit crimes like murder, ravage and so on. Even the most peaceful age, do the crimes exist. And other features can be also picked up at ease, like philosophy of love. People in each time would mostly like to share love with friends, relatives, and even unacquainted ones. Thus the noteworthy benefit of  history study is obvious. If we do not refer to historical remainders and records, studying historians' works, how can we in final understand such features? Therefore, history study will actually provide us such view of point in learning different past times, as is mentioned in the statement.

However, history could not only teach us people are to some extent the same, but also tell us in many circumstances, different times have different main characteristics. Looking through any history book, reading from pages of diverse ancient times, what can impress a person significantly might not be the common features, but the outstanding ones in each period. Most people could differentiate times of bloom and times of decadency, like in the European history. It is unbelievable that people will think people in Medieval is as same as those in Resonances either from a history text or the history common sense, the latter of which was mainly acquired through telling history stories. Thus, study history could also provide strong views of characteristic distinctions in each period. In sum, people may prefer to notice the eminent features when depicting a period of time, which history gives people much information.

Further, the speaker unnecessarily limits the chief function to a narrow range, which should be doubted. The benefits to study history are not only to compare between different times, different people, but also to acquire knowledge from ancient eminent individuals, learn experience from past accidents, get more information about our precedents, and even predict the trend of our society. In another word, the chief function cannot be generalized in one aspect. Studying more of history, we will find more to learn from it.

In conclusion, it is true that history will break down the illusion that people in different times have totally distinguished features. But it should also be mentioned that history could even prove the dissimilar features' existence, which is more appealing. In addition, there are many other chief benefits of study history which cannot be neglected. Without taking them all into consideration, the meaning of history study will be undermined.

neo_athrunUID: 2111270

Is the chief benefit of history study is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from those who lived of any other time as the speaker claims? (这个复杂的开头……感觉好像有语法错误，即使没有也容易看糊涂了，可以用what is the benefit of ... the author tell us that... but I...能好些吧) I concede that the history study can help us recognize some characteristics in common of  (这个短语没看懂不过应该能收吧？) different history stages. However I should assert that the speaker unfairly considers such function as the chief one, while neglects other functions of history including the opposite one (离得那么近就有一个one感觉重复了，嗯…考虑用以下facet 什么别的词替代以下？), distinguishing people in different times.

To begin with, I agree with the speaker insofar (什么咚咚？) that studying history can break down some bias and illusions, coming to recognize that there are some features in common though people are in different times.  (这个句子说的好~)In every period of time, people may share some certain characteristics most of which are innate. And even evolving so many years, such features are still existing. Think about the crimes. Through history study, we will find the innate evil thoughts exist in each period time of human history.  (这里说的有点黑暗，可否委婉一点？感觉主考官会觉得你也在说他有犯罪欲望)From Bibles we know there was seven sins, and from ancient record we know people in the past times also commit crimes like murder, ravage and so on. Even the most peaceful age, do the crimes exist. And other features can be also picked up at ease, like philosophy of love. People in each time would mostly like to share love with friends, relatives, and even unacquainted ones. Thus the noteworthy benefit of  history study is obvious. If we do not refer to historical remainders and records, studying historians' works, how can we in final understand such features? Therefore, history study will actually provide us such view of point in learning different past times, as is mentioned in the statement.

However, history could not only teach us people are to some extent the same, but also tell us in many circumstances, different times  (这里没有主语！注意啊！)have different main characteristics. Looking through any history book, reading from pages of diverse ancient times, what can impress a person significantly might not be the common features, but the outstanding ones in each period.(嗯……有时不错的论点，我怎么就想不到呢) Most people could differentiate times of bloom and times of decadency, (这里的differentiate 指的什么呢？不太清楚)like in the European history. It is unbelievable that people will think people in Medieval is as same as those in Resonances either from a history text or the history common sense, the latter of which (这个定语从句也有毛病，which指代了一个东西怎么还会有latter？) was mainly acquired through telling history stories. Thus, study of history could also provide strong views of characteristic distinctions in each period. In sum, people may prefer to notice the eminent features when depicting a period of time, about which history gives people much information.

Further, the speaker unnecessarily limits the chief function to a narrow range, which should be doubted. The benefits to study history are not only to compare between different times, different people, but also to acquire knowledge from ancient eminent individuals, learn experience from past accidents, get more information about our precedents, and even predict the trend of our society. In another (other就行了吧？) word, the chief function cannot be generalized in one aspect. Studying more of history, we will find more to learn from it.

In conclusion, it is true that history will break down the illusion that people in different times have totally distinguished features. But it should also be mentioned that history could even prove the dissimilar features' existence, which is more appealing. In addition, there are many other chief benefits of study history which cannot be neglected. Without taking them all into consideration, the meaning of history study will be undermined. (uedermine 这个词用得重了吧？ underestimate 就行了)

嗯……通篇乱拍了一番，不过自觉得还是拍得对的地方的
定语从句的which 指代 出现了几处争议，是不是写的时候想当然了呢？ 还是需要分析一下句子成分吧~
总的来说，分析很有体系，语言也出具规模了， 我也要努力了啊

sebarinaUID: 2108158

看看我给你拍的就知道你拍的轻了……

yurong84UID: 2120087

The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history.
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Is the chief benefit of history study is（重复） to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from those who lived of any other time as the speaker claims（虽是照抄题目但觉得很冗长）? I concede that the history study can help us recognize some characteristics in common of different history stages（貌似一般都说:sb have sth in common?）. However I should assert that the speaker unfairly considers such function as the chief one, while neglects other functions of history including the opposite one, distinguishing people in different times.

To begin with, I agree with the speaker insofar(这个词应该怎么用？) that studying history can break down some bias and illusions, coming to recognize that there are some features in common though people are in different times. In every period of time, people may share some certain characteristics most of which are innate. And even though evolving for so many years, such features are still existing(加两个字好像通顺些对吧). Think about the crimes. Through history study, we will find the innate evil thoughts exist in each period time of human history. From Bibles we know there was（were） seven sins, and from ancient record we know people in the past times（in times past----查到这个词组可以表示：很久以前） also commit crimes like murder, ravage and so on. Even during the most peaceful age, do the crimes exist. And other features can be also picked up at ease, like philosophy of love. (最好两句间来点连接？)People in each time would mostly like to share love with friends, relatives, and even unacquainted ones. Thus the noteworthy benefit of  history study is obvious. If we do not refer to historical remainders and records, studying historians' works, how can we in final understand such features? Therefore, history study will actually provide us such view of point（point of view?） in learning different past times, as is mentioned in the statement.
~~~我觉得提到你是想说人性都有恶的一面， 但意思似乎有点模糊，开始我还以为指的是人们对犯罪行为的定义呢~~~~

However, history could（改成can,较有力） not only teach us people are to some extent the same, but also tell us that in many circumstances, different times have different main characteristics(用vary with呢？). Looking through any history book, reading from pages of diverse ancient times, what can impress a person significantly might not be the common features, but the outstanding ones in each period. Most people could differentiate times of bloom and times of decadency, like in the European history---什么用法？. It is unbelievable that people will think people in Medieval is as（the） same as those in ResonancesRenascence  either from a history text or the history common sense, while the latter of which was mainly acquired through telling(reading?) history stories. Thus, study history could also provide strong views of characteristic distinctions in each period. In sum, people may prefer to notice the eminent features when depicting a period of time,  which history gives people much information.

Further(furthermore 好像好一些？), the speaker unnecessarily（unsuitably？这里有需要的含义吗） limits the chief function to a narrow range, which should be doubted. The benefits to study history----不大通啊？ are not only to compare between different times, different people, but also to acquire knowledge from ancient eminent individuals, learn experience from past accidents, get more information about our precedents, and even predict the trend of our society. In another word（似乎是 in other words）, the chief function cannot be generalized in one aspect(不知道怎么改能通顺一些？). Studying more of history, we will find more to learn from it.（可以考虑用the more ___the more___）

In conclusion, it is true that history will break down the illusion that people in different times have totally distinguished features. But it should also be mentioned that history could even prove the dissimilar features' existence, which is more appealing. In addition, there are many other chief benefits of study history which cannot be neglected. Without taking them all into consideration, the meaning of history study will be undermined（是不是太严重拉？只能说incomplete吧？）.

呵呵第一次拍砖
发现很多地方自己也拿不准，
觉得熊熊的思辩能力已远在我之上，只好抠抠字眼拉~~~
加油阿！

yurong84UID: 2120087

第四段开头：Furthermore~~~
居然把字体调成白色了：P

foreveraUID: 202035

小熊,文字上你已做的很不错了,不过我有另一种思路,也是对你文章的一些异议,题目是在说benefit是什么,而你的正文前2段都在说不同时代的人一样与否的问题,似乎与benefit有些差距,假如你第2.3段加上点:人们发现不同时代人性的异同之后,加以分析,然后和当今的社会相比较,取其精华,弃其糟粕,这样才能benefit humun being.所以说重点不在人性的异同,而是研究历史完了如何利用得到的这些结论.

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谢谢yurong和forevera~批注统统收下~

OddflyerUID: 209689

看了好久,我最怕issue了

Is the chief benefit of history study is[我也觉得这个地方的is有些问题,但不确定] to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from those who lived of any other time as the speaker claims? I concede that the history study can help us recognize some characteristics in common of different history stages. However I should[should 这个词来表达感情色彩吗] assert that the speaker unfairly considers such function as the chief one, while neglects other functions of history including the opposite one, distinguishing people in different times.[楼主的长句子太恐怖了,我看晕了都]

To begin with, I agree with the speaker insofar that studying history can break down some bias and illusions, coming to recognize that there are some features in common though people are in different times. In every period of time, people may share some certain characteristics most of which are innate. And even evolving[??,我不懂,应该是对的吧] so many years, such features are still existing. Think about the crimes. Through history study, we will find the innate evil thoughts exist in each period time of human history. From Bibles we know there was seven sins, and from ancient record we know people in the past times also commit crimes like murder, ravage and so on. Even [in ??]the most peaceful age, do the crimes exist. [这几个句子有点怪怪的感觉.....但比我强多了,我写都写不出来]And other features can be also picked up at ease, like philosophy of love. People in each time would mostly like to share love with friends, relatives, and even unacquainted ones. Thus the noteworthy benefit [复数是不是更好些?]of  history study is obvious. If we do not refer to historical remainders and records, studying historians' works, how can we in final understand such features? Therefore, history study will actually provide us such view of point in learning different past times, as is mentioned in the statement.[结尾好]

However, history could not only teach us people are to some extent the same, but also tell us in many circumstances, different times have different main characteristics. Looking through any history book, reading from pages of diverse ancient times, what can impress a person significantly might not be the common features, but the outstanding ones in each period. Most people could differentiate times of bloom and times of decadency, like in the European history. It is unbelievable that people will think people in Medieval is as [the]same as those in Resonances either from a history text or the history common sense, the latter of which was mainly acquired through telling history stories. Thus, study history could also provide strong views of characteristic distinctions in each period. In sum, people may prefer to notice the eminent features when depicting a period of time, which history gives people much information.

Further, the speaker unnecessarily limits the chief function to a narrow range, which should be doubted. The benefits to study history are not only to compare between different times, different people, but also to acquire knowledge from ancient eminent individuals, learn experience from past accidents, get more information about our precedents, and even predict the trend of our society.[这个排比句.....] In another word, the chief function cannot be generalized in one aspect. Studying more of history, we will find more to learn from it.[结尾同意楼上的建议]

In conclusion, it is true that history will [can,I think]break down the illusion that people in different times have totally distinguished features. But it should also be mentioned that history could even prove the dissimilar features' existence, which is more appealing. In addition, there are many other chief benefits of study history which cannot be neglected. Without taking them all into consideration, the meaning of history study will be undermined.

总结:楼主的语言在我之上,我的确看到很吃力,惭愧,感觉第二段逻辑再组织一下较好
另外,楼主怎么能写这么多字啊,我羡慕死了, 我限时才能写350+,唉,我8/19的

待会互拍,交今天的

sebarinaUID: 2108158

呜呜很丢人的刚开头就犯了个语法错误~~原来大家眼睛都很明啊~我怎么就没仔细检查出来呢？sigh……