ISSUE13 V6站队 8.2 高频啊

mrealUID：201732

参考大家的意见已经修改过了，请大家有空继续拍啊:D

又超时了一小会，开始字数还不够，改了一下才达到550。
大家帮忙看看啦，谢谢先：D

Issue13
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Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.
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Languages, which carry a lot of meaning as well as many historic stories, are the great treasure of the whole human-being. Unfortunately, many kinds of them is are about to find be close to an end for fewer and fewer people would use them. To avoid that kind of tragedy happening, the government has the undeniable responsibility to take measure to save the lesser-known language. However, other distinct power should also be taken into consideration to make those languages thrive again.

Admittedly, languages, standing for the human's creativity in the culture diversity, are playing an indispensable role in our daily life. Moreover, languages are famous of being part of the intangible legacy entering modern people's mind again. Through the hardship of adapting the environment around and the natural condition, our ancestors create the way they communicate with others and record the affaires taking place in their everyday life, which is language, in the process of interacting with the history, which provide continuous accordance to the certain groups of people.  Nevertheless, the fact that, even none of us would like to see, some lesser-known languages, as the decline of certain culture, are disappearing from our sight cannot be neglected. Nationality Hui and Man in the area of Yunnan in China, for instance, abandon their own languages ages ago and use the language of nationality Han, which is considered as the most wildly-accepted language in China, instead. Another example is that Mexico, which used to have 62 kinds of different Indian languages, is facing the grief that 19 kinds of them are being loss. Less kinds of languages prove dimished sense of human identity of the culture, using which people define who they are. And culture and other factors such as economy, politics, education, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole of society. In another words, less languagges equate less meaningless culture and less stability of the society. There no escaping comes the time that we human-being as a whole to hold back such trend.

Obviously, government, taking charge of the countries where the lesser-known languages are used to speak, should spare no effort to help those languages survive. From the aspects of sticking up to the diversity of culture and giving respect to the human creativity, government should take active measure to make up related law and expedite national machine to protect the precise language, which help culture to maintain our certain position and value locating in the society. What is more, government weighs many advantages in terms of cooperating with other countries and expanding the protection to a global wild scale. Congregating the power of the whole world would definitely benefit the work of preservation to be rapidly put forwards. We can understand that it is more difficult for the govornment to say than to do, even though, the govornment can reach its efficiency other else organizitions cannot do.
But the government's ability of mobilizing and expended money are both limit and it is highly possible that the government lacks appropriate comprehension towards their protective object, let alone expected passion, it is a wise choice to absorb distinct entities to participate in such protection. Depending on large amount of people who are enthusiastic about the past culture and languages as well or are still using the lesser-known language, it will lend more concrete support of saving those lesser-known languages from being forgotten and lost. For example, many scholars take part in the collection and record of the lesser-known languages, which receives efficient results that books about the details of those languages even the fictions translated from by them are published, which guarantee the existence of those languages. Without the public's effort, none of these would we achieve.

From what has been discussed above, whether positive or negative, we can safely draw the conclusion that both the power of government and public need to be taken into account in preventing the lesser-known languages from becoming extinct. Without either one of them, not can we reach the goal to save lesser-known languages and the past culture they reflect.

[ Last edited by mreal on 2005-8-5 at 00:14 ]

GladysryUID：198609

我理解得你的思路如下：
1， 有些小语种的确在消失
2，政府应该来保护。
3，但是只有政府的保护是不够的。
4，总结，要积极应用政府和各方力量才行。

那么针对这个题目，你认为重点地论述应该放在什么地方呢？1是叙述现象，与题目第一句话对应，可是你为什么要把语言下一个那么长的定义呢？其实这里的定义你提到了语言作为文化的一个方面的发展和作用，应该可以提到你的body2里面。而body2,才是你应该论述的重点。但是很明显你论述得不够。而是转向光政府是不够的，body3是你的想法，你的意见，发散的很多，但是与题目中对政府的要求有什么大的关联呢？是不是政府的力量不够，就代表她不应该去承担呢？我认为不是。我认为如果把政府的职能在解释的宽泛一点，把小语种的作用在多多发散一下，然后提一提非政府力量也应该积极参与，这篇文章对题目的回击才算平衡。你认为呢？

呵呵，mreal你的语言不错呢，值得学习！！！+U+U！:handshake

mrealUID：201732

我先解释一下我body3的意图吧，我写的是政府有不可推卸的责任，并且政府在制定法律和把保护的工作推向国际合作的水平上具有很大的优势。你觉得这样理解是不是能更好的对应主题呢？
还有你说把政府的职能在解释的宽泛一点，把小语种的作用在多多发散一下，我这里的思路被卡住了，启发一下吧，呵呵~
谢谢你这么细心的修改：D

GladysryUID：198609

？？
你好像说的是第三段，body2. 不好意思啊，我真的没在你的body3中看见你说的政府的责任和优势。:L

恩，我当时就是觉得你的出发点是很好的，就是你已经提到的政府的责任。但是为什么呢？1， 作为文化的一部分，小语种很重要（民族遗产，历史研究，文化多样性，这每一个都编着写一点）2，出于保护文化的方面， 政府必须保护（恩，这里可以提一提文化的重要，政府的职能，因为不仅是经济建设，还要有文化建设阿，文化建设的话对于自己国内的优秀遗产怎能不保护呢？如果认为这也不重要那也不重要都不去保护，到最后整个国家的文化就忘光光了。而且在这类文化保护方面最有力的力量还是来自于政府阿，因为它会有法律和国家机器作保障，也有舆论宣传的强大力量。就算因为经济问题不直接去执行，但是相应的法规阿，舆论阿，都是可以引导大家去做的）

恩，其实我当时就是想你能把两段的内容轻重换一下，而且按照你的思路想能否在拓宽一点（汗~偶当时没想到怎么说）既然你提到了，我就硬着头皮想了想，说了说，不知道有没有帮助，如果觉得不好展开的话，我们到组内继续讨论听听大家的意见如何？

mrealUID：201732

这样啊，似乎明白点了~我再看看，今天一定改出来，逼我一下！！！