argument100 G089-8月8日作业

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argu100

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since orders for our major product increased by over 200 percent last quarter, we should promptly exapand production by building a new manufacturing plant in Summit City . Summit City is the ideal location for the new plant because it has low property taxes, extensive blocks of land available for immediate purchase, and a large number of residents who are currently employed .

    由于上个季度我们主要产品的定单增加200%多，我们应该马上通过在建造一座新工厂来扩大生产.是新工厂的理想位置.因为那里的地产税比较低, 具有可以立即购买的大片土地，以及大量尚未就业的居民.

In this argument, the arguer concludes that we should promptly expand production by building a new manufacturing plant in Summit City. To support this, the arguer points out that last quarter our order increased over 200 percent .The arguer also  suggests Summit City as the ideal place for the reason such as the low property tax there. however, a close scretiny of the supportings provided by author lends little support to the conclusion.

first, the arguer make a questionable assumption that the order of products this quarter will increase because of the increase of it last quarter. there's no evidence to show that the increase of order is continual. what's more, the factor that influence the amount of order is changing from time to time. probably, the products of the company is seasonly fashion, that is to say, the number of order would not increase but decrease in contary. lacking information about the function of the products and whether the increase of order is continue, the conclusion that we should build a new manufactory is dubious.

secondly, even if we should build more factories to extend our production, whether the Summit City is the ideal place is to be doubt. for one thing, the arguer simply assumes that the low property taxes indicate the low price of the land.However, even there is a large area to be purchase,if the high price of the land is suspends  the price we can afford to balance the cost and revenen, we can gain no profit from it. for another thing, a large number of residents who are not currently employed might be a propriat, but sometimes it is not because no job s provided for them. what we need considering is that wether they are pleased to work. probably, they can live on their self-supporting way of life and the government encourage that. without ruling out the reason that the resident is out of work and the price of land in Summit City, the arguer can't convince us that the Summit City is the ideal place to build factories.

to sum up, the argument is not as reasonable as it stands. to better support the conclusion, the arguer shoud provide more convincing evidence that the increase of order will keep this quarter . what is also needed to better assess this argument is the price of land in Summit City and the labor contition there.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-8 at 13:38 ]

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现在特别喜欢改ARGU,相当于写一篇ARGU, 只是题目不是题库里的
今天晚了拍不动了, 当下去明天发上来

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In this argument, the arguer concludes that we should promptly expand production by building a new manufacturing plant in Summit City. To support this, the arguer points out that last quarter our order increased over 200 percent .The arguer also  suggests Summit City as the ideal place for the reason such as the low property tax there. however, a close scretiny of the supportings provided by author lends little support to the conclusion.

first, the arguer make a questionable assumption that the order of products this quarter will increase because of the increase of it last quarter. there's no evidence to show that the increase of order is continual应该用continuously把. what's more, the factor that influence the amount of order is changing from time to time. probably, the products of the company is seasonly fashion, that is to say, the number of order would not increase but decrease in contary这个好像没什么道理啊. lacking information about the function of the products and whether the increase of order is continue不对, the conclusion that we should build a new manufactory is dubious.谬误是抓到了，不错

secondly, even if we should build more factories to extend our production, whether the Summit City is the ideal place is to be doubt doubted. for one thing, the arguer simply assumes that the low property taxes indicate the low price of the land.However, even there is a large area to be purchase,if the high price of the land is suspends  the price we can afford to balance the cost and revenen, we can gain no profit from it. for another thing, a large number of residents who are not currently employed might be a propriat, but sometimes it is not because no job s provided for them. what we need considering is that wether they are pleased to work. probably, they can live on their self-supporting way of life and the government encourage that. without ruling out the reason that the resident is out of work and the price of land in Summit City, the arguer can't convince us that the Summit City is the ideal place to build factories. 觉得这段分析得不好，提供给搂主几个谬误。论者没有提供任何资料证明目前的设施不足以完成现有的订单。另外，首先低税和闲置的土地只能说明当地可能发展较慢，其次闲置的土地是否适合建厂还有等进一步考证。第三较大的失业的人群是否有足够的素质完成我们的工作，第四该地的其它情况，比如交通、能源供应等问题如何。

to sum up, the argument is not as reasonable as it stands. to better support the conclusion, the arguer shoud provide more convincing evidence that the increase of order will keep this quarter . what is also needed to better assess this argument is the price of land in Summit City and the labor contition there.

只找了两个谬误太少了点，句式要是再变化多一点就更好了！加油！

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谢谢提点!:)
计时的第一次,以后我会更加努力的!!!

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SORRY啊,今天有些事来迟了
拖了怎么久才发上来,不好意思啊

argument100 G089-8月8日作业

argu100

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since orders for our major product increased by over 200 percent last quarter, we should promptly exapand production by building a new manufacturing plant in Summit City . Summit City is the ideal location for the new plant because it has low property taxes, extensive blocks of land available for immediate purchase, and a large number of residents who are currently employed .

    由于上个季度我们主要产品的定单增加200%多，我们应该马上通过在建造一座新工厂来扩大生产.是新工厂的理想位置.因为那里的地产税比较低, 具有可以立即购买的大片土地，以及大量尚未就业的居民.

In this argument, the arguer concludes that we should promptly expand production by building a new manufacturing plant in Summit City. To support this, the arguer points out that last quarter our order increased over 200 percent .The arguer also suggests Summit City as the ideal place for the reason such as the low property tax there. however,（忘了大写吧？） a close scretiny （拼错了）of the supportings （好象是不可数名词，还有和后面SUPPORT重复，不如改为EVIDENCE？） provided by author lends little support to the conclusion.开头很好，就是老说WE感觉不好，可不可以说THE COMPANY呢？？建议啊，因为原题中也没有明确说

first, the arguer make （S呢？）a questionable assumption that the order of products this quarter will increase because of the increase 换个词吧， 增加些变化of it last quarter. there's 又忘了大写no evidence to show that the increase of order is continual用这个词吗？. what's大写 more, the factor that influence the amount of order is changing from time to time. Probably, the products of the company is（ARE） seasonly fashion（不是这么说8？不如说CHANGE FROM SEASON TO SEASON好了）, that is to say, the number of order would not increase but decrease in contary拼错. Lacking information about the function of the products and whether the increase of order is continue用将来时, the conclusion that we should build a new manufactory is dubious.

secondly,大写！！！ even if we should build more factories to extend our production, whether the Summit City is the ideal place is to be doubt. for 不用我说了吧？one thing, the arguer simply assumes that the low property taxes indicate the low price of the land. However, even there is a large area to be purchase被动态,if the high price of the land is suspends什么意思，看不懂  the price we can afford to balance the cost and revenen拼错, we can gain no profit from it. for ！！another thing, a large number of residents who are not currently employed might be a propriat拼错, but sometimes it is not because no job s provided for them. what we need considering is that wether they are pleased to work. probably, they can live on their self-supporting way of life and the government encourage that. without ruling out the reason that the resident is out of work and the price of land in Summit City, the arguer can't convince us that the Summit City is the ideal place to build factories.这一段好象谈了两点，分成两段说好了，这样两个错误都可以说深入点，而且要把自己想说的说清楚，感觉你两个都点到了，但不深入。关于低税率还可以说文中除了地产税没提别的税。关于工人你的语言比较晦涩，可能几处用词都不准确，可以先用最简单的词表述

to sum up, the argument is not as reasonable as it stands. to better support the conclusion, the arguer shoud provide more convincing evidence that the increase of order will keep this quarter . what is also needed to better assess this argument is the price of land in Summit City and the labor contition there.

总体还可以，点都找到了，第一点说的很好，后面两点不够深入，文章放在WORD里一看红红绿绿的一篇啊。有几个拼错的，努力改进啊，争取减少，其实我现在做的也不好，尽是拼错的词，比你多好多。还有句子开头大写，这一点应该只要注意就可以的，而且一定要注意啊