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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits

So far as I am concerned, advertising is indeed one of the major causes of unhealthy eating habits for many young people. However, I do not think it is the most important one, as other factors like lifestyle, genetic factors, economic ability, and so on may contribute much more.
Advertising for fast food and junk food could lead to eating habits that are not good for health. For example, most successful fast food companies invest great money in advertising to arouse customers’ appetite for their products in order to promote their marketing. However too much of these kinds of fast food can be negative to people’s health because eating too much of them can break down the balances inside the bodies, as they are usually high in calories and additives yet short in vitamins and minerals. Thousands of customers either lack of the awareness of their unhealthiness or cannot withstand the lure of the propaganda, as most young people do, will fall victims of these advertising. They buy and eat a lot of fast food or ‘junk food’ appearing in the advertisements, thus unhealthy eating habit is formed.
However, as for most other unhealthy eating habits, advertising is not the main reason or even not related. For example, having no breakfast is definitely a very unhealthy eating habit, yet the formation of it has nothing to do with advertising, as no advertisement would try to persuade people not to have breakfast.
In many cases the main reasons for the unhealthy eating habits might be the lifestyles, genetic factors, economic abilities and so on, rather than advertising. For example, a lot of businessmen have a fast pace in life, thus they are often not willing to pay too much time and attention on food. Due to this reason they may hold some really bad eating habits like eating too fast or eating not enough. In some cases, it is just because of uncommon genes that people develop bad eating habits. For example, some genes determine the food preference. If these preferences are not in balance, as some of the nutrients are taken in too much while others are in short, unhealthy eating habits will form inborn. And in many developing countries, unhealthy eating habits are just owing to poor economic standards. For example, in some African countries people usually take dirt food just because they cannot afford for the cleaners.
To sum up, advertising does play an important role in the formations of many unhealthy eating habits. However, it is not proper to regard it as the most important cause, as other factors like life styles, genetic backgrounds, economic standards etc might be the main reason for most of the unhealthy eating habits.

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Phragraph 3 and 4 failed to illustrate other factors causing unhealthy eating habits are more dominant than advertising. Adding some reasoning should definitely help. A quick suggestion: choose two of the three factors you listed and discuss them thoroughly in seperate paragraphs.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.

I agree with the statement that young people should take several different jobs before they take a long term career, as they need time and experience to find out what they are really interested in.
To run a long term career, the foremost important thing is to make sure that you are really interested in it. It is interest that makes people positive and active in working and supports them to hold on when they meet troubles. For example, artists who are really interested in painting would be more creative and active in painting than those who have little or no interest in it at all. And when troubles come to them, for instance depression comes and the market of painting goes down, the former artists would keep on painting, while the later ones are more likely to give up.
For young people, they need to try some different areas to find out what they are really interested in. We live in a world full of possibilities and varieties. There are millions of jobs one can take for a living. However the number of interesting jobs that one can take as careers for a long term or even courses for lifetime is limited. It is quite likely that the first job one meet is not what she/he is interested in. Thus it is meaningful and very necessary for young people to try several different jobs before they finally decide which of them can be a suitable long term career. For example, before Mao Zedong began his political career he was a common teacher in a high school in Hunan China. If he stopped trying when he already got a teaching job, there would not be such a great leader in China’s history, or even the whole history of China would be changed.
Though it is necessary to try some different jobs before finding the right one for a long term career, so far as I am concerned, job changing should not be too frequent. On one hand, there should be enough time left for one job to know it inside-out. Only after enough contacts with the job can one know whether he/she is interested in it. On the other hand, almost every job, even those that cannot raise interest, could be helpful in young people’s later life. And it takes time for young people to learn the valuable lessons from these jobs.
To sum up, I agree with the statement that young people should try several different jobs before beginning a long term career, as they need experiences and time to find out which job they are interested in. However, I do believe that the job changing should not be too often.

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值得学习，，哎哎，，考虑推到“优秀作文贴”去？
反正我是没挑出不好地方，词语、结构上都很好雅。。
恩恩，，不过麻烦大仙也给我看看作文，指点指点。。
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我也没怎么挑出刺来，虽然结构词汇什么的不是很复杂，但是整个文章感觉很舒服，而且行文思路很不错，受教咯~~~
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1143864-1-1.html
这是我的作文贴，记得改改哦~

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谢谢~
麻烦再详细些呗，本人水平有限错误肯定还是有的，
还请多多赐教啊
这样才能有进步吗
8# lizhengjiang

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大家都太捧我了吧~
谢谢~
麻烦再详细些呗，本人水平有限错误肯定还是有的，
还请多多赐教啊
这样才能有进步吗
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8-28作业
（09.02.27NA）Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.
So far as I am concerned, I prefer getting more vacation to getting more salary from a job, as long as the basic salary is enough for me to lead a decent life. However, it is hard to compare two jobs only by the ratio of vacation to salary they offer, as many other factors also counts, like their contents, social respect they can bring etc. Even If all these other factors about the two jobs are equal, it is still not easy to compare the two jobs which offer different amount of salary and vocation. For example, assuming there were two basically same jobs, one of which offer one more day as vocation a year while the other offer one million dollars more salary a year. Well, one million dollars for one day! I it is not a difficult choice for most people to make. Therefore the following two jobs that will be compared in this essay should be basically same, which means the only difference between them should be the different ratio of salary to vocation they offer, besides the difference of salary and vocation should be proper, for example, the more salary one job offer should properly cover the more vocation the other offer.

Under the assumption above, we are finally on a safe ground to compare the two kinds of jobs. From my prospect of view, I think a job with more vocation is much better than a job with more salary.
More vocation means more free time, in which one can do whatever he/she want to, of course under the law. If there were more vocation, mothers could spend more meaningful time with their children, which would build up many more sweet childhoods. If there were more vocation, friends could spend more time hanging out together, which would build up many more joyful friendships. If there were more vocation, couples could sharing more beautiful time together, which would build up many more happy families. After all, life is full of multitudes, people need freedom, which money can hardly give, to chase their dreams and happiness.
A job does not necessarily mean a course or even a career. Many people take jobs that they do not like very much, only for the money they need. For them I think it is not worth to sacrifice valuable vacation for more salary. Even for people who love their job or who treat their jobs as long term careers or courses, I still think it is not necessary for them to sacrifice their vocation for more salary. They can still do something related to their job that they loves on vocation while in a much easier mood without any pressures from workdays, bosses, and colleagues.

To sum up, comparing two basically same jobs with proper differences in salary and vocation, from my point of view, the one with more vocation is much better than the one with more salary, as people need time to take care of other aspects of their lives, which money can hardly help.

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9-22作业


I am not quite with the above statement that so many subjects should be taught to children from five to ten years old. Or at least not all of them would be proper to be infused in the early part of life, as some of them would take large amount of time and effort to get comprehensive commands or might be too complicated. Besides, though young children are inexperienced, and they need supervisions and guidances from adults, they are still free persons, who should have the right to enjoy some freedom to do what they love and avoid what they do not like.
Most of the courses listed above like music, math, and language are subjects which need much time and practices to command, especially for young children. While all the time they need would be more helpful if applied to other areas to culture young children, like sport which is critical for young people to build healthy bodies for future life. Take music study for example. Music study, like learning playing piano, needs quantities of time to memorize the script and hundreds of times of practice to command a chapter. For young children, it might take most part of their days which left them no time to play and to share valuable time with parents.
Some of the courses are just too complicated for children at such an early age. For instance, history is a comprehensive course which needs deep culture backgrounds and social experience to understand. Only remembering the dates and locations, which is the only thing for children can do for history learning in such a young age, is useless.

It should be noticed that some of the courses above would go great help to children in their growing process, like an early start of music learning is beneficial for one who want to become a musician. However, the problem here is he/she wants to, but not be required. Young people may need supervisions and advices from adults because of less experience. But they are still free people, who are born with freedom to choose their own lives. And this kind of freedom sense should be built up from an early age. Therefore, for all the benefits these courses may provide, young children should be given the right to choose to learn them, but not in a obliged way.

To sum up, although the above courses might be helpful for young children’s future lives, some of them could take too much time or be too complicated for an early age. Consequently, young children should be given the availability to these courses but not required to learn them.

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