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shiwei83UID: 2680950

From printed book to television , the development of intermediary not only changes the mode of peoples thinking, life-style, and association-way , but also have revolutionary impact on society. An increasing number of people have begun to question printed book or television, which have more impression on society. I prefer to choose television for the following reasons.

To begin with, I concede that printed book do have great effects on society such as increased its literacy rate ,promote the development of the society, and so on. But compared to television, it was nothing. Television have dynamic influence on society in many aspects. No communication system has ever provided so many people with as wide a range of new experience as television has. Without leaving their homes, TV viewers can watch government officials perform important functions and see how people in far-off lands look and live. Television takes viewers to deserts, jungles, and the ocean floor. A TV viewer can see how a famous actor performs the role of Hamlet, and how top comedians draw laughter. Television gives its views a glimpse of real-life tragedy, such as when it covers the victims of war, natural disasters, and poverty. It also captures moments of great triumph, such as when astronauts first set foot on the moon. In a word, it changed the way people view the world

Secondly, television also changed people’s life style in everyway. For example, throughout the world, watching television is one of the most time-consuming leisure activities among adults. It frequently takes time away from other activities, such as reading, conversation, social gathering, and exercises.

However, some people insist that television brought about many serious problems. The major one is its effects on young people. Children are now so used to getting their information and entertainment from televison that their literacy as well as physical ability has been greatly weakened. Even worse than hat, vulgar commercials and indecent programs may cultive their bad tastes, distort their viewpoints toward human life to such a degree that their minds might be corrupted.

As I said above, no matter how positive or negative effects, television bring greater impact change than printed books.

林霄麟UID: 2645553

From printed book to television , the development of intermediary not only changes the mode of peoples thinking, life-style and association-way , but also have revolutionary impact on society. An increasing number of people have begun to question printed book or television, which have more impression on society.[question后的句子少谓语哦, which只是一个从句不做句子成分的，又或者which是question的宾语，总之有点令人confused哈] I prefer to choose television for the following reasons.
To begin with, I concede that printed book do have great effects on society such as increased its literacy rate ,promote the development of the society and so on. But compared to television, it was nothing.[这...书们心全碎了] Television have dynamic influence on society in many aspects. No communication system has ever provided so many people with as wide a range of new experience as television has. Without leaving their homes[?有点指代不清], TV viewers can watch government officials perform important functions and see how people in far-off lands look and live. Television takes viewers to deserts, jungles, and the ocean floor. A TV viewer can see how a famous actor performs the role of Hamlet, and how top comedians draw laughter. Television gives its views a glimpse of real-life tragedy, such as when it covers the victims of war, natural disasters, and poverty. It also captures moments of great triumph, such as when astronauts first set foot on the moon. In a word, it changed the way people view the world.
Secondly, television also changed people’s life style in everyway. For example, throughout the world, watching television is one of the most time-consuming leisure activities among adults. It frequently takes time away from other activities, such as reading, conversation, social gathering, and exercises.[略显单薄]
However, some people insist that television brought about many serious problems[应该用现在完成时或者现在时]. The major one is its [bad]effects on young people. Children are now so used to[？有点问题] getting their information and entertainment from televison that their literacy as well as physical ability has been greatly weakened. Even worse than that, vulgar commercials and indecent programs may cultive their bad tastes, distort their viewpoints toward human life to such a degree that their minds might be corrupted.
As I said above, no matter how positive or negative [TV] effects [are], television bring greater impact change than printed books.
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yuminjiaUID: 2659628

From printed book to television , the development of intermediary not only changes the mode of peoples thinking, life-style and association-way , but also has revolutionary impact on society. An increasing number of people have begun to question printed book or television, which has more impression on society. I prefer to choose television for the following reasons.(这段注意下动词的主谓一致)

To begin with, I concede that printed book do have great effects on society such as increased its literacy rate ,promote the development of the society（such as 后面只能接n，你接了动词词组了）, and so on. But compared to television, it was nothing. Television has dynamic influence on society in many aspects. No communication system has ever (我觉得这里用倒装比较顺口 Never has a communication system )provided so many people with as wide a range of new experience as television has. Without leaving their homes, TV viewers( we) can watch government officials perform important functions and see how people in far-off lands (look and )live. Television takes viewers to deserts, jungles, and the ocean floor. A TV viewer can see how a famous actor performs the role of Hamlet, and how top comedians draw laughter. Television gives its views a glimpse of real-life tragedy, such as when it covers the victims of war, natural disasters, and poverty. It also captures moments of great triumph, such as(后面只能接n.)when astronauts first set foot on the moon. In a word, it changs the way people view the world

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Secondly, television also changed people’s life style in everyway(有这个词吗). For example, throughout the world, watching television is one of the most time-consuming leisure activities among adults. It frequently takes time away from other activities, such as reading, conversation, social gathering, and exercises.6
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However, some people insist that television brought about many serious problems. The major one is its effects on young people. Children are now so used to getting their information and entertainment from televison that their literacy as well as physical ability has been greatly weakened. Even worse than hat, vulgar commercials and indecent programs may cultive their bad tastes, distort their viewpoints toward human life to such a degree that their minds might be corrupted./ T" e/ ?! }  B/ l/ G/ L9 _
As I said above, no matter how positive or negative effects, television bring greater impact change than printed books.


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