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lixinwei1992UID: 2743934

Back to 18th century, with the development of the industrial revolution, technology  has increased at a phenomenal rate and started to play a great role in improving and influencing people's lives. The continously developing technologies have brought tremendous benefits: It improves our living conditions, treatments for diseases, and effect on enterrainment industry. Moreover, people's lives are getting simpler under the development of the technology.

First of all, the development of technology help us to save much time with difficult problems. For instence,hundreds years ago, it would take an experts
forever to work out some of the more intricate problems that math and science provide us with. However, with computers, these problems are solved within seconds.It allow us to make complex calculations with the greatest of ease.

A successful technology also provide people with faster and better living conditions.It can be proved with a obviously example: With the invention of electronics such as microwive oven, I can cook whatever I like just in a short time. It’s easy to find that we are living in a world with high technological circumstance.

However, like a double-eged sword, the development of technology also caused contemporary problems which make people’s lives more complicated. As for disease, based on the studyt of WHO, the Proportion of cancer is increasing because of the radiation from technologic product, cell phone for example. The other aspect that technology makes people’s lifes more complicated is that new technology require people to predominate more skills.Computers and Internet, the technology that make people’s lives simpler as well as request people expanding knoweledge in both of computers and internet.

In conclusion, technology not only brings people benefits and conveniences but also makes people's lives simpler. It may sometimes cause complicated accident. However, while the development of technology might have contributed to some of these contemporay problems, it offers the most likely solutions to many of them. And I strongly believe that with the development of the technology, Everone has good reason to be excited in this simpler and better life.

tomatooUID: 2754865

Back to 18th century, with the development of the industrial revolution, technology  has increased at a phenomenal rate and started to play a great role in improving and influencing people's lives. The continuously developing technologies have brought tremendous benefits: It improves our living conditions, treatments for diseases, and effects on enterrainment industry. Moreover, people's lives are getting simpler under the development of the technology(意思表达重复，几句话说来说去一个意思).3 U  F5 \5 l8 c

First of all, the development of technology help us to save much time with difficult problems. For instence(instance),hundreds years ago, it would take an experts forever to work out some of the more(more不要，这里没和谁比较，而且侧重点不是intricate) intricate problems that math and science provide us with. However, with computers, these problems are solved within seconds.It allows us to make complex calculations with the greatest of ease. + `( h- @7 r5 W8 y% n& c# R$ T( }

A successful technology also provide people with faster(faster修饰living condition?不太合适) and better living conditions.It can be proved with an obviously example: With the invention of electronics such as microwive(microwave) oven, I can cook whatever I like just in a short time. It’s easy to find that we are living in a world with high technological circumstance.9 O$ C0 G, y. p0 S% B" n# m# L

However, like a double-eged(edged) sword(这句话考试就别写了吧，快被用烂了), the development of technology also caused contemporary problems which make people’s lives more complicated. As for disease, based on the studyt（study） of WHO, the Proportion of cancer is increasing because of the radiation from technologic product, cell phone for example. The other aspect that technology makes people’s lifes more complicated is that new technology require people to predominate more skills.Computers and Internet, the technology that make people’s lives simpler as well as request people expanding knoweledge(knowledge) in both of computers and internet. 1 `, d# a# p' _+ D8 D% \' h- Q

In conclusion, technology not only brings people benefits and conveniences but also makes people's lives simpler. It may sometimes cause complicated accidents. However, while the development of technology might have contributed to some of these contemporary problems, it offers the most likely solutions to many of them. And I strongly believe that with the development of the technology, Everyone has good reason to be excited in this simpler and better life.(最后一段总结得很好！)

1反面的论证笔墨比正面的还多，显然是不明智的！
2 论证过程中虽然用了举例，但细节不够，一样像道理论证！就像饺子，皮多馅少！饺子自然是皮薄馅多好吃！
3 拼写问题要多注意
4 词汇和句型比较多样化，赞！
我知道你才上高中，写得很不错，加油！