3月23作文

mumoluluUID: 2747637

Teachers should assign homework to their students every day.首先这位童鞋好像弄错了题目，但是桂伯木马帮你改了些，最后一段好像有点敷衍了事的感觉，让我也有点颓力了，楼主加油吧
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There is a discussion over whether teachers should assign homework to their students every day. (为了强调应不应该每天布置作业所以：whether should every day homework assigned by teachers)This issue has become a matter of concern in many places of (Throughout) the world. A large number of people live under the illusion（建议用delusion） that, (only这样好像更有强调的意思) by doing homework everyday, students could obtain many (more) kinds of(建议去掉) useful knowledge and practical skill. But what these people fail to see is that occupying students’ leisure time (after-class time of students ) may produce disastrous（heavily 或者negative impact然后把influence去掉） influence on their later （去掉）rest of their life. As for me, I firmly convince （我觉得这个时候还是用suggest更好点）that teachers should not assign home work to student everyday and maintain enough time for students to play and do some physical excises.（instead of homework assigning to growth themselves wisely替换，个人觉得句子不是长就能占优势）（本人到是建议你提前些你这个明确的观点）

In the first place, doing homework everyday （daily homework替换免得有视觉疲劳）is unhealthy for students' physical （建议去掉，因为你前面已经用unhealthy来做前了）growth.
Many experts in education point out that it is equally important to take some physical excises instead of doing homework at home （properly我觉得去掉instead后缀只用properly更能表达出“适当的做些运动”）, when students have to spend their whole day in a boring classroom. (这句有点…看着别扭去掉吧) Let's take Michael Jordan for example,（直接用As Micheal Jordan） his talent in basketball proved after school time(本人有点匪夷所思这句话请楼主斟酌). It is hard to imagine that if excellent on basketball he is while he overloaded heavy homework every day, and yet not enough for his talent. his teacher assign homework everyday and always make him overload, he could excellent in basketball, and even has no time to play in the basketball court due to those homework.

In addition with（to） the obvious problem- physical excise, another major obstacle, ---in my opinion,--- is about students mental health. Students will have less time to communicate (connect )with their parents due to those homework every day(此时可以去掉了吧). Consequently, it may difficult to cultivate(bring up 因为吧cultivat好像对农作物更多点意思) their inter（就personal就可以了，老外能明白你讲什么的）personal character. They may become more solitary（stubborn 或者introverted ）, and even in turn to suffer from mental diseases. On the other hand, teachers should pay considerable(去掉
或considerably) attention to improve their teaching skill and enhance their teaching methods, to help students absorb the knowledge during school time.
From what have been discussed above,（ it is去掉）in reasonably（to draw the去掉） conclusion （that去掉）, teachers should not assign homework everyday. Students should be encouraged to communicate with their parents and play after school. A good teacher never（后面这句太..Chinglish了，我也无能为力对付了） relies on students work overload to gain good mark, but by the mean of improving his or her own teaching skill and method to help students’ healthy growth in academic, physical and mental aspects
1# elvis_ma

J印记UID: 2784665

Teachers should assign homework to their students every day.

There is a discussion over whether teachers should assign homework to their students every day(开头就把整篇文章的主题说的清楚明了，一句话，干脆利落!)This issue has become a matter of concern in many places of the world.(不错不错。。)A large number of people live under the illusion (illusion 的观点到底是哪一个捏?)that, by doing homework everyday, students could obtain many kinds of useful knowledge and practical skill. (论证的不错) But what these people fail to see is that (doing homework every day will definitely )occupying students’ leisure time (and) may produce(produce 词用的不是很恰当，生产出? 印记觉得可以改成cause)disastrous influence on their later life.(到此，论证的还不错，正反观点都清楚，接下来阐述自己的观点之后让整个文章很紧凑) As for me, I firmly convince that teachers should not assign homework to student everyday(注意哦every day 应该分开写，合起来写表示日常的) and (they should )(因为前面是should not ,后面又是should..)maintain enough time for students to play and do some physical excises.
In the first place, doing homework everyday is unhealthy for students' physical growth.(提出观点。)Many experts in education point out that it is equally important to take some physical excises instead of doing homework at home.when students have spend their whole day in a boring classroom. (个人觉得这句可以删掉，有点多余哦)Let's take Michael Jordan for example, his talent in basketball(was) proved after school time. It is hard to imagine that if his teacher assign homework everyday and always make him overload, he could excellent in basketball, (even if he is excellent in basketball, he do not have time  due to the overload  homework)and even has no time to play in the basketball court due to those homework.

In addition with the obvious problem- physical excise, another major obstacle, in my opinion, is about students(students'对吗?) mental healthy.(If the teacher assign home work every day , children would have less time conmmunicate with theire fellow friends and parents , agian ,it is not good for their mental health.)Students will have less time to communicate with their parents due to those homework everyday.Consequently, it(指代什么?) may difficult to cultivate their interpersonal character. They may become more solitary, and even suffer from mental diseases. (不错哦)On the other hand, (前面提出的是问题的所在，后面说的是老师应该做什么，两者不是同一类哦，印记觉得要么都是问题，要么都是建议用On the other hand 才比较确切)teachers should pay considerable attention to improve their teaching skill and enhance their teaching methods, to help students absorb the knowledge during school time.(我觉得你写的好好哦)

From what have been discussed above, it is reasonably to draw the conclusion that, teachers should not assign homework everyday. Students should be encouraged to communicate with their parents and play after school. A good teacher never relies on students work overload to gain good mark, but (he or she should  )by the mean of improving his or her own teaching skill and method to help students’ healthy growth in academic, physical and mental aspects
点评:
文章结构思路都很清晰，遣词造句也都很好。偶尔有个别的错误，总体来说还不错啦。比我好。。我们一起加油吧!