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发表于 2010-8-17 16:12:42 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
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8月17日     是telephone 还是television对人类的有more effects
第一次写托福的作文。。。多多指教+多多感谢哦!!
   Telephone and television are two important inventions that have significantly changed our daily life. But as to which has more effects on us, different people have different ideas. I am one of those who argue that it is telephone that has a larger effect.

   Above all, my main reason is that telephone is nearly a necessity in our daily life, but television is apparently not. Take us college students for example, we’ve been living without a television for two years and just feel good with that. But if we live without a telephone, it will be too hard to stay calm. For one thing, people can be somewhat isolated with faraway friends and relatives.
   Another reason is that telephones, especially mobile telephones, bring people so much convenience that televisions cannot compare with. Nowadays, we use mobile phones more frequently, not only to send and receive messages or make phone calls, but also to surf the Internet, study English and even locate ourselves by GPS in it. People who have experienced a phone-theft know exactly how much they depend on their phones and how much convenience they’ve brought them. But televisions on the other side, can only provide people with certain programs that have been determined by TV stations without any knowledge of what an individual really likes. People can only choose a channel in a certain range.
   Furthermore, with new technologies developing quickly, many functions of a television can be replaced by a computer or even a phone. People can freely search for programs to their tastes on the Internet, and can enjoy them whenever and wherever they want to. A cell phone can also provide this service now.
   In conclusion, telephone has more effects than television does because of it is more of a necessity, brings us more convenience and more and more widely used in daily life.

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Telephone and television are two important inventions that have significantly changed(用change?) our daily life. But ask to which has more effects on us, different people have different ideas. I am  one of those who argue that it is telephone that has a larger effect.
   Above all, my main reason is that telephone is nearly a necessity in our daily life, but television is apparently not. Take us college students for example, we’ve been living without a television for two years and just feel good with that(这个例子没看懂含义 @_@). But if we live without a telephone, it will be too hard to stay calm. For one thing, people can be somewhat isolated with faraway(isolated from) friends and relatives.
   Another reason is that telephones, especially mobile telephones, bring people so much convenience that televisions cannot compare(d) with. Nowadays, we use mobile phones more frequently, not only to send and receive messages or make phone calls, but also to surf the Internet, study English and even locate ourselves by GPS in it. People who have experienced a phone-theft know exactly how much they depend on their phones and how much convenience they’ve brought them. But televisions on the other side, can only provide people with certain programs that have been determined by TV stations without any knowledge of what an individual really likes. People can only choose a channel in a certain range.
   Furthermore, with new technologies developing quickly, many functions of a television can be replaced by a computer or even a phone. People can freely search for programs to(search programs for) their tastes on the Internet, and can enjoy them whenever and wherever they want to. A cell phone can also provide this service now. # R2 v8 e5 x* Z. M( T
   In conclusion, telephone has more effects than television does(前面用has 后面用does,合适不?) because of it is more of a necessity, brings us more convenience and more and more widely used in daily life.% i! ]/ m6 L4 J4 A5 I- f

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Telephone and television are two important inventions that have significantly changed our daily life. But as to which has more effects on us, different people have different ideas. I am one of those who argue that it is telephone that has a larger effect.
  Above all, my main reason is that telephone is nearly a necessity in our daily life, but television is apparently not. Take us [our] college students for example, we’ve been living without a television for two years and just feel good with that. But if we live without a telephone, it will be too hard to stay calm. For one thing [不如说for example], people can be somewhat isolated with faraway friends and relatives.
   Another reason is that telephones, especially mobile telephones, bring people so much convenience that televisions cannot compare with. Nowadays, we use mobile phones more frequently, not only to send and receive messages or make phone calls, but also to surf the Internet, study English and even locate ourselves by GPS in it. People who have experienced a phone-theft know exactly how much they depend on their phones and how much convenience they’ve brought them. But televisions on the other side, can only provide people with certain programs that have been determined by TV stations without any knowledge of what an individual really likes. People can only choose a channel in a certain range.
   Furthermore[这个不该用在最后一个论点上], with new technologies developing quickly, many functions of a television can be replaced by a computer or even a phone. People can freely search for programs to their tastes on the Internet, and can enjoy them whenever and wherever they want to. A cell phone can also provide this service now.
   In conclusion, telephone has more effects than television does because of it is more of a necessity, brings us more convenience and more and more widely used in daily life.

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发表于 2010-8-20 07:32:19 |只看该作者
多谢了哦

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发表于 2010-8-21 21:53:25 |只看该作者
本帖最后由 逍遥若曦 于 2010-8-21 22:53 编辑

8月21的作业哈~~~

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发表于 2010-8-23 00:39:12 |只看该作者
不好意思晚了点,改完啦

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发表于 2010-8-23 08:53:24 |只看该作者
6# Jeannenesta
谢谢谢谢!
我修改一下再发上来~多谢你哦!:loveliness:
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发表于 2010-8-23 21:58:01 |只看该作者
不好意思,现在才来看

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发表于 2010-8-23 23:53:18 |只看该作者
8# bruce520
不会不会~
很感激啦!
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发表于 2010-8-24 22:38:19 |只看该作者

8月24的作业~~~

本帖最后由 逍遥若曦 于 2010-8-24 23:01 编辑

多谢多谢
感觉理由很乱
但是不知道怎么组织……等待指教啊!!

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发表于 2010-8-25 14:11:34 |只看该作者
写的太好了 楼主谦虚了
我觉得很强悍了
你的句型很好啊 词汇也很丰富表达就很占优势
而且你写的角度和我的不一样
也挺细节的
向你学习
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发表于 2010-8-25 17:07:26 |只看该作者
改完了,其实很不错啊

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