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逍遥若曦UID: 2802815

8月17日     是telephone 还是television对人类的有more effects
第一次写托福的作文。。。多多指教+多多感谢哦！！
   Telephone and television are two important inventions that have significantly changed our daily life. But as to which has more effects on us, different people have different ideas. I am one of those who argue that it is telephone that has a larger effect.
   Above all, my main reason is that telephone is nearly a necessity in our daily life, but television is apparently not. Take us college students for example, we’ve been living without a television for two years and just feel good with that. But if we live without a telephone, it will be too hard to stay calm. For one thing, people can be somewhat isolated with faraway friends and relatives.
   Another reason is that telephones, especially mobile telephones, bring people so much convenience that televisions cannot compare with. Nowadays, we use mobile phones more frequently, not only to send and receive messages or make phone calls, but also to surf the Internet, study English and even locate ourselves by GPS in it. People who have experienced a phone-theft know exactly how much they depend on their phones and how much convenience they’ve brought them. But televisions on the other side, can only provide people with certain programs that have been determined by TV stations without any knowledge of what an individual really likes. People can only choose a channel in a certain range.
   Furthermore, with new technologies developing quickly, many functions of a television can be replaced by a computer or even a phone. People can freely search for programs to their tastes on the Internet, and can enjoy them whenever and wherever they want to. A cell phone can also provide this service now.
   In conclusion, telephone has more effects than television does because of it is more of a necessity, brings us more convenience and more and more widely used in daily life.

cynthia_yeUID: 2756484

Telephone and television are two important inventions that have significantly changed(用change？) our daily life. But ask to which has more effects on us, different people have different ideas. I am  one of those who argue that it is telephone that has a larger effect.
   Above all, my main reason is that telephone is nearly a necessity in our daily life, but television is apparently not. Take us college students for example, we’ve been living without a television for two years and just feel good with that（这个例子没看懂含义 @_@）. But if we live without a telephone, it will be too hard to stay calm. For one thing, people can be somewhat isolated with faraway(isolated from) friends and relatives.
   Another reason is that telephones, especially mobile telephones, bring people so much convenience that televisions cannot compare(d) with. Nowadays, we use mobile phones more frequently, not only to send and receive messages or make phone calls, but also to surf the Internet, study English and even locate ourselves by GPS in it. People who have experienced a phone-theft know exactly how much they depend on their phones and how much convenience they’ve brought them. But televisions on the other side, can only provide people with certain programs that have been determined by TV stations without any knowledge of what an individual really likes. People can only choose a channel in a certain range.
   Furthermore, with new technologies developing quickly, many functions of a television can be replaced by a computer or even a phone. People can freely search for programs to(search programs for) their tastes on the Internet, and can enjoy them whenever and wherever they want to. A cell phone can also provide this service now. # R2 v8 e5 x* Z. M( T
   In conclusion, telephone has more effects than television does（前面用has 后面用does，合适不？） because of it is more of a necessity, brings us more convenience and more and more widely used in daily life.% i! ]/ m6 L4 J4 A5 I- f

bruce520UID: 2634940

Telephone and television are two important inventions that have significantly changed our daily life. But as to which has more effects on us, different people have different ideas. I am one of those who argue that it is telephone that has a larger effect.
  Above all, my main reason is that telephone is nearly a necessity in our daily life, but television is apparently not. Take us [our] college students for example, we’ve been living without a television for two years and just feel good with that. But if we live without a telephone, it will be too hard to stay calm. For one thing [不如说for example], people can be somewhat isolated with faraway friends and relatives.
   Another reason is that telephones, especially mobile telephones, bring people so much convenience that televisions cannot compare with. Nowadays, we use mobile phones more frequently, not only to send and receive messages or make phone calls, but also to surf the Internet, study English and even locate ourselves by GPS in it. People who have experienced a phone-theft know exactly how much they depend on their phones and how much convenience they’ve brought them. But televisions on the other side, can only provide people with certain programs that have been determined by TV stations without any knowledge of what an individual really likes. People can only choose a channel in a certain range.
   Furthermore[这个不该用在最后一个论点上], with new technologies developing quickly, many functions of a television can be replaced by a computer or even a phone. People can freely search for programs to their tastes on the Internet, and can enjoy them whenever and wherever they want to. A cell phone can also provide this service now.
   In conclusion, telephone has more effects than television does because of it is more of a necessity, brings us more convenience and more and more widely used in daily life.

逍遥若曦UID: 2802815

多谢了哦

逍遥若曦UID: 2802815

8月21的作业哈~~~

JeannenestaUID: 2456704

不好意思晚了点，改完啦

逍遥若曦UID: 2802815

6# Jeannenesta
谢谢谢谢！
我修改一下再发上来~多谢你哦！:loveliness:

bruce520UID: 2634940

不好意思，现在才来看

逍遥若曦UID: 2802815

8# bruce520
不会不会~
很感激啦！
O(∩_∩)O~

逍遥若曦UID: 2802815

多谢多谢
感觉理由很乱
但是不知道怎么组织……等待指教啊！！

belinda_777UID: 2669901

写的太好了 楼主谦虚了
我觉得很强悍了
你的句型很好啊 词汇也很丰富表达就很占优势
而且你写的角度和我的不一样
也挺细节的
向你学习
10# 逍遥若曦

SilentScorpiusUID: 2686998

改完了，其实很不错啊