Issue52 同主题 个人第二篇, 一个半小时,望互拍!! ( 460Words,死活写不长啊~~)

Chloroplast923UID: 207486

52"Education encourages students to question and criticize, and therefore does little to promote social harmony."

提纲:
1.首段给出观点:同意作者第一句,但是强烈反对第二句.(这里表达不好,好像有点怪)
2.指出教育不仅鼓励学生质疑,同时传授知识,并且塑造学生好的品格,这些对于学生将来走出社会后建设社会,促进社会和谐很有用.
3.进一步说,质疑实际上对于促进社会和谐有很大作用.
4.但是,过分以及不理性的质疑会破坏社会和谐.
5.指出教育在促进社会和谐作用方面地位不可取代.

正文:

    I totally agree with the author that, education, as a means by which we prepare people for society, not only teaches students to learn, but also encourages students to question and criticize. But I'm afraid I don't agree with the author that encouraging students to question and criticize makes education do little to promote social harmony. In fact, I think, only when people of a society are well educated, can harmony of that society be promoted.

    First of all, the author points out education does little to promote social harmony because  it encourage students to quetion snd criticize, but what education does is more than that. It  teaches students lots of knowledge which helps them get along with nature and  fulfill their  jobs effective in the future. What's more important, it also shapes the students character.  People well educated are kind, friendly, polite, and easy-going in most cases, and they often  have willpower to conquer difficulties and accomplish goals. These characters are helpful to  promote social harmony. For example, students from West Point, who recieve the best education,  most become one important part of the supports of the United States and do ceaseless effort to  the social harmony. Also, students graduate from MIT, UCLA, those top universities, make so  much contribution to sociaty that also promote harmony.

    What's more, I think questioning and criticizing which education encourages students to do  much to promote social harmony. Firstly, we have to admit that there are problems with our  sociaty. Those problems won't disappear by our ignoring. To solve them, what we need to do and  the only thing we can do is pointing them out and facing them. Without Lincon's questioning,  criticizing and fighting against slavery, we might still live that way. Is that a sociaty more  harmonious? Absolutely no. Sociaty needs to step forward. It needs somebody to notice the  disfigurements of it. It needs somebody to stand out to question it. It needs somebody to  criticize it. That's the way in which it can move on.

    However, as a coin has two sides, too much critique without sense does do little to promote social harmony. What we want is to solve social problems and make our lives better, so  questioning and criticizing should be well-grounded, and should go with workable solutions. If people question and criticize reasonlessly all the time, it only amplifies problems, and this may even do harm to social harmony.

    To sum up, education does much to promote social harmony. It prepares people with ability to make contribution to the sociaty. It shapes people's characters, which makes people get along easier. It also encourages students to point out the disfigurements of the sociaty and improve them. Education's status in promoting social harmony so important that it can be never replaced.

[ Last edited by Chloroplast923 on 2005-7-27 at 23:18 ]

d_messiahUID: 177468

从我这，要求不高，至少给出个题目

I totally看到后面的想到的，这个词用得是不是和你的主题有些矛盾 agree with the author 想这么写，还是spesker吧that, education, as a means by which we prepare people for society, not only teaches students to learn, but also encourages students to question and criticize. But I'm afraid I don't agree with the author到底同不同意？换个语气 that encouraging students to question and criticize makes education do little to promote social harmony. In fact, I think这种词就不要出现了, only when people of a society are well educated, can harmony of that society be promoted.

    First of all, the author points out education does little to promote social harmony because  it encourage students to quetion snd criticize, but what education does is more than that.感觉像ARGU It  teaches students lots of knowledge which helps them get along with nature and  fulfill their  jobs effective in the future. What'sWhat is more important, it also shapes the students ' character.  People well educated are kind, friendly, polite, and easy-going in most cases, and they often  have willpower to conquer difficulties and accomplish goals. These characters are helpful to  promote social harmonyFor example, students from West Point, who recieve the best education,  most become one important part of the supports of the United States and do ceaseless effort to  the social harmony. Also, students graduate from MIT, UCLA, those top universities, make so  much contribution to sociaty that also promote harmony.用得词很大，最好能具体点儿
    What's 同上more, I think同上 questioning and criticizing which education encourages students to do  much to promote social harmony 这句话感觉有问题. Firstly, we have to 用词太绝对admit that there are problems with our  sociaty 说的不太清楚. Those problems won't disappear by our ignoring. To solve them, what we need to do and  the only thing we can do is pointing them out and facing them. Without Lincon's questioning,  criticizing and fighting against slavery, we might still live that way. Is that a sociaty more  harmonious? Absolutely no. Sociaty needs to step forward. It needs somebody to notice the  disfigurements of it. It needs somebody to stand out to question it. It needs somebody to  criticize it. That's the way in which it can move on.

    However, as a coin has two sides 用得太。。。, too much critique without sense does do？ little to promote social harmony. What we want is to solve social problems and make our lives better, so  questioning and criticizing should be well-grounded, and should go with workable solutions. If people question and criticize reasonlessly all the time, it only amplifies problems, and this may even do harm to social harmony.

    To sum up, education does much to promote social harmony. It prepares people with ability to make contribution to the sociaty. It shapes people's characters, which makes people get along easier. It also encourages students to point out the disfigurements of the sociaty and improve them. Education's status in promoting social harmony so important that it can be never replaced.

  整篇感觉论证的不够深入
我晚上写的，有空拍拍

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bcomerUID: 182621

I totally agree with the author that, education, as a means by which we prepare people for society, not only teaches students to learn, but also encourages students to question and criticize. But I'm afraid I don't agree with the author that encouraging students to question and criticize makes education do little to promote social harmony. In fact, I think, only when people of a society are well educated, can harmony 没有动词词性啊 of that society be promoted.

    First of all后面有个Firstly,这里用To begin with 也可以^_^, the author points out education does little to promote social harmony because  it encourage encourages students to quetion snd criticize, but what education does is more than that. It  teaches students lots of the knowledge which helps them get along with nature and  fulfill their  jobs effective in the future. What's more important, it also shapes the students character.  People well educated are kind, friendly, polite, and easy-going in most cases, and they often  have willpower to conquer difficulties and 稍微有点重复，用两个and在一小句中 accomplish goals. These characters are helpful to  promote social harmony. For example, students from West Point, who recieve the best education,  most become one important part of the supports of the United States and do ceaseless effort a ceaseless effort?/efforts? to  the social harmony. Also, students graduate graduated from MIT, UCLA, those top universities, make so  much contribution to sociaty that also promote harmony. which make so many contributions to sociaty also promote harmony.

    What's more 前面用过一个what's more important,这里换成In additon, Moreover, Furthermore 也可以^_^, I think questioning and criticizing which education encourages students to do  much to promote social harmony. Firstly, we have to admit that there are +个修饰词,如manyproblems within our  sociatysociety. Those problems won't disappear by our ignoring. To solve them, what we need to do and  the only thing we can do is pointing them out and facing them. Without Lincon's questioning,  criticizing and fighting against slavery, we might still live +in that way. Is that a sociatysociety more  harmonious? Absolutely nonot. SociatySociety needs to step forward. It needs somebody to notice the  disfigurements of it. It needs somebody to stand out to question it. 排比时最后一个加个andIt needs somebody to  criticize it. That's the way in which it can move on.最后一句不好

    However, as a coin has two sides, too much critique without sense does do一般不用does do,这样就不用强调了 little to promote social harmony. What we want is to solve social problems and make our lives better, so  questioning and criticizing should be well-grounded, and should go with workable solutions. If people question and criticize reasonlessly all the time, it only amplifies problems, and this may even do harm to social harmony.

    To sum up, education does much to promote social harmony. It prepares people with ability to make contribution to the sociaty. It shapes people's characters, which makes people get along easier. It also encourages students to point out the disfigurements of the sociatysociety and improve them. Education's status in promoting social harmony +is so important that it can be never replaced.

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