issue4 V6 8.4 学科外知识的重要作用 沉默了三天来的第一篇 欢迎拍拍~

GladysryUID：198609

恩，这是我这几天来改好的第一篇，当时用了41分钟，整个篇幅比较小，是458个单词。我的思路很明确，是全力支持。主要论证方法是case by case,但是可能举的不够，显得有些单薄，希望大家能够多多提些看法，包括语言，逻辑，如何丰富。谢谢！


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No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study.

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In contemporary world, with the highly development of all areas, knowledge from other realms have become more and more useful for certain study fields. In fact, if we take a look at any realm existing in the world, we can find that only with knowledge and experience from outsiders will they advance to a whole new level.

The most conspicuous realms must be the scientific areas. Take biology, one of the most noticeable sciences in modern world for example, if it was not because of the development of mechanics several hundred years ago, the microscope would never come out and thus all the breakthrough to microbiology would never happen, not saying that the highly developed cell biology, molecular biology in contemporary world. Likewise, if it was not because of the communication among computer science, statistics and biology, the course bioinformation will never came into being and thus the great plan of the Human Genome Programme will never come to us, let alone about the quite attractive field of gene therapy. Additionally, not only in biology, but also in other scientific fields, many great breakthroughs were brought about by knowledge from outsiders. If it were not because of the development of technology in mechanics and computer science, the important branch of chemistry----the analyzing chemistry or the invention of spaceships would not appear, therefore the exploration to the organic compounds and the outer space will not be able to benefit we human beings.

An even more striking example of outside knowledge and experience bring to other fields' advancements may occur in the humanities and social areas which are always seemed as have no relationships with the development of science and technology. For researches in archeology, the come out of the detecting machine with isotopes provided it a most accurate way to compute the real time of all the antiques they explored out and thus also helps a  lot for the study of history because with the accurate time the antiques appeared, the historians can investigate the ancient culture more clearly and certainly. Therefore the process of development of a culture can be understood more thoroughly. And even in the art field, the investigations of anatomy helped a lot for great artists such as Leonardo da Vinci and Michelangelo because with better understanding of bodies' structure, artists as painters and sculptors can represent the trueness more vividly.

To sum up, no matter from which field's perspective, the study cannot advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to them, and with the most highly development of all areas in modern world, it can be predicted that the mutual communication and fusion of different courses, the advancement outsiders can bring to certain field of study must be more and more noticeable

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-5 at 02:40 ]

11yvetteUID：2102418

学习ing

11yvetteUID：2102418

------题目------
No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study.

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In contemporary world, with the highly development of all areas, knowledge from other realms have become more and more useful for certain study fields. In fact, if we take a look at any realm existing in the world, we can find that only with knowledge and experience from outsiders will they advance to a whole new level.观点提得很简洁

The most conspicuous realms must be the scientific areas. Take biology, one of the most noticeable sciences in modern world for example, if it was not because of the development of mechanics several hundred years ago, the microscope would never come out and thus all the breakthrough to microbiology would never happen, not saying that the highly developed cell biology, molecular biology in contemporary world. Likewise, if it was not because of the communication among computer science, statistics and biology, the course bioinformation will never came into being and thus the great plan of the Human Genome Programme will never come [这附近come用的比较多,要不换一个,emerge,or其他的] to us, let alone about the quite attractive field of gene therapy. .以上的例子举得非常有说服力 Additionally, not only in biology, but also in other scientific fields, many great breakthroughs [试试milestones] were brought about by knowledge from outsiders. If it were not because of the development of technology in mechanics and computer science, the important branch of chemistry----the analyzing chemistry or the invention of spaceships would not appear [这里最好把分析化学和空间科学分开来说,否则读者会把分号后面的内容与分号前内容混在一起读了] , therefore the exploration to the organic compounds and the outer space   [好像是放在一起说的,看来是我没读懂] will not be able to benefit we human beings.这段的说理还是很清晰的,只是没明白为什么在最后把分析化学和太空研究放在一起说,望gladysry解释:)

An even more striking example of outside knowledge and experience bring to other fields' advancements may occur in the humanities and social areas which are always seemed [which always seems] as have [having] no relationships [单数] with the development of science and technology. For researches in archeology, the come out of the detecting machine with isotopes provided it a most accurate way to compute the real time of all the antiques they explored out and thus also helps a  lot for the study of history because with the accurate time the antiques appeared, the historians can investigate the ancient culture more clearly and certainly. [这个例子太赞了,学习ing] Therefore the process of development of a culture can be understood more thoroughly. And even in the art field, the investigations of anatomy helped a lot for great artists such as Leonardo da Vinci and Michelangelo because with better understanding of bodies' structure, artists as painters and sculptors can represent the trueness more vividly. [好例子支持了这段的观点]

To sum up, no matter from which field's perspective, the study cannot advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to them, and with the most highly development of all areas in modern world, it can be predicted that the mutual communication and fusion of different courses, the advancement outsiders can bring to certain field of study must be more and more noticeable

这个题目用case by case的方法来写是再好不过的了~~
而且文中的举例都是很贴切很能证明作者观点的,使得文章结构,条理清晰,不过可能是由于case by case的写法,过多的偏重于例子,而少了一些自己的分析说理性的文字,这也许是唯一的缺憾,呵呵,继续讨论~~

GladysryUID：198609

嗯，的确如此。对于case by case 的文章，抽象的就是空道理，有例子的就总是拼命举，重心总有些不好掌握。我再想想看,正好字数不够。（呵呵，谢谢你啊，我是觉得这篇文章有点奇怪，可是看其论证来又察觉不了什么，原来是重心不平衡啊……）

那个分析化学和空间科学是因为想多举几个学科已证明有代表性，又不想花太多的笔墨在上面，所以就出现了那样的情况……:L

呵呵，我的语言好差劲的，所以只有那几个可怜的小词~要向大家多多学习~

sitanmmUID：210732

我的第一篇写的也是issue 4
感觉issue 4只能一个一个举例，不太好有层次啊。

nickaaronleeUID：183378

------题目------
No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study.

------正文------
In contemporary world, with the highly development of all areas, knowledge from other realms have become more and more useful for certain study fields. In fact, if we take a look at any realm existing in the world, we can find that only with knowledge and experience from outsiders will they advance to a whole new level.

The most conspicuous realms must be the scientific areas. （加一个更好的ts吧）（Take biology, one of the most noticeable sciences in modern world for example, if it was not because of the development of mechanics several hundred years ago, the microscope would never come out and thus all the breakthrough to microbiology would never happen, not saying that the highly developed cell biology, molecular biology in contemporary world. Likewise, if it was not because of the communication among computer science, statistics and biology, the course bioinformation will never came into being and thus the great plan of the Human Genome Programme will never come to us, let alone about the quite attractive field of gene therapy. 例子具的很不错）Additionally, not only in biology, but also in other scientific fields, many great breakthroughs were brought about by knowledge from outsiders. If it were not because of the development of technology in mechanics and computer science, the important branch of chemistry----the （analyzing chemistry or the invention of spaceships 这两个有什么必要的联系吗？是完全不同的领域阿）would not appear, therefore the exploration to the organic compounds and the outer space will not be able to benefit we human beings.（缺乏一个总结）

An even more striking example of outside knowledge and experience bring to other fields' advancements may occur in the humanities and social areas which are always seemed as have no relationships with the development of science and technology. （For researches in archeology, the come out of the detecting machine with isotopes provided it a most accurate way to compute the real time of all the antiques they explored out and thus also helps a  lot for the study of history because with the accurate time the antiques appeared, the historians can investigate the ancient culture more clearly and certainly. 这个例子也很好啊，赞）Therefore the process of development of a culture can be understood more thoroughly.（ And even in the art field, the investigations of anatomy helped a lot for great artists such as Leonardo da Vinci and Michelangelo because with better understanding of bodies' structure赞again）, artists as painters and sculptors can represent the trueness more vividly. （感觉还是缺乏一个总结）

To sum up, no matter from which field's perspective, the study cannot advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to them, and with the most highly development of all areas in modern world, it can be predicted that the mutual communication and fusion of different courses, the advancement outsiders can bring to certain field of study must be more and more noticeable
（这篇文章最大的优点就是例子非常好，很有说服力，但是有一个问题就是缺乏分析，不能只是把例子堆出来而什么都不分析，还有感觉文章应该还没有结束就突然to sum up了，最好再让步一下。加油~~~已经有很多进步啦~~~我希望我们战友每个人的文章都有两个人来拍，请多多支持阿~~~）

GladysryUID：198609

厚厚厚，谢谢！！问题一针见血！

我会按照大家的意见好好改的！

共同进步！！支持多人互改！