TOEFL 4—6月-Dark_Tournament小组写作 桑梓 第十二次作业

桑梓UID: 2613051

There is a heat discussion in our society about the daily homework assigned to all the students. Some people argue that doing homework everyday is too heavy a burden for students that they do not have time to do other things which are of great importance to their development, while others insist that the only way to grasp the knowledge is to practice everyday. Admittedly, each side has their own merits, but as far as I am concerned, either is the best answer.

A well-prepared person need not only the expertise in the scientific world, but also the knowledge about the society. Other than the work from school, a student needs an avalanche of other qualities  to achieve success, such as the communicating skills, team spirit and so on. Those skills can not be acquired from the homework, in order to attain them, you have to do some social work with others.That means that we should allow the students some time free of the homework so that they can devote themselves to other activities and get the understanding of the society. Too much homework is obviously against this idea. Under the pressure of heavy homework, the students have to imprison themselves in the classroom or the study and bury themselves in the books without knowing what is happening outside. In this way, we will not have any well-developed people.

On the other hand, homework is necessary to some extent especially for those who are a little bit lazy. We have to admit that even though we pay our attention to the information given by the teachers during the class, without practicing after school, there is a great possibility that we might forget it soon. Without homework, the diligent ones might review what have been taught from time to time, but the not diligent ones might forget their books and also the knowledge they have learned as soon as they leave school. Then the attempts made by the teachers are in vain. If there are homework, even the lazy have to go through the books in order to finish their tasks. Then a better understanding and acquirement can be achieved. From the discussion here, I just have to say that homework is necessary.

To sum up, daily homework is necessary, but we have to make sure that the homework is of the right amount. It should not be too heavy, since the students need time for activities outside the school so that they can get a well development.

水龙娃娃UID: 2359238

There is a heat discussion in our society about the daily homework assigned to all the students. Some people argue that doing homework everyday is too heavy a burden for students that they do not have time to do other things which are of great importance to their development, while others insist that the only way to grasp the knowledge is to practice everyday. Admittedly, each side has their own merits, but as far as I am concerned, either is the best answer.

A well-prepared person need（need） not only the expertise in the scientific world, but also the knowledge about the society. Other than the work from school, a student needs an avalanche of other qualities
to achieve success, such as the communicating skills, team spirit and so on. Those skills can not be acquired from the homework, in order to attain them, you have to do some social work with others（这个句子中间没有连接词呀）. That（It） means that we should allow the students some time free of the（去掉the） homework so that they can devote themselves to other activities and get the understanding of the society. Too much homework is obviously against this idea. Under the pressure of heavy homework, the students have to imprison themselves in the classroom or the study and bury themselves in the books without knowing what is happening outside. In this way, we will not have any well-developed people.

On the other hand, homework is necessary to some extent especially for those who are a little bit lazy. We have to admit that even though we pay our attention to the information given by the（去掉the。有些地方the用的比较频繁，其实是可以不用的。请再仔细斟酌） teachers during the class, without practicing after school, there is a great possibility that we might forget it soon. Without homework, the diligent ones might review what have been taught from time to time, but the not diligent（换成sloth，不清楚用not diligent是否正确） ones might forget their books（应该是书中的内容而不是书，这两个意思差的有点远） and also the knowledge they have learned as soon as they leave school. Then the attempts made by the teachers are in vain. If there are （is）homework, even the lazy have to go through the books in order to finish their tasks. Then a better understanding and acquirement can be achieved. From the discussion here, I just have to say that homework is necessary.

To sum up, daily homework is necessary, but we have to make sure that the homework is of the right amount. It should not be too heavy, since the students need time for activities outside the school so that they can get a well development.

感觉作者应该是部分赞同该题目的，但是写出来却是平衡的结构。个人觉得还是写成有倾向性的更好一些，段落也最好是五段，四段感觉比较单薄。
第二段的论述题个小建议，希望作者能把重复的地方综合一下并且举出更具体的例子。具体再具体。比如其他的能力，最好能有具体或真实的事例来印证，而不是只是说对我们是有好处的。
个人看法，LZ参考，一起加油～～:loveliness:

gundammoleUID: 2300958

1# 桑梓
There is a heat discussion in(debate on) our society about the daily homework assigned to all the students. Some people argue that doing homework everyday is too heavy a burden for students that they do not have time to do other things which are of great importance to their development(人的成长应该用growth), while others insist that the only way to grasp the knowledge is to practice everyday. Admittedly, each side has their own merits, but as far as I am concerned, either is the best answer.

A well-prepared person need(need放在not only后面) not only the expertise in the scientific world, but also (require) the knowledge about the society. Other than the work from school, a student needs an avalanche of other qualities to achieve success, such as the communicating skills, team spirit and so on. Those skills can not be acquired from the homework. In order to attain them, you have to do some social work with others. That means that(去掉) we should allow the students some time free of the homework（give students a little free time）so that they can devote themselves to other activities and get the understanding of the society. Too much homework is obviously against this idea. Under the pressure of heavy homework, the students have to imprison themselves in the classroom or the study and bury themselves in the books without knowing what is happening outside. In this way, we will not have any well-developed people.


On the other hand, homework is necessary to some extent especially for those who are a little bit lazy. We have to admit that even though we pay our attention to(on) the information given by the teachers during(in) the class, without practicing after school, there is a great possibility that we might forget it soon(we might probably forget it soon). Without homework, the diligent ones might review what have been taught from time to time, but the not diligent(the others) ones might forget their books(忘记书本还是忘记学的知识?) and also the knowledge they have learned as soon as they leave school. Then the attempts made by the teachers are in vain. If there are(is) homework, even the lazy (students) have to go through the books in order to finish their tasks. Then a better understanding and acquirement can be achieved. From the discussion here(As discussed so far), I just have to say that homework is necessary.

sum up, daily homework is necessary, but we have to make sure that the homework is of the right amount. It should not be too heavy, since the students need time for activities outside the school so that they can get a well development.

LZ写的不错呀，把中立的观点很好的表达出来了，这个可不是这么好写的。略微有点语法错误，下次改正就好了。要对自己有信心啊，加油加油！
如有修改错误的地方，尽管指出。共勉^_^