0910G [Just do it]Issue13by二月蓝

二月蓝UID: 2643877

0910G [Just do it]Issue13  
09-06-07 字数统计521
    I fundamentally agree with the statement that the government should prevent the lesser-known languages.
    Today, the population of the world is more and more, on the contrary, the number of people who speak the lesser-known languages seems fewer and fewer. There are two chief reasons. Firstly, the internationalism results in the unification of various languages. It seems more convenient and comfortable to communicate with each other in the same language in daily life. People don’t have enough time to study so many kinds of languages. Secondly, people of some races don’t want to have a baby, therefore, the gradually slow-down population leads fewer and fewer people to speak their mother language. Meanwhile, some of the descendant choose to speak English or some other languages. There are some other reasons which create the decline of the amount of people who speak those lesser-known languages. For example, it appeared that people neglect the essentiality of some languages. All the above causations influence the development of the languages.
    A language is not only an instrument of communication but also is the representation of the culture. The loosing of the languages will bring the disappearance of the culture. Today more and more countries pay attention to valued objects and qualities, such as historic buildings, unspoilted countryside, and cultural traditions that have been passed down from previous generations. The languages are one of the cultural heritages and it may be more easily ignored than the other practicalities. Thereby, we human should take responsibility for preventing the lesser-known languages from being extinct.
    For preserving the gradually disappearing languages, the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should be the pioneer. First of all, they have duties to protect the cultural heritage such as the disappearing languages. Secondly, they have power and revenue to build some research institutes for languages studying. The governments also have the abilities to cultivate students with love of culture. Korea seems more concerned about the cultural heritages than the other countries. They spent plenty of money and manpower to prevent valued objects from extinction. Furthermore, they regularly apply for the world cultural heritages.
    Moreover, civilian organizations are also vital power to protect lesser-known languages. Local people use languages the most so if they could gather and establish their own organizations, the originally languages could be protected in whole. When some countries or people have any difficulties, such as countries in wars or in poverty, they could appeal for assistance from international organizations. For example, UNESCO, United Nations Educational, Scientific and Cultural Organization, an international organization set up for cooperation in education, science, culture and so on. It encourages the countries all over the world to safeguard their cultural heritages, afford various kinds of technologies and trainings, offer aids at emergency and work for effective international cooperation and so forth. With the help of international assistance, the countries and local people could have more resources to protect the lesser-known languages.
    Not only the lesser-known languages but also large amounts of valued objects are faced with extinction. The governments should do their best to safeguard cultural heritages from convoking natives and working together with the international help.

leopard2009UID: 2596872

I fundamentally agree with the statement that the government should prevent the lesser-known languages. 二月蓝，这一句话太有歧义了，是应该阻止语言消失，不是阻止语言哈

    Today, the populationof the world is more and more, ,on the contrary,直接用but好一点， the number of peoplewho speak the lesser-known languages seems fewer and fewer. There aretwo chief reasons.可是这段好像谈了四个原因哈 Firstly, the internationalism results in theunification of various languages. It seems more convenient andcomfortable to communicate with each other in the same language indaily life. People don’t have enough time to study so many kinds oflanguages. Secondly, people of some races don’t want to have a baby,therefore, the gradually slow-down population leads fewer and fewerpeople to speak their mother language. Meanwhile, some of thedescendant choose to speak English or some other languages. There aresome other reasons which create the decline of the amount of people whospeak those lesser-known languages. For example, it appeared thatpeople neglect the essentiality of some languages. All the abovecausations influence the development of the languages.
这个背景可以简略一下放在第一段开头说。
    A language is not onlyan instrument of communication but also is the representation of theculture. The loosing of the languages will bring the disappearance ofthe culture.为什么呢？这个比较重要。我写第一遍的时候也犯了这个错误，但是有gter给我提出来了。这个题目一定要回答为什么语言对文化的重要性，不然后面的立论就不可靠哈。 Today more and more countries pay attention to valuedobjects and qualities, such as historic buildings, unspoiltedcountryside, and cultural traditions that have been passed down fromprevious generations. The languages are one of the cultural heritagesand it may be more easily ignored than the other practicalities.Thereby, we human should take responsibility for preventing thelesser-known languages from being extinct.
这段后面的类比还是很好，让我们很明白要保护语言。
    For preserving thegradually disappearing languages, the governments of countries in whichthese languages are spoken should be the pioneer. First of all, theyhave duties to protect the cultural heritage such as the disappearinglanguages. Secondly, they have power and revenue to build some researchinstitutes for languages studying. The governments also have theabilities to cultivate students with love of culture. Korea seems moreconcerned about the cultural heritages than the other countries. Theyspent plenty of money and manpower to prevent valued objects fromextinction. Furthermore, they regularly apply for the world culturalheritages.这个例子有点不恰当。如果要用这个例子，可以谈谈通过韩国政府所做的，我们可以看到他们的语言被保护了，文化传统就保护了，以此说明政府可以帮助阻止语言的消失
    Moreover, civilianorganizations are also the vital power to protect lesser-known languages.Local people use languages the most so that if they could gather andestablish their own organizations, the originally languages could beprotected in whole. When some countries or people have anydifficulties, such as countries in wars or in poverty, they couldappeal for assistance from international organizations. For example,UNESCO, United Nations Educational, Scientific and CulturalOrganization, an international organization set up for cooperation ineducation, science, culture and so on. It encourages the countries allover the world to safeguard their cultural heritages, afford variouskinds of technologies and trainings, offeraids at emergency and work for effective international cooperation andso forth. With the help of international assistance, the countries andlocal people could have more resources to protect the lesser-knownlanguages.
    Not only thelesser-known languages but also large amounts of valued objects arefaced with extinction. The governments should do their best tosafeguard cultural heritages from\这个地方感觉是through convoking natives and workingtogether with the international help.
作者在表达上应该是不错的，注意一下说理就更好了哈。
一点不一定正确的意见，共同探讨哈

二月蓝UID: 2643877

    I fundamentally agree with the statement that the government should prevent the lesser-known languages from extinct.
     Today, the population of the world is more and more, but the number of people who speak the lesser-known languages seems fewer and fewer. There are two chief reasons. Firstly, the internationalism results in the unification of various languages. It seems more convenient and comfortable to communicate with each other in the same language indaily life. People don’t have enough time to study so many kinds of languages. Secondly, people of some races don’t want to have a baby, therefore, the gradually slow-down population leads fewer and fewer people to speak their mother language. Meanwhile, some of the descendant choose to speak English or some other languages. There are some other reasons which also create the decline of the amount of people who speak those lesser-known languages. For example, it appeared that people neglect the essentiality of some languages. All the above causations influence the development of the languages.
    A language is not only an instrument of communication but also is the representation of the culture. The loosing of the languages will bring the disappearance of the culture. Today we could get various information about predecessor from the lesser-known languages. A language is not only a language, but also represent the culture of a country. If a country lost its core of the culture, it would extinct with the language. People may exist by copying the idea of the other countries, but they may not have the idea of their own race. They won’t be their own again and would change into spiritual slaves. More and more countries pay attention to valued objects and qualities, such as historic buildings, unspoilted countryside, and cultural traditions that have been passed down from previous generations. The languages are one of the cultural heritages and it may be more easily ignored than the other practicalities. Thereby, we human should take responsibility for preventing the lesser-known languages from being extinct.
    For preserving the gradually disappearing languages, the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should be the pioneer. First of all, they have duties to protect the cultural heritage such as the disappearing languages. Secondly, they have power and revenue to build some research institutes for languages studying. The governments also have the abilities to cultivate students with love of culture. Korea is very concerned about the cultural heritages than the other countries. They spent plenty of money and manpower to prevent valued objects from extinction. Not only their languages but also other heritages are well protected and popularized by applying for the world cultural heritages. We could conclude from the example that a government really has the duty and ability to prevent lesser-known languages from extinct.
    Moreover, civilian organizations are also vital power to protect lesser-known languages. Local people use languages the most so if they could gather and establish their own organizations, the originally languages could be protected in whole. When some countries or people have any difficulties, such as countries in wars or in poverty, they could appeal for assistance from international organizations. For example, UNESCO, United Nations Educational, Scientific and Cultural Organization, an international organization set up for cooperation in education, science, culture and so on. It encourages the countries all over the world to safeguard their cultural heritages, afford various kinds of technologies and trainings, offer aids at emergency and work for effective international cooperation and so forth. With the help of international assistance, the countries and local people could have more resources to protect the lesser-known languages.
    Not only the lesser-known languages but also large amounts of valued objects are faced with extinction. The governments should do their best to safeguard cultural heritages through convoking natives and working together with the international help.

二月蓝UID: 2643877

非常感谢楼上提出的建议     
     I fundamentally agree with the statement that the government should prevent the lesser-known languages from extinction.
     Today, the population of the world is continuously increasing, but the number of people who speak the lesser-known languages seems fewer and fewer. There are two chief reasons. Firstly, the globalization results in the unification of various languages. It seems more convenient and comfortable to communicate with each other in the same language in daily life. People don’t have enough time to study so many kinds of languages. Secondly, people of some races don’t want to have a baby, therefore, the gradually slow-down population（population decreasing gradually?下一位帮忙看看哪个更好哦） leads fewer and fewer people to speak their mother tongue. Meanwhile, some of the descendant choose to speak English or some other languages. There are some other reasons which also create the decline of the amount of people who speak those lesser-known languages. For example, it appeared that people neglect the essentiality of some languages. All the above causations influence the evolution of the languages.
    A language is not only an instrument of communication but also is the representation of the culture. The losing of the languages will bring the disappearance of the culture. Today we could get various information about predecessor from the lesser-known languages. A language is not only a language, but also represent the culture of a country. If a country lost its core of the culture, it would extinct with the language. People may exist by copying the idea of the other countries, but they may not have the idea of their own race. They won’t be themselves again and would change into spiritual slaves. More and more countries pay attention to valued objects and qualities, such as historic buildings, unspoilted countryside, and cultural traditions that have been passed down from previous generations. The languages are one of the cultural heritages and it may be more easily ignored than the other practicalities. Thereby, we human should take responsibility for preventing the lesser-known languages from being extinct.
    For preserving the gradually disappearing languages, the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should be the pioneer. First of all, they have duties to protect the cultural heritage such as the disappearing languages. Secondly, they have power and revenue to build some research institutes for languages studying. The governments also have the abilities to cultivate students with love of culture. Korea is very concerned about the cultural heritages than the other countries. They spent plenty of money and manpower to prevent valued objects from extinction. Not only their languages but also other heritages are well protected and popularized by applying for the world cultural heritages. We could conclude from the example that a government really has the duty and ability to prevent lesser-known languages from extinct.
    Moreover, civilian organizations are also vital power to protect lesser-known languages. Local people use languages the most so if they could gather and establish their own organizations, the originally languages could be protected in whole. When some countries or people have any difficulties, such as countries in wars or in poverty, they could appeal for assistance from international organizations. For example, UNESCO, United Nations Educational, Scientific and Cultural Organization, an international organization set up for cooperation in education, science, culture and so on. It encourages the countries all over the world to safeguard their cultural heritages, afford various kinds of technologies and trainings, offer aids at emergency and work for effective international cooperation and so forth. With the help of international assistance, the countries and local people could have more resources to protect the lesser-known languages.
    Not only the lesser-known languages but also large amounts of valued objects are faced with extinction. The governments should do their best to safeguard cultural heritages through convoking natives and working together with the international help.

chunleileeUID: 2404465

我觉得不能说不要baby，可以说成many people who can speak lesser-know language move to the city 去寻求更多更好的机会， 然后在那定居生子，从而说lesser-know language 的越来越少，这样是不是更好一点？

zmjxf2008UID: 2597395

I fundamentally agree with the statement that the government should prevent the lesser-known languages from extinction.
     Today, the population of the world is continuously increasing, but the number of people who speak the lesser-known languages seems fewer and fewer. There are two chief reasons. Firstly, the globalization results in the unification of various languages. It seems more convenient and comfortable to communicate with each other in the same language in daily life. People don’t have enough time to study so many kinds of languages. Secondly, people of some races don’t want to have a baby, therefore, the gradually slow-down population（gradually decreasing population是不是好些）leads fewer and fewer people to speak their mother tongue.（个人觉得这个原因有些牵强，记得bs的时候谈到一些小语种消失的原因，可以看看聊天记录） Meanwhile, some of the descendant(s) choose to speak English or some other (dominant)languages. There are some other reasons which also create the decline of the amount of people who speak those lesser-known languages. For example, it appeared that people neglect the essentiality of some languages. All the above causations influence the evolution of the languages.（段落之间的逻辑有点不清楚，firstly...secondly...meanwhile...some other...for example...)

A language is not only an instrument of communication but also is(可以不要） the representation of the culture.（不错的主题句） The losing of the languages will bring the disappearance of the culture. Today we could get various information about predecessor from the lesser-known languages. A language is not only a language, but also represent the culture of a country.(这句话的意思反复说来说去，可以去掉）If a country lost its core of the culture, it would extinct with the language. People may exist by copying the idea of the other countries, but they may not have the idea of their own race. They won’t be themselves again and would change into spiritual slaves. More and more countries pay attention to valued objects and qualities, such as historic buildings, unspoilted countryside, and cultural traditions that have been passed down from previous generations. The languages are one of the cultural heritages and it may be more easily ignored than the other practicalities. Thereby, we human should take responsibility for preventing the lesser-known languages from being extinct.（总的来讲这段写的还不错，就是同样意思的句子不要重复说，句与句的逻辑应该在强些）

For preserving the gradually disappearing languages, the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should be the pioneer.（主题句都写的不错） First of all, they have duties to protect the cultural heritage such as the disappearing languages. Secondly, they have power and revenue to build some research institutes for languages studying. The governments also have the abilities to cultivate students with love of culture. Korea is very concerned about the cultural heritages than the other countries. They spent plenty of money and manpower to prevent valued objects from extinction. Not only their languages but also other heritages are well protected and popularized by applying for the world cultural heritages. We could conclude from the example that a government really has the duty and ability to prevent lesser-known languages from extinct.（论证的比较清晰，值得学习）
    Moreover, civilian organizations are also vital power to protect lesser-known languages. Local people use languages the most so if they could gather and establish their own organizations, the originally languages could be protected in whole. When some countries or people have any difficulties, such as countries in wars or in poverty, they could appeal for assistance from international organizations. For example, UNESCO, United Nations Educational, Scientific and Cultural Organization, an international organization set up for cooperation in education, science, culture and so on. It encourages the countries all over the world to safeguard their cultural heritages, afford various kinds of technologies and trainings, offer aids at emergency and work for effective international cooperation and so forth. With the help of international assistance, the countries and local people could have more resources to protect the lesser-known languages.
    Not only the lesser-known languages but also large amounts of valued objects are faced with extinction.（这跟主题就没啥关系了） The governments should do their best to safeguard cultural heritages through convoking natives and working together with the international help.

觉得语言方面没什么大问题了，第二个正文段论证需要再丰富些，多看看论坛上的写作素材，加油~

二月蓝UID: 2643877

感谢各位，我发现自己现在主要的问题了，除了一些思维上的，还有论证过程比较啰嗦，不是言简意赅，简单句较多，我会多努力，争取写出比较精炼的