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TOPIC: ARGUMENT242 - The following appeared as an editorial in the student newspaper of Groveton College.

"To combat the recently reported dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton's honor code replaced an old-fashioned system in which students were closely monitored by teachers and an average of thirty cases of cheating per year were reported. The honor code has proven far more successful: in the first year it was in place, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating; five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey conducted by the Groveton honor council, a majority of students said that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without."
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TIME: 00:56:50
DATE: 2009-6-7 20:13:08

The editorial asserted that in order to combat the dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's, which has proven far more successful in decreasing the reported cases of cheating. However, there isn’t cogent evidence to prove the arguer’s conclusion. Firstly, it is mentioned that Groveton's honor code worked successfully in Groveton College, which could not prove honor codes could also work well in other colleges and universities. Various factors, including the quality of students and teachers, the academic atmosphere in colleges and universities, can affect the result of the application of honor codes. It's possible the academic atmosphere was cautious and responsible, with a minority of students cheated in Groveton College. Then the use of honor codes can inhibit cheating effectively. Otherwise, if most of the Groveton College students cheated in their academic endeavors, the outcome of introduction of honor code would have not been so great. Secondly, the comparison of the number of cases of cheating is not objective. For the number of cheating case comes from people's reports, which means if nobody reports there will be no case of cheating, no matter whether there is any. Therefore, the number of cases people report may not be true. It is possible that in the old-fashioned way, with the students closely monitored by teachers, it is easy for the cheating to be revealed. However, with the honor codes, it is required students to report the cases of cheating, which might be concealed. Finally, in order to show the advantages of the honor codes, the editorial lists the number of reported cheating cases in the first year, fifth year when honor codes was in place, while not mentioning the data for the second, third and fourth year. It raises me the suspicion that the number of cases in the three years was more than the average level, which were thirty cases before the application of honor codes. In conclusion, the evidence provided by the editorial provides is not necessarily related with the conclusion that honor codes should be adopted in colleges and universities. The outcome of popularizing the honor codes is not clear. If the arguer wants to persuade others the advantage of honor codes, it is necessary to do more investigation.

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The editorial asserted that in order to combat the dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's, which has proven far more successful in decreasing the reported cases of cheating. However, there isn’t cogent evidence to prove the arguer’s conclusion.

Firstly, it is mentioned that Groveton's honor code worked successfully in Groveton College, which could not prove honor codes could also work well in other colleges and universities. Various factors, including the quality of students and teachers, the academic atmosphere in colleges and universities, can affect the result of the application of honor codes. It's possible the academic atmosphere was cautious and responsible, with a minority of students cheated in Groveton College. Then the use of honor codes can inhibit cheating effectively. Otherwise, if most of the Groveton College students cheated in their academic endeavors, the outcome of introduction of honor code would have not been so great.

Secondly, the comparison of the number of cases of cheating is not objective. For the number of cheating case comes from people's reports, which means if nobody reports there will be no case of cheating, no matter whether there is any. Therefore, the number of cases people report may not be true. It is possible that in the old-fashioned way, with the students closely monitored by teachers, it is easy for the cheating to be revealed. However, with the honor codes, it is required students to report the cases of cheating, which might be concealed.

Finally, in order to show the advantages of the honor codes, the editorial lists the number of reported cheating cases in the first year, fifth year when honor codes was in place, while not mentioning the data for the second, third and fourth year. It raises me the suspicion that the number of cases in the three years was more than the average level, which was thirty cases before the application of honor codes.

In conclusion, the evidence the editorial provides is not necessarily related with the conclusion that honor codes should be adopted in colleges and universities. The outcome of popularizing the honor codes is not clear. It is dubious that whether the reported numbers of cheating case is true and why the arguer didn't mention the number in the second, third and fourth year after the honor code was in place. If the arguer wants to persuade others the advantage of honor codes, it is necessary to do more investigation.

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The editorial asserted that in order to combat the dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's, which has proven far more successful in decreasing the reported cases of cheating. However, there isn’t cogent evidence to prove the arguer’s conclusion. （开头简洁提出观点，赞！）

Firstly, it is mentioned that Groveton's honor code worked successfully in Groveton College, which could not prove honor codes could also work well in other colleges and universities. Various factors, including the quality of students and teachers, the academic atmosphere in colleges and universities, can affect the result of the application of honor codes. It's possible the academic atmosphere was cautious and responsible, with a minority of students cheated in Groveton College. Then the use of honor codes can inhibit cheating effectively. Otherwise, if most of the Groveton College students cheated in their academic endeavors, the outcome of introduction of honor code would have not been so great.

Secondly, the comparison of the number of cases of cheating is not objective. For the number of cheating case comes from people's reports, which means if nobody reports there will be no case of cheating, no matter whether there is any. （赞！）Therefore, the number of cases people report may not be true. It is possible that in the old-fashioned way, with the students closely monitored by teachers, it is easy for the cheating to be revealed. However, with the honor codes, it is required students to report the cases of cheating, which might be concealed.

Finally, in order to show the advantages of the honor codes, the editorial lists the number of reported cheating cases in the first year, fifth year when honor codes was in place, while not mentioning the data for the second, third and fourth year. It raises me the suspicion that the number of cases in the three years was more（more修饰number不合适吧） than the average level, which was thirty cases before the application of honor codes.

In conclusion, the evidence the editorial provides is not necessarily related with the conclusion that honor codes should be adopted in colleges and universities. The outcome of popularizing the honor codes is not clear. It is dubious that whether the reported numbers of cheating case is true and why the arguer didn't mention the number in the second, third and fourth year after the honor code was in place. If the arguer wants to persuade others the advantage of honor codes, it is necessary to do more investigation.
看了三遍 找不出什么问题。语言，逻辑都很强。

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The editorial asserted that in order to combat the dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's, which has proven far more successful in decreasing the reported cases of cheating. However, there isn’t cogent evidence to prove the arguer’s conclusion.

Firstly, it is mentioned that Groveton's honor code worked successfully in Groveton College, which could not prove honor codes could also work well in other colleges and universities. Various factors, including the quality of students and teachers, the academic atmosphere in colleges and universities, can affect the result of the application of honor codes. It's possible the academic atmosphere was cautious and responsible, with a minority of students cheated in Groveton College. Then the use of honor codes can inhibit cheating effectively. Otherwise, if most of the Groveton College students cheated in their academic endeavors, the outcome of introduction of honor code would have not been so great.

Secondly, the comparison of the number of cases of cheating is not objective. For the number of cheating case comes from people's reports, which means if nobody reports there will be no case of cheating, no matter whether there is any. Therefore, the number of cases people report may not be true. It is possible that in the old-fashioned way, with the students closely monitored by teachers, it is easy for the cheating to be revealed. However, with the honor codes, it is required students to report the cases of cheating, which might be concealed.
Finally, in order to show the advantages of the honor codes, the editorial lists the number of reported cheating cases in the first year, fifth year when honor codes was in place, while not mentioning the data for the second, third and fourth year. It raises me the suspicion that the number of cases in the three years was more than the average level, which were thirty cases before the application of honor codes.

In conclusion, the evidence the editorial provides（provided by editorials ） is not necessarily related with the conclusion that honor codes should be adopted in colleges and universities. The outcome of popularizing the honor codes is not clear. It is dubious that whether the reported numbers of cheating case is true and why the arguer didn't mention the number in the second, third and fourth year after the honor code was in place. If the arguer wants to persuade others the advantage of honor codes, it is necessary to do more investigation.(结论太详细了，尤其是第二年三年的！)
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我觉得的你的文章逻辑超清晰，不管是issue还是argument，值得学习！
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行文流畅，赞！