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RE: Issue69 By WDI小组 snail
The author asserts that few restrictions should be placed on scientific research and development by government.(可以适当的改写一下题目) In my view, I tend to agree this assertion with reservation. (含蓄不够直接,中式思维)Because scientists pay more attention to their interests rather than demands of government, in certain cases,(总是喜欢用这个词~~)
scientific research is one step of the development of society and it cannot be understood by the public and government.
(累赘)In these circumstances, I agree with the author' assertion. However, if scientific research does harm to society or it requires international cooperation, government should play a part.(觉得你开头段写的有点长,表明自己观点不够直接。开头段要简洁
最好不要太多。)
On the one hand,(第一段开始你总是另一方面,这个地方缺少本段主题句) Einstein once said: “The interest Is the best teacher.” I consider it is personnel interests rather than demands of government that inspire scientists and excite theirs’ creativity. (前面这段话好像和整段的论证联系不太大。要是真的想用这个论点的话,要在详细的论证,后面的部分另起一段。)in (句首要大写)such cases, the development of science might be much ahead of the development of society. When it comes to this circumstance,(circumstances可以直接用scientific research) the scientific research, which (这里应该用that 主句从句)might benefit later generations, (可以去掉)often could not be accepted(in that time 强调一下会更好点), let alone understood by the public and government. In such a case,(你好像特别喜欢用这个短语) if government holds back the scientific research, probably it might not block the development of the temporary society, but it Might prevent later generations from benefiting from precedent achievements. For example, consider Wright Brothers, the investors(这个事投资者的意思,改成inventor) of plane. At that time, their exploration and research is jeered at
(去掉)by the public and government. However, from the version angles of the present age, I believe that anyone would praise their great contributions to the world. Provided that the government then in power contained their research(?没懂), we perhaps cannot enjoy the convenience
brought by flight until now. In short, considering, in certain cases, the advancement of scientific research, government should not restrict the scientific research.(少主题句,这是最大的问题)
However, on the other hand, because science is a two-edged sword, scientific research does not always promote the development of society and human beings. When scientific research conflicts with the development of society or the basic value of human beings, government should restrict, even prevent the scientific research.(个人建议把这句话放在段首,因为它是主题句。) Consider the nuclear engineering as an example. If government pay no attention to and lose control of the development of nuclear weapons, the numerous nuclear weapons would bring serious agony to the world and human beings. Another example is biological engineering. If restriction is not place on chemical and biological weapons, when these weapons are used in war, it could also bring great sufferings to the public involved in war. In short, government has the responsibility to restrict, even prevent the development of scientific research which does harm to the world and mankind.
From another standpoint, in some areas of scientific research, government plays a significant role in promoting the development of scientific research. Because some scientific research is difficult for only one country to perform, in such a case, international cooperation is necessary and helpful. For example, consider Human Genome Project, which is one of the greatest feats of human history. Under the leadership of governments of different countries, there are at least 18 countries that participated in this great scientific research including U.S, UK, Germany, France, Japan, China and so on; all of these scientists from different countries make great contributions to Human Genome Project. In short, when it comes to the scientific research that needs international cooperation, government should play a role(rather than restrict ).
In sum, I concede that in some cases the limitations placed on scientific research is unnecessary, even harmful. However, when scientific research does harm to the development of society and human beings or it demands international cooperation, government should play a (significant)part rather than keep away from scientific research.
后面写的还是比较流畅的,要注意第一段。 |
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