【辉太郎杀G大队】7/14 作业by hdsf2003

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07-14----------------------------------------------
Issue
212
"If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable."

To varying degrees, all of us have the strong desire to achieve a goal. Maybe the journey to the success is arduous and no one can make sure they can find it, but most people would like to do their best for it is a dream in their deep heart. As far as I am concerned, it is totally reasonable to take all feasible measurements to make our dreams to come true.


First of all, it is necessary to reevaluate the reality of so-called "worthy". Whether a goal is deserved to cost our precious time and energy must be conducted, for we never fail to notice instances that many people go astray for their wrong goals. Some people dare steal the railways' steel but been caught. When they are asked why they do that, an amazing reply is "I want to buy a new car". It is ridiculous, isn't it? Hence, an enlightened goal is the prerequisite to stretch out our next step.


Through our own hard work, it is the most reliable way to get the goal. Once finding a goal, we can open our mind to figure out all possible means to turn it come true. More importantly, face the difficulties by ourselves first. Many people loss their confidence and encouragement in front of tough troubles, however, it is the right time we can promote ourselves and increase our capacity of tolerance. And, there are times when we face the various problems alone, the only and most reliable choice is through our own continuous attempts.

If possible, others' or social help somehow do us a big favor. We live in a world where friends are around. They can offer many useful resources and meaningful suggestions. In our own minds, we may be strong enough even perfect, the truth is that we can make a mistake sometimes which is destroyable to our goal. Friends may give you an advice before you make such a fatal mistake. Once a time, I was concentrating in my experiment and it was the last step to finish it. I nearly burnt our lab and hurt myself without a classmate's reminding that it is extremely dangerous to put all ingredients together which can arouse massive heat enough to burst the experimental tank and burn the desk. In that case, friends can reduce your chance of failure.

On the other hand, we have to check whether to harm others' benefits when we pursue our goal by extreme means. Imagine a person who is in hunger. For him, the most tempting matter can be a hot meal. In order to get the meal, he may do a little work. What invariably happens is that he finally chooses to rob others' possession. We never doubt his goal for it is a human nature but we seldom agree with his stupid and rude manner. Hence, never bring trouble to ourselves and damage others’ benefits.

To sum up, a reasonable goal is what people should pursue and all feasible and harmless measurements are encouraged to achieve such a goal.

Argument 200


The arguer gives a seemingly compelling conclusion that dentists should attract the male consumer and stress the effectiveness of anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of special care about suffering patients in their advertisements. This conclusion is based on a statistics. After careful analysis, we can find several flaws in his reasoning.

First of all, it is questionable to the validity of the statistics. There is no obvious information about how was the statistics carried out. Maybe all the data was only from one clinic. Moreover, perhaps investigator only collected the information in several days and the result was just an occasional one without any represent property. Even the statistics had been finished many years ago. The arguer also fails to rule out the possibility that all the data is just from the oral expression from dentists themselves. In that case, we cannot be convinced by this simply statistics.

In addition, faint is not completely equal to be distressed. The arguer came to a view "the men are likely to be distressed ...than women are". Just learning from the statistics, no evidence shows that men are likely to be more easily distressed. Only the phenomenon of faint was mentioned in the statistics. Perhaps women are likely to suffer other forms of pain. It is too hasty to reach such a temporary conclusion.

Finally, there is no correlation between “faint or distress” with the target of dentists. No matter women or men and how serious they suffer the dental problems, they all want to get out of trouble. Perhaps there are more female patients than female. If the dentists only focus on male, they will loss many female patients. Hence, the target of dentists should be not only male but female patients.

To sum up, dentists should target both female and male patients and offer them best care to reduce their suffering.

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Issue
212
"If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable."

To varying degrees, all of us have the strong desire to achieve a goal. Maybe the journey to the success is arduous and no one can make sure they can find it, but most people would like to do their best for it is a dream in their deep heart. As far as I am concerned, it is totally reasonable to take all feasible measurements to make our dreams to come true.


First of all, it is necessary to reevaluate the reality of so-called "worthy". Whether a goal is deserved to cost our precious time and energy must be conducted, for we never fail to notice instances that many people go astray for their wrong goals. Some people dare steal the railways' steel but been caught. When they are asked why they do that, an amazing reply is "I want to buy a new car". It is ridiculous, isn't it? Hence, an enlightened goal is the prerequisite to stretch out our next step.


Through our own hard work, it is the most reliable way to get the goal. Once finding a goal, we can open our mind to figure out all possible means to turn it come true. More importantly, face the difficulties by ourselves first. Many people loss their confidence and encouragement in front of tough troubles, however, it is the right time we can promote ourselves and increase our capacity of tolerance. And, there are times when we face the various problems alone, the only and most reliable choice is through our own continuous attempts.

If possible, others' or social help somehow do us a big favor. We live in a world where friends are around. They can offer many useful resources and meaningful suggestions. In our own minds, we may be strong enough even perfect, the truth is that we can make a mistake sometimes which is destroyable to our goal. Friends may give you an advice before you make such a fatal mistake. Once a time, I was concentrating in my experiment and it was the last step to finish it. I nearly burnt our lab and hurt myself without a classmate's reminding that it is extremely dangerous to put all ingredients together which can arouse massive heat enough to burst the experimental tank and burn the desk. In that case, friends can reduce your chance of failure.
On the other hand（没有on one hand话是用问题的，这里是转折，howerver就可以）, we have to check whether to harm others' benefits when we pursue our goal by extreme means. Imagine a person who is in hunger. For him, the most tempting matter can be a hot meal. In order to get the meal, he may do a little work. What invariably happens is that he finally chooses to rob others' possession. We never doubt his goal for it is a human nature but we seldom agree with his stupid and rude manner. Hence, never bring trouble to ourselves and damage others’ benefits.

To sum up, a reasonable goal is what people should pursue and all feasible and harmless measurements are encouraged to achieve such a goal.(结尾可能短了些)
评语：感觉作者最大的问题不是语言或其它，而是在立意。题目的核心应该是任何手段都是合理的吗？是不是可以不择手段去达成目标？但本文的分析主要感觉是怎样去判断，并达到目标，仅是最后提到了一些有关方法合理性的问题。建议作者在论点上多花时间。虽然不存在正确的论点，但存在最合理的，最能显示作者逻辑性和考虑问题全面性的论点以及最满足题目论题的论点。
Argument 200


The arguer gives a seemingly compelling conclusion that dentists should attract the male consumer and stress the effectiveness of anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of special care about suffering patients in their advertisements. （总结很好）This conclusion is based on a statistics. After careful analysis, we can find several flaws in his reasoning.

First of all, it is questionable to the validity of the statistics. There is no obvious information about how was the statistics carried out. Maybe all the data was only from one clinic. Moreover, perhaps investigator only collected the information in several days and the result was just an occasional one without any represent propert  (repesentativness) Even the statistics had been finished many years ago. The arguer also fails to rule out the possibility that all the data is just from the oral expression from dentists themselves. In that case, we cannot be convinced by this simply statistics. (分析很好，很有层次)


In addition, faint is not completely equal to be distressed. The arguer came to a view "the men are likely to be distressed ...than women are". Just learning from the statistics, no evidence shows that men are likely to be more easily distressed. Only the phenomenon of faint was mentioned in the statistics. Perhaps women are likely to suffer other forms of pain. It is too hasty to reach such a temporary conclusion.（有点小混乱了，不是很懂。）

Finally, there is no correlation between “faint or distress” with the target of dentists. No matter women or men and how serious they suffer the dental problems, they all want to get out of trouble. Perhaps there are more female patients than female. If the dentists only focus on male, they will loss many female patients. Hence, the target of dentists should be not only male but female patients.

To sum up, dentists should target both female and male patients and offer them best care to reduce their suffering.

评语：感觉字数不是很够。一些攻击点，可能要更清楚些。总体感觉语言能力还是很不错的。共勉共勉。