小猴子作文之贴

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今天开始强攻作文呢··加油加油！

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同学是参加小组活动的吗？如果是的话，请把归类设置好

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8月31号··

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额，问题还挺大的
1。开头没有明确的观点，到底是同意小孩学艺术还是不同意？你的观点是IT DEPENDS对吧，最好还是选其中一边站好，只帮一边说好话
2。观点选定之后，没有分论点，最好分成两道三个分论点来支持，每个分论点有一两个例子支撑
总之，建议你先熟悉一下作文5段式的结构

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前几天有点事，抱歉改晚了哈

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谢谢大家的支持···嘿嘿

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9月9日 小猴子

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恩——加油——

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帮你改了。QQ上离线文件发了。

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呼呼··谢谢大家支持··一起努力努力再努力··:loveliness:

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实在抱歉该晚啦。。。。对不起对不起啊。。。

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小猴子9月23··大家中秋快乐呀··月饼月饼··日期错了··但是就是今天的··麻烦大家了··

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The quality of education is the basic fundament of a country. How to improve the quality of education is the critical question and the answers are varying(没必要用进行时吧？) from individual to individual. The authority educationists reckon that the best way to promote the education is to increase teachers’ salaries. As for me , I cannot believe it any more. I trust that teachers are the directly （direct）resources of education promotion（没明白direct resource that contributing to education promotion） and only to treat teachers very well can improve the quality of education quickly.
Some opposite views think that teachers should not focus on money too much. I trust, however, payment is the vital treatment to teacher.If there is little payment to teachers, they will live with poverty. How can they teach extraordinarily when they are starving, freezing? The result is that increasing teachers’ salaries is the best way to improve the quality of education in a nation. Higher salaries, higher quality of education.
High salary can attract more and more talents into education world. nowadays, a majority of high education individuals would like to have their career in technology, business, biology and so on because of high salary. High salary is not only a presentation of comfortable life style, but also a presentation of high reputation in the society. The same principle is here: only increasing teachers’ salaries can absorb more high intelligent person into education and promote the quality of education.（good point）
Payment of teachers also relate to the reputation of a country closely. If the salaries of teachers In one country is lower much than other countries, it means the quality of education in this country is low.（这个观点。。。）
So other countries would not like to cooperate with low quality country in education., then it will lose the chance that gets the educational help from other high quality countries.
（That）Increasing teachers’ salaries is the best way to improve the quality of education in one nation is the true fact in the modern information world.（主语从句需要that 引导吧） it benefits the quality of people’s life and also benefits the prosperity of the nation.

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The quality of education is the basic fundament of a country. How to improve the quality of education is the critical question and the answers are varying from individual to individual. The authority educationists reckon that the best way to promote the education is to increase teachers’ salaries. As for me , I cannot believe it any more. I trust that teachers are the directly resources of education promotion and only to treat teachers very well can improve the quality of education quickly.
Some opposite (it would be better that authors propose his ideas at first) views think? that teachers should not focus on money too much. I trust, however, payment is the vital treatment to teachers. If there is little payment to teachers, they will live with poverty. How can they teach extraordinarily when they are starving, freezing? The result is that increasing teachers’ salaries is the best way to improve the quality of education in a nation. Higher salaries, higher quality of education.
High salary can attract more and more talents into education world (community). nowadays, a majority of high education individuals would like to have their career in technology, business, biology and so on for the high salary in these areas. High salary is not only a presentation of comfortable life style, but also a presentation of high reputation in the society. The same principle is here: only increasing teachers’ salaries can absorb more high intelligent person into education and promote the quality of education.
Payment of teachers also relate to the reputation of a country closely. If the salaries of teachers In one country is lower much than other countries, it means the quality of education in this country is low. So other countries would not like to cooperate with low quality country in education., then it will lose the chance that gets the educational help from other high quality countries.
Increasing teachers’ salaries is the best way to improve the quality of education in one nation is the true fact in the modern information world. it benefits the quality of people’s life and also benefits the prosperity of the nation.

楼主词汇丰富 表述到位 其中绿色为较好词汇 红色为有待商榷词
此外在句子表述方面 楼主长短相间 偶有一些需要商榷之处

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