mounian的作文本---请多多指教（虔诚的）

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People with different interests and personalities can not be friends.
With the process of globalization, our lives is becoming more and more rich, with much more clothes to choose from, more shopping centers to go, more food to eat, but also, more desire for true friends. When comes to this issue, some people state that only those with similar interests and personalities can be friends. However, I believe that this is definitely not the truth in the real life, because much more factors than one makes sense in determining who can be our friend.  
On the one hand, there is no denying that people sharing the same interest and personalities do have some advantages to be friends. One of the most important aspects we care when choosing friends is whether we have common topics to discuss. It is obvious that those have the same interests tend to be easy to fulfill this requirement. For instance, when two persons who are into archaeology get together, they may talk about the latest discoveries in that field, and other people can not even understand what they are saying.
While it is true that people share the same personalities and interests may have some advantages, just as I mentioned above, it is a little bit haste to assert that those who do not share the interest can not be friends. For one thing, it is the characteristics that the majority of us cared when making friends. We would like to stay with one who is honesty, supportive and has a good sense of humor, for such friends can make our life more pleasant and colorful. Compared with someone who have the same personalities and interests with me but not honest, I'd rather stay with an honest one because it is the basic element for the relationship to develop. For another, the environment we grow up also influences a lot to the choice. People sharing the same environment are more easily to be friends. Just take my brother as an example. When being in the crowded, my brother is always the one who can easily be caught out due to his big voice and large numbers of opinions to express. No one can image that his best friend, however, is a boy who even hardly speak in the public. They are the best friends since they are about seven years old. The reasons are complex, but the main one is that they have experienced many things together, from the tiniest ones like stealing the apples of neighborhood, to the biggest ones such as go to their universities. Therefore even those whose personalities are so different can be friends, true friends, as soon as they treated each other with heart. What's more, friends are important to us comes to the fact that they, to a large extend, listen to us and can be around us in sunshine as well as in shade. When people got traced somewhere in lives, they always dreamed to gain some help from others. What a pity that most people choose to left at such times. Only a few people can help you and be with you when the times are bad. Thus, it is actually true we do not need them to have the same interests and personality, for all the things they have done has already let us know what a friend is.
To summarize, people with different interests and personalities can be friends. If we want to make friends with somebody, remember first to be honest and sincere to that person.

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In the busy and crowded world today, we should not expect people to be polite to each other  
We have now gotten into an age where everything changes rapidly, and the process of globalization makes our life richer and richer, with much more clothes to choose from, more shopping molls to go to, as well as, nevertheless, more desire for the respect of each other. While somebody may assert that politeness is not that important considered the goals we are running after is the richness of substance, I hold the totally different view that politeness, as a basic element in our life, is in effect much more important than ever since.
For one thing, it is essential to be polite in the communication among different persons. Surveys have shown that people with high working efficiency is always those who treat others moderately. Being polite is the reflection of people’s education and attitude. For instance, when we have a new project with a company we are not familiar with, it is our tiniest behavior such as greeting the clerks of the company sincerely that shows the culture of ourselves and whether we have pay enough attention to the project, which will finally determine the result of the cooperation. For another, being polite is especially important to individual's promotion. In this particularly competitive world, people seem to focus more on the certifications we get rather than the behavior of a certain people. However, it is our behavior that really helps a lot in the promotion. I have a schoolmate who works in a big incorporation in Beijing. She, to be frank, is not that outstanding compared to her fellow workers. But she has a habit always to let the old to be first when gets into the lifts. At last, she was promoted just because one of the old is the CEO of the company.
What's more, being polite contribute to the harmony of the human society. Whether or not a country is good depends not only on its economy, but also has a close relationship to the behavior of its citizens. Only if every one of us behavior politely and respect others from the bottom of our heart, can really the whole earth be a world village without prejudge and hate.
Therefore, it is safe to make the conclusion that the modern world need intensely for us to respect each other and being polite to each other.

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      We have now gotten into an age where everything changes rapidly, and the process of globalization makes our life richer and richer, with much more clothes to choose (from 需要加这个介词吗), more shopping molls to go to, as well as, nevertheless, more desire for the respect of each other. While somebody may assert that politeness is not that important considered （the去掉） goals we are running after （，however,）is the richness of substance, I hold the totally different view that politeness, as a basic element in our life, is in effect much more important than ever since.（in effect +adj.这个搭配我真不知道）
       For one thing, it is essential to be polite in the communication among different persons. Surveys have shown that people with high working efficiency is（are） always those who treat others moderately. Being polite is the reflection of people’s education and attitude. For instance, when we have a new project with a company we are not familiar with, it is our tiniest behavior such as greeting the clerks of the company sincerely that shows the culture of ourselves and whether we have pay enough attention to the project, which will finally determine the result of the cooperation. For another, being polite is especially important to individual's promotion. In this particularly competitive world, people seem to focus more on the certifications we get rather than the behavior of a certain people. However, it is our behavior that really helps a lot in the promotion. I have a schoolmate who works in a big incorporation in Beijing. She, to be frank, is not that outstanding compared to her fellow workers. But she has a habit always to let the old to be first when gets into the lifts. At last, she was promoted just because one of the old is coincidentally the CEO of the company.7 s/ ]+ K1 J; A, @# H
      What's more, being polite contribute(s）to the harmony of the human society. Whether or not a country is good depends not only on its economy, but also has a close relationship to(觉得这里用highly/closely associated with好一些) the behavior of its citizens. Only if every one of us behavior（behaves） politely and respect(s) others from the bottom of our heart, can really the whole earth be a world village without prejudge and hate.5 _7 s; L" x  e) j9 x% f0 G, M6 H
Therefore, it is safe to make the conclusion that the modern world need intensely for us to respect each other and being polite to each other.

文章内容很充分，论证比较详细（一样的观点，不过我只举了一个例子...）有个小问，For one thing 和For another 应该是并列的观点为什么放到了一段呢？