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8月底的一战果然杯具了，10月底再战，时间不多了。尤其是作文啊，问题很大。自己总结是之前练习太少，还不太会写，时间又不够。下定决定，狠改。希望各位不吝多多指教，狠狠批。谢谢谢谢。

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2010.7.4作文

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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                      Honesty in Relationship
It’s not exaggerated to say that honesty is definitely one of the most essential and indispensable characteristics that people will consider when deciding whether someone is worth the trust before they make friends with him or her and during the entire relationship. If someone is asked “do you expect your partner, and your best friend always telling the truth? “, with no doubt, most people’s answers are positive. What if the question continues as “will you still want him or her just wholeheartedly recommend you to the new position even though you know he really dislikes you? “,I guess most people will take a second thought. Here comes my point: whether telling the truth should be the top-prior consideration or not in a relationship depends on both what situations are and how intimate the relationship is.

How sincere you should be depends on what kind of the situations are, or in other words, what kind are the lies. First, I would like to divide the lies into two types: harmful lies and white lies. Literally speaking, harmful lies means lies that will hurt people or disobey laws and social customs; while white lies refers to those not harmful and mostly accord with the regulations and social behaviors. Apparently, the former ones will be accepted under no circumstances while the latter is acceptable in most social occasions. For example, when your girlfriend asks your opinions about her new hairstyle, even though you really hate the Hippie’s style, you will still pay her a charming compliment.

Other than the nature of lie itself, the kind of relationship also plays a significant role. In other words, the type of relationship determines not only whether you should be frank or not but also the extent to which you should act genuinely. Obviously this cannot be applied to severely harmful lies.  The more intimate the relationship is the more you should be sincere. As good friends will understand you more, they won't mistake your sincerity for malice; instead, your honesty will be appreciated greatly. On the contrary, the strange have no idea about what kind of person you are, so they could easily misjudge you. What’s worse, you even don't have the opportunity to make it up. So mind your manner and select appropriate expressions before directly telling what is in your mind.

To conclude, always telling the truth is not definitely right in any relationship. But that is true, never tell lies to hurt others or you will ruin the relationship. And you cannot flatter your close friends all the time either. Otherwise, trust me, you will lose them too.  Yes, it's not easy to draw the line but you have to try to balance.

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7.10作文

Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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As the old saying goes” practice makes perfect”, in this sense, daily homework is definitely a necessary part of study life for a student. But is it really indispensable for teachers who have to give assignment for students?
In my opinion, the answer is not positive. The reasons are introduced as follows.

Undoubtedly, there are plenty of advantages for teachers to hand out a task everyday. It will not only insure pupils to do some preparations before class, but also help them to review knowledge acquired in class in time. Furthermore, it is of particularly useful and essential for those with poor self-discipline. Daily check of the homework is also a good way to evaluate the study situation. For instance, through excises the English teacher discovered that most students had difficulties in present perfect tense, and usually mixed it up with past perfect tense, so he decided to explain them again in next class before moving on.

However, the disadvantages brought by the daily-assigned-job are far overwhelming with the benefits. One of the notorious defects is that compulsive daily assignments are heavy burdens for a student taking several different subject classes. Hence, homework will take up most of the student’s spare time, and deprive the time the student spend developing his or her own interests and other personal abilities, as well as the time for working out.

In addition, study shows that excessive assignment will reduce students’ interest in study. Take myself for example, in my senior in high school, I was so tied with the endless mathematic tasks that in the end as long as I saw the mathematic problems I felt sick. More importantly, one of the main aims for education is to help student to establish independent thinking and cultivate ways of lifetime learning. Obviously, it is not reasonable for teachers to decide for the students when and how to prepare and review the class. In other words, study should be one’s own mission instead of someone else’s. Besides, considering the condition that there are always a large number of students but only few teachers, teachers hardly know and manage every student’s study status. That is to say, teachers are not able to always make the right choice.

Despite there are several benefits for teachers to give daily tasks, the disbenefits are greatly outweighing the benefits. So why not just let students make their own way to the knowledge of sea?

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详见附件。。。

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哈哈，谢谢啦~

4# bensonseu

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7.13作业
It’s better to watch serious movies that help people think than to watch movies that could amuse and entertain people.



In this fast-spaced modern society, movie plays a multiple role in people’s life. On the one hand, along with other entertainments such as video games and costume plays, movies liberate people from the day after day boring working lifestyle; on the other hand, movies are assigned to provoke deep thought. In this sense, it is really not easy to draw the conclusion that serious movies that help people think make more sense than movies that entertain people. Serious films or enjoyable films? For most people, the choice maybe depends on what kind of mood they are in as well as the purpose why they want to see the movie.

For those who seem miserable, interesting movies will be more welcomed. Back in the period of black days when my dear father passed away, the movie’ Life Is Beautiful’ companied me. Time after time, the humor of the hero cheered me up and the strong faith in life greatly encouraged me. Finally, I realized that there is always something we cannot control but we should appreciate there is something we can do, so I decided to move on with fresh courage. Instead, if one watched movies with heavy subject while in a blue mood, he or she may become even more depressed.

However, for those who seem happy all days, amusing movies would not add too much joy for them. On contrary, movies conveying merits are more meaningful for them. Besides, serious movies are of particular importance to pupils, whose thoughts are immature and in formation of mature. For instance, the movie’
Langya Shan Five Heroic Men’ once touched many audience’s hearts and inspired lots of young people’s valor.

In a word, entertaining movies comfort people while serious movies trigger off further thinking, both of which are of equal significance in people’s life.

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In this fast-spaced modern society, movie plays a multiple role in people’s life. On the one hand, along with other entertainments such as video games and costume plays, movies liberate people from the day after day boring working lifestyle（建议去掉working，总感觉这样怪怪的）; on the other hand, movies are assigned to provoke deep thought. In this sense, it is really not easy to draw the conclusion that serious movies that help people think make more sense than movies that entertain people. Serious films or enjoyable films?（这句话想表达什么？） For most people, the choice maybe depends on what kind of mood they are in as well as the purpose why（语法错误） they want to see the movie.7 Y9 D* i+ Z3 F4 q) v

For those who seem miserable, interesting movies will be more welcomed. Back in the period of black days when my dear father passed away, the movie’ Life Is Beautiful’ companied me. Time after time, the humor of the hero cheered me up and the strong faith in life greatly encouraged me. Finally, I realized that there is always something we cannot control but we should appreciate there is something we can do, so I decided to move on with fresh courage. Instead, if one watched movies with heavy subject while in a blue mood, he or she may become even more depressed.  z: I$ V6 z' Y0 H8 f2 O2 r

However, for those who seem happy all days, amusing movies would not add too much joy for them. On contrary, movies conveying merits are more meaningful for them. Besides, serious movies are of particular importance to pupils, whose thoughts are immature and in formation of mature. For instance, the movie’- }% ]% T1 @! W( j
Langya Shan Five Heroic Men’（是这样翻译的吗？建议平时可以多找一下标准的翻译） once touched many audience’s hearts and inspired lots of young people’s valor.（词用的好，但语法上可以省略这个词哦）

In a word, entertaining movies comfort people while serious movies trigger off further thinking, both of which are of equal significance in people’s life.

这位同学是不是6G过来的？有点AW的感觉啊。。
作为T的作文，开头太长，中间需要更多，或者说至少要加一段，另外，观点最好是有倾向性的，平衡的写不长吧。。
P.S.:我们3人小组是每个人改其他两个人的，所以不要把我拉下啊

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In this fast-spaced modern society, movie plays a multiple role in people’s life. On the one hand, along with other entertainments such as video games and costume plays, movies liberate people from the day after day boring working (好像可以去掉）lifestyle; on the other hand, movies are assigned to provoke deep thought. In this sense, it is really not easy to draw the conclusion that serious movies that help people think make more sense than movies that entertain people. Serious films or enjoyable films? For most people, the choice maybe depends on what kind of mood they are in as well as the purpose why they want to see the movie.

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For those who seem miserable, interesting movies will be more welcomed. Back in the period of black days when my dear father passed away, the movie’“ Life Is Beautiful” companied me. Time after time, the humor of the hero cheered me up and the strong faith in life greatly encouraged me. Finally, I realized that there is always something we cannot control but we should appreciate there is something we can reach, so I decided to move on with fresh courage. Instead, if one watched movies with heavy subject while in a blue mood, he or she may become even more depressed.
（感觉文章没有论证完全，就收尾了。。。）
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However, for those who seem happy all days, amusing movies would not add too much joy for them. On contrary, movies conveying merits are more meaningful for them. Besides, serious movies are of particular importance to pupils, whose thoughts are immature and in formation of mature. For instance, the movie’
( |% w0 o% V) \3 L/ S2 gLangya Shan Five Heroic Men’ once touched many audience’s hearts and inspired lots of young people’s valor（我个人觉得举例子之后，应该进行一些评论，而不是匆忙收尾了。）.: O4 P' V/ p. `（V8 h

+ @/ {% p  p8 U6 pIn a word, entertaining movies comfort people while serious movies trigger off further thinking, both of which are of equal significance in people’s life.

你语言掌握得也很好的。
呵呵，你的开头好像跟我的开头一样，绕了很久才开始正经

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2009.9.19 NA Government should more support art museum and music performance than recreational facilities, such as swimming pool or play ground.

Some people believe that the government should spend more money on art museum and music performance, while others hold quite opposite opinion. In my respective, I agree that the government should be more supportive with the art museum and music performance than recreational facilities. Reasons are as following aspects.

First of all, we have to admit that art museum and music performances are not merely enjoyable facilities; actually they are also significant art conveying means. They are attracted to people by fascinating ways such as showing beautiful paintings or performing wonderful songs, and most important of all, they are momentous ways people expressing their feelings through their works such as songs, dances or paintings.

Besides, museums have some other benefits that other recreational facilities can compete with. For instant, parents will take their young children visit historical museum or ancient animal museum occasionally on weekends, so their children can understand more about the country’s history or get a vivid picture of the dinosaurs. A little girl who loves singing may be greatly inspired to be a great singer after attending the amazing singing performance of Celine. A sad middle-aged man who has just lost his dear lover may totally lost himself in the beautiful music world during the splendid performance and enjoy a moment of peaceful and joyful time ever since two years ago his wife passed away. Art has a kind of charming that can never be displaced by other recreations.

Art sometimes is also an efficient way to release press too. Nowadays, people are almost overwhelmed by overtime working, complicated relationships and highly developed technology that drive them to learn something new day after day. Anyway, enjoy one selves after work such as singing songs or anticipating performance are very excellent way for people to let out the bad emotions. That is probably well explaining why so many people choose to go to KTV for singing with their friends instead of going home immediately. In a word, museums and music performance is good for people' health, especially mental health.

On the other hand, I do not think it should be the government who has to build up all recreational facilities. Actually, there have already been plenty of swimming pools and play grounds, and most of them are built by private companies or rich people. Children can attend swimming classes there or playing basket balls there and enjoying themselves there too. Beside, it is a good way for private companies to invest their money on recreational industry and make profits considering the economic decline. Anyway, I think the government should spend money on something more urgent, such as booming the art development.

All in all, I do think government should spend more money on art museums and singing performance rather than other facilities that can be supported by commercial groups.

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已经改好了 欢迎交流

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9# langtianrinuan [/b思路清晰，观点明确。标准议论文。看了之后让人没有任何不好的印象。就是没什么亮点。

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11# 流淌在海德堡

说得好啊，自己都写得索然无味，不会写作文了，杯具~

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2010.9.14
写作的速度很慢，怎么办？求建议。
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0911修改
2009.9.19 NA Government should more support art museum and music performance than recreational facilities, such as swimming pool or play ground.. Y2 b* S: A. H. I
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Some people believe that the government should spend more money on art museum and music performance, while others hold quite opposite opinion. In my respective, I agree that the government should be more supportive with the art museum and music performance than recreational facilities. Reasons are as following aspects.


First of all, we have to admit that art museum and music performances are not merely enjoyable facilities; actually they are also significant art conveying means. They are attracted to people by fascinating ways such as showing beautiful paintings or performing wonderful songs, and most important of all, they are momentous ways people expressing their feelings through their works such as songs, dances or paintings. . }3 L! A7 O" Q
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Besides, museums have some other benefits that other recreational facilities can compete with. For instant, parents will take their young children visit historical museum or ancient animal museum occasionally on weekends, so their children can understand more about the country’s history or get a vivid picture of the dinosaurs. A little girl who loves singing may be greatly inspired to be a great singer after attending the amazing singing performance of Celine. A sad middle-aged man who has just lost his dear lover may totally lost himself in the beautiful music world during the splendid performance and enjoy a moment of peaceful and joyful time ever since two years ago his wife passed away. Art has a kind of charming that can never be displaced by other recreations.Art sometimes is also an efficient way to release press too. Nowadays, people are almost overwhelmed by overtime working, complicated relationships and highly developed technology that drive them to learn something new day after day. Anyway, enjoy one selves after work such as singing songs or anticipating performance are very excellent way for people to let out the bad emotions. That is probably well explaining why so many people choose to go to KTV for singing with their friends instead of going home immediately. In a word, museums and music performance is good for people' health, especially mental health.9 M8 j& M/ ^1 r6 ^. @* q
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例子舉的不太好 最後又冒出對健康好  可以把他拆成另外一段會更好  
不然會模糊你的topic sentence

On the other hand, I do not think it should be the government who has to build up all recreational facilities. Actually, there have already been plenty of swimming pools and play grounds, and most of them are built by private companies or rich people. Children can attend swimming classes there or playing basket balls there and enjoying themselves there too. Beside, it is a good way for private companies to invest their money on recreational industry and make profits considering the economic decline. Anyway, I think the government should spend money on something more urgent, such as booming the art development.
與上一段相比又太短  少了例子~   寫作不是口語   不要用anyway這種字
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All in all, I do think government should spend more money on art museums and singing performance rather than other facilities that can be supported by commercial groups.  
這結論太短了  

0911修改~晚了一天  sorry
你的單字文法相信沒啥問題我就不作這方面的  建議
但內容寫作  還是要想想   建議你去讀戴老師的 文章  會收獲很多
我有看你的文章  你要再戰10T    寫作絕對不能想到什麼就寫什麼  
^______^希望能有一點點幫助  對你

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改好了  之前改过一篇 结果不知道被我保存在哪去了  

   文章很不错~