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liuxiaoyinUID: 2631993

Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy the friendship.

    Friendship is one of the most significant emotion in our life. Because we treasure it so much, it might be very hard for us to cope with some problems concerning our friends, such as wehther we should point out their mistakes at the risk of destroying our friendship.In my view, we should deal with this problem case by case.
    To begin with, there are many kinds of friends, which can be divided in two groups. Some are just normal friends to whom we will never tell your deep thoughts in hearts. You just have dinner together or take the same course and know each other's name. Greeting a person when you meet him dosen't mean you could be frank to them. in their eyes, your honest suggestions may be unpolite and even aggressive. As a result, they will not only ignore what you say, but also keep a father distance with you to protect themselves.
      However, in the case of the other group, telling truth is a better choice. these friends are the persons who may company you since you were a child or support you when you were in your hardest time in you life. You can never express too thanks to them. When they are in a dangerous situation or addicted in a bad habit, we must stand out to persude they from doing silly things. Because you take a each other as a important part in your life. You can't leave them to get into trouble without taking your responsibility of a good friend. Maybe they wil be a little angry because of your frank exhortations at first, they will understand and be gratefull for us then. Another better situation is that your words contribute to your friends' realization of their mistakes. All of these will enhance your friendship.
      In a word, you should take different stratages to your friends according to which kind of relationship between you two. If he is a common friend, you should keep science. While if you are facing your good friends, you should be more frank and honest to tell him your true feelings.
      

gy0510150556UID: 2546647

Friendship is one of the most significant emotions in our life. Because we treasure it so much, it might be very hard for us to cope with some problems concerning our friends, such as wehther we should point out their mistakes at the risk of destroying our friendship.In my view, we should deal with this problem case by case. 开头简洁，很好

To begin with, there are many kinds of friends, which can be divided in two groups. Some are just normal （ordinary）friends to whom we will never tell your (our)deep thoughts in hearts. You just have dinner together or take the same course and know each other's name. Greeting a person when you meet him dosen't mean you could be frank to them. in their eyes, your honest suggestions may be unpolite and even aggressive(offensive,冒犯，更好). As a result, they will not only ignore what you say, but also keep a father distance with you to protect themselves.

However, in the case of the other group, telling truth is a better choice. these friends are the persons who may accompany you since you were a child or support you when you were in your hardest time in you life. You can never express too thanks to them. When they are in a dangerous situation or addicted in a bad habit, we must stand out to persuade they from doing silly things. Because you take each other as an important part in your life. You can't leave them to get into trouble without taking your responsibility of（as） a good friend. Maybe they wil be a little angry because of your frank exhortations at first, they will understand and be gratefull for us then. Another better situation is that your words contribute to your friends' realization of their mistakes. All of these will enhance your friendship.* h8 n! G( j( N

In a word, you should take different stratages to your friends according to which kind of relationship between you two. If he is a common friend, you should keep silent. While if you are facing your good friends, you should be more frank and honest to tell him your true feelings.& V$ S6 x. i7 }0 l! A* k
  楼主思路很清，文笔也很流畅，错别字有些多
  格式可以按我编排的这样，顶格写，段与段之间空一行
  感觉缺少例子，整篇都在说理，老美老喜欢看到例子啦，要写一下。
  尽量有几个闪光句型，使文章有亮点
  last but not the least,不要用第二人称，用we就好，老美会觉得在指着他鼻子说呢

NarashyUID: 2602795

Friendship is one of the most significant emotion in our life. Because we treasure it so much, it might be very hard for us to cope with some problems concerning our friends, such as wehther we should point out their mistakes at the risk of destroying our friendship.In my view, we should deal with this problem case by case.
    To begin with, there are many kinds of friends, which can be divided in(into ?) two groups. Some are just normal friends to whom we will never tell your(our?) deep thoughts in hearts. You just have dinner together or take the same course and know each other's name. Greeting a person when you meet him dosen't mean you could be frank to them. in their eyes, your honest suggestions may be unpolite and even aggressive. As a result, they will not only ignore what you say, but also keep a father distance with you to protect themselves.
      However, in the case of the other group, telling truth is a better choice. these friends are the persons who may company you since you were a child or support you when you were in your hardest time in you life. You can never express too thanks to them. When they are in a dangerous situation or addicted in a bad habit, we must stand out to persude(用prevent是不是好些？) they from doing silly things. Because you take a each other as a important part in your life. You can't leave them to get into trouble without taking your responsibility of a good friend. Maybe they wil be a little angry because of your frank exhortations at first, they will understand and be gratefull for us then. Another better situation is that your words contribute to your friends' realization of their mistakes. All of these will enhance your friendship.
      In a word, you should take different stratages to your friends according to which kind of relationship between you two. If he is a common friend, you should keep science(silence 吧，呵呵). While if you are facing your good friends, you should be more frank and honest to tell him your true feelings.

第一次评作文，多数注意的是语法，结构上还需要向大家学习！

liuxiaoyinUID: 2631993

谢谢你的点评阿，回去我再好好改改~~受益匪浅~~ 2# gy0510150556

liuxiaoyinUID: 2631993

谢谢，作文写的很急，犯了不少低级错误~~~ 3# Narashy

kiwiiUID: 2338676

5# liuxiaoyin
弱弱问一下，大家练习时候都是在30min内完成作文的么？

yh4685668UID: 2656835

看个人情况,有人打字快不怕,慢的那你的思维就要迅速点