9.3进军美利坚 luke 的小文

luke_003UID: 2660230

Different people may take various attitudes when facing some problems. Under this circumstances,, we usually ask for advice from people around us, however whose advice do you consider to be more valuable,the old or the young who are in the same age like you?
As a matter of fact, both of them have advantages and disadvantanges.As for those who preper the suggestions from the old, it is wise for them to listen to the advice from the more experienced person,for the old take more rational attitudes and may come up with more comprehensive ideas.What is more, the social experiences the old have are more affluence and valuable,and they may had the similar difficulties or conditions like us.However,there are also disadvantages when asking for advice from the old,for instances,they lack the chance knowing the real thoughts of our young,for we were brought up under different period, and great changes have taken place during the past decades, especially in China. In addition,in my point of view,it is hard for the old to understand and support some behaviors young people take, take the Super boys and girls, a famous competition on singing songs, tens of thousands of youngman paticipented the activities just for fame and fun, which triggered big controversy in society, especially from the old.
In fact, Young people can also provide us with valuable advice.To begin with, friends at the same age of us understand ideas we have and even know the real thinking in our mind.Thus, to that extent, the suggestions they give may be more specific and receptive ,for example, they can tell which class is interesting or where you can buy a cheap chemical book. Furthermore, people like my age will not force me to do something, but the old generation may do it,for instances,one’s parents may ask their children not to read love stories and force them to play the piono or do homework. The disadvantages asking a youngman for advice are obvious too. The advice they offer is usually too personal,that is say, it is generally that they cann’t come up with rational ideas,for they are too young to do it.
As far as I am concerned, which one I will choose depends on what sort of problems I face. I would prefer to the old when facing the questions concerning some crucial decisions in my life, and as for some personal things ,such as which clothes are more suitable for me ,I will choose the the ideas of the young.

rachel1102UID: 2657934

抱歉，刚下课，评的有点晚。我是第二次给别人评作文，评的不好的地方忘见谅啊~
Different people may take various attitudes when facing some problems. Under this circumstances,, we usually ask for advice from people around us, however（是转折的关系吗？） whose advice do you consider to be more valuable,the old or the young who are in the same age like you?(感觉第一句和后面的关系不是很明显，还有who are in the same....用的和old不是很对称，这里可以不加这个定语，或者换个方式表达。)

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As a matter of fact, both of them have advantages and disadvantanges.As for those who preperprefer(可以直接加名词吗，这句读着有点怪 ) the suggestions from the old, it is wise for them to listen to the advice from the more experienced person,for the old take more rational attitudes and may come up with more comprehensive ideas.What is more, the social experiences the old have are more affluence and valuable,and they may had the similar difficulties or conditions like us.However,there are also disadvantages when asking for advice from the old,for instances,they lack the chance knowing the real thoughts of our young,for we were brought up under different period, and great changes have taken place during the past decades（前后分句的主语不同，读起来感觉不顺）, especially in China. In addition,in my point of view,it is hard for the old to understand and support some behaviors young people take, take the Super boys and girls, a famous competition on singing songs, tens of thousands of youngman paticipented the activities just for fame and fun, which triggered big controversy in society, especially from the old.这一整句话意思是好的，可是有点汉语的味道，那个take是什么意思？& Z  G: E) R3 z' O
In fact, Young people can also provide us with valuable advice.To begin with, friends at the same age of us understand ideas we have and even know the real thinking in our mind.Thus, to that extent, the suggestions they give may be more specific and receptive ,for example, they can tell which class is interesting or where you can buy a cheap chemical book. Furthermore, people like my age will not force me to do something, but the old generation may do it,for instances不用加s吧,one’s parents may ask their children not to read love stories and force them to play the piono or do homework. （这部分写的很好~）The disadvantages asking a youngman for advice are obvious too. The advice they offer is usually too personal,that is say, it is generally that they cann’t come up with rational ideas,for they are too young to do it.用了好多for啊，可以换换，比如thus,becouse等
far as I am concerned, which one I will choose depends on what sort of problems I face这句话感觉有中文的味道. I would prefer to the old（喜欢长者？要再加点修饰词吧） when facing the questions concerning some crucial decisions in my life, and as for some personal things ,such as which clothes are more suitable for me ,I will choose the the ideas of the young.

总的来说，观点很明确，表达的也很清楚，就是有些句子读起来不太顺，有些地方有中文的感觉，可以在揣摩下句子的写法（这点我做的也不好）。有什么说的不对的地方见谅啊~大家一起加油~

luke_003UID: 2660230

谢谢，感觉评价的很中肯，很受用，自己也有感触，我会在努力了，我们一起加油哦！

luke_003UID: 2660230

9月5号作业
Which one is more important for a teacher, a good relationship with his/her students or sufficient knowledge for career.Different people may come up with different points on this question, because teachers and students are two significant elements of education, so for teachers ,in my opinion,they should firstly be competent for their jobs of teaching, then the efficient organization during their work should be considered subsequently. Whereas for students, they ,of couse, preper to the teacher who are more affable and easy-going,usually ignoring the ability of teaching their teachers hold.
Personally,I argue that teachers should take their knowledge seriously. To begin with, school is a place for students pursuing knowledge and culture,especially from their teachers.How could  students get the accurate and profound scientific and culturual knowledge without the qualification of their teachers in school??I don’t believe such incompetent teachers can exsist without doubtfulness. Furthermore, teachers holding various knowledge and experiences attract more attantion and respect from their students.Generally speaking, students usually choose the subjects given by a famous professor and prefer to asking for advice from the teachers who are more experienced. Last but not least ,teachers will have a positive influence to their students,if they can provide knowledge and experiences from various aspects ,especially the socity and life which cannot be got from books.
To be frank ,a harmounious atmosphere in one class is important too,and It will be more comfortable and happy for students to study under the instruction of teachers, if they create a great relationship with each other. It will be definitely better to have the both,and if only one can be chosen,I choose knowledge first. Only the qualification of a teacher guaranteed, can the   correct and essencial knowledge be provided for the students.

rachel1102UID: 2657934

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哈哈 又和你一组，有缘。今天有事，点评晚了，抱歉啊~
Which one is more important for a teacher, a good relationship with his/her students or sufficient knowledge for career.Different people may come up with different points on this question, because teachers and students are two significant elements of education, so for teachers ,in my opinion,they should firstly be competent for their jobs of teaching, then the efficient organization during their work should be considered subsequently建议主语还用老师. Whereas for students, they ,of couse, preper to the teacher who are more affable and easy-going,usually ignoring the ability of teaching their teachers hold.这句什么意思？没怎么读懂~

Personally,I argue that teachers should take their knowledge seriously. To begin with, school is a place for students pursuing knowledge and culture,especially from their teachers.How could  students get the accurate and profound scientific and culturual knowledge without the qualification of their teachers in school??写的好~I don’t believe such incompetent teachers can exsist without doubtfulness. Furthermore, teachers holding various knowledge and experiences attract more attantion and respect from their students.Generally speaking, students usually choose the subjects given by a famous professor and prefer to asking for advice from the teachers who are more experienced. Last but not least ,teachers will have a positive influence to their students,if they can provide knowledge and experiences from various aspects ,especially the socity and life which cannot be got from books.  v7 \3 H( r/ I/ W2 W   
这段写的好，层层递进，理由很充分，连词用的也好~向你学习~

To be frank ,a harmounious atmosphere in one class is important too,and It will be more comfortable and happy for students to study under the instruction of teachers, if they有点只带不清 create a great relationship with each other. It will be definitely better to have the both,and if only one can be chosen,I choose knowledge first. Only the qualification of a teacher guaranteed, can the   correct and essencial knowledge be provided for the students.
总的来说，写的挺好，但是主旨不是特别的清楚。可能是后面两段没有衔接的关系吧。建议最好有个结尾段，第三段后面几句话可以放在第四段说，然后第三段多补充些理由，这样主旨也会显得很明确了。
加油~

gy0510150556UID: 2546647

Which one is more important for a teacher, a good relationship with his/her students or sufficient knowledge for career.（这句是问句吧）Different people may come up with different points on this question, because teachers and students are two significant elements of education, so for teachers ,in my opinion,they should firstly be competent for their jobs of teaching, then the efficient organization during their work should be considered subsequently. Whereas for students, they ,of couse, preper to（prefer） the teachers who are more affable and easy-going,usually ignoring the ability of teaching their teachers hold.(格式是顶头写，每段之间空一行)

Personally,I argue that teachers should take their knowledge seriously. To begin with, school is a place for students pursuing knowledge and culture(cuture太中式),especially from their teachers.How could  students get the accurate and profound scientific and culturual knowledge without the qualification of their teachers in school?（中式些，改为without the instruction of teachers）?I don’t believe such incompetent teachers can exsist without doubtfulness. Furthermore, teachers holding various knowledge and experiences attract more attention and respect from their students.Generally speaking, students usually choose the subjects given by a famous professor and prefer to asking for advice from the teachers who are more experienced. Last but not least ,teachers will have a positive influence to their students,if they can provide knowledge and experiences from various aspects ,especially the socity and life which cannot be got from books(这段纯说理，虽然很清晰，但老美会感到厌倦，一定要有例子来支持你的观点，这样的话，你的这段完全可以分为三段写)M) X6 c+ Z8 F" _  

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To be frank ,a harmounious atmosphere in one class is important too,and It will be more comfortable and happy for students to study under the instruction of teachers, if they create a great relationship with each other. It will be definitely better to have the both,and if only one can be chosen,I choose knowledge first. Only when the qualification of a teacher is guaranteed, can the   correct and essencial knowledge be provided for the students.
你的整体结构是可以得，就是说主写knowledge的重要性，再让步一下good relationship的重要性，最后强调还是knowledge重要，现在需要改进的是正文段的写法，你的文笔功力不错，加入例子会更好

luke_003UID: 2660230

9月8号作业
Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

I still remember that my teachers in primary and middle schools assigned homework to us nearly every day.Frankly,I really hated that boring and hard homework at that time and admired those who did have to do havey endless Chinese ,mathematics and English homework. In retrospect,I find it was helpful for me to understand and master the knowledge teachers taught daylight with the complishment of so much homework, Alought I always complained them.
  Students can benefit a lot from their homework.To begin with, one can be familiar with the method of doing complex mathematic equations through necessary practice,which will be useful for,at least,the exams.Futhermore, doing moderate homework makes a student,especially in primary and middle school,better form a habit of self-control,for some students even don’t care what scores and knowledge they have learned at school at all,but focous most of their time on games and TV programs.last but not least, it is a great opportunity for children and parents sacrificing some time and energy to talk and study with eachother,because some parents preper to teach and learn together with their children ,if the students have some problems when proceeding the homework.
   It is true that students still need spare time to play and participant intresting activities which are good for their developments of abilities and outlook.However,comparing with the more important knowledge students are learning in school, homework is dispensable and useful.
To sum up,Teachers,ofcouse, should assign some homework to students ,which is also a part of education during the development of our young generation.In my point of view,homework should not be too havey to bear,beacuse students will study better and more effective ,if they experience more valuable activities.

gy0510150556UID: 2546647

Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

I still remember that my teachers in primary and middle schools assigned homework to us nearly every day.Frankly,I really hated that boring and hard homework at that time and admired those who did(not 少写了吧) have to do havey （heavy and）endless Chinese ,mathematics and English homework. In retrospect,I find it was helpful for me to understand and master the knowledge teachers taught daylight with the complishment （accomplishment）of so much homework, Alought I always complained them.写的太棒了，结合自己的实际写的就是最有感染力的，进步很大

Students can benefit a lot from their homework.To begin with, one can be familiar with the method of doing complex mathematic equations through necessary practice,which will be useful for,at least,the exams.Futhermore, doing moderate homework makes a student,especially in primary and middle school,better form a habit of self-control,for some students even don’t care what scores and knowledge they have learned at school at all,but focous （focus）most of their time on games and TV programs.last but not least, it is a great opportunity for children and parents sacrificing some time and energy to talk and study with each other,because some parents preper (prefer)to teach and learn together with their children ,if the students have some problems when proceeding the homework.
It is true that students still need spare time to play and participant (participate in)intresting activities which are good for their developments of abilities and outlook.However,comparing with the more important knowledge students are learning in school, homework is dispensable(dispensable是可免去的意思，反了) and useful.2 ~* H* `!

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To sum up,Teachers,ofcouse, should assign some homework to students ,which is also a part of education during the development of our young generation.In my point of view,homework should not be too havey to bear,beacuse students will study better and more effective ,if they experience more valuable activities.
呃，还是正文段的问题，太概括了，不过你有你的写法，我不做多评论了。

luke_003UID: 2660230

9月9号作文，写超时了，还听了2遍。好烂。
According to the lecture given by the professor,the three theories about the navigation of birds are all doubtful.
  For the first theroy which is that birds navigate by using the sun or star.The professor disagrees with it,for he argues that bird can not orientate the locations at night without the sun.Moreover,stars as considerd as  compasses are also un convincing,for there are no proof of that,and what about nights without stars.Therefore It is unbelieveable that the sun and star play a helpful role in birds' migration.
The second theory is facing chanllges too.According to the reading passage,birds magrate by observing various landmarks when flying at a lower elevations.However,the professor  believes that landmark means nothing to birds.Because when facing some strange circumstances,birds cann't tell the orientation at all. In addition,it is still un convicing of the theory.
The point of birds' sense of the earth's magnetic field is also considered as unbelieveable.Although some schorlars have found several phonomenon that birds can orientate themselves using a magnetic compass in their beak,the professor argues that  magnetic positions of earth are only north and south,therefore,bird cannot define the sepcific locations by the magnetic compass,for some locations are so comlicated that birds may not determine where their destinations are.