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emily-luckUID: 2410641

I understand that nowadays it is important that for people to earn lots of money. As a matter of fact, many people equate money with success: the more money you earned, you more successful you are. From my point of view, we should do a job for the happiness.
Firstly, people always work forty hours a week or more .we should enjoy our work environment so that we can feel more relaxing. Specially ,we had better build a good friendship with co-workers. Because a unpleasant, hostile friendship which will have a negative effect on our working and mental health. so, people must work delightfully.
Secondly, people can gain a special fulfillment or pleasure from doing their
Job. Set a example of mine, I used to be a tutor when I was a undergraduate. My student is a little boy who is 9.He often asked me many questions that I couldn’t answer, on the contrary, I was often inspired by his interesting ideas so that I became more and more energetic and thoughtful. Although, the salary is little, I got a lot of fun from this job.
Finally, the person work hard so as to live comfortably. Affluence can afford many nice things, such as houses, cars ,expensive jewellery, people will have a satisfaction when something meets their needs. In other words, the object of the job is exactly a happiness, as well, the fun of a job is invaluable, more important than money.

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

I understand that nowadays it is important that for people to earn lots of money. As a matter of fact, many people equate money with success: the more money you earned, (you)省略 more successful you are. 转折有点突然可以用However过度下From my point of view, we should do a job for the happiness.

Firstly, people always work forty hours a week or more有点没说完的感觉.we should enjoy our work-->working environment so that we can feel more relaxing. Specially-->especially ,we had better build a good friendship with co-workers. Because a unpleasant这里可以连接起来用一个长句子 we should better build a friendly relationship with coworkers as unpleasant one could bring negative effect on ...., hostile friendship which will have a negative effect on our working and mental health. so, people must work delightfully.

Secondly, people can gain a special fulfillment or pleasure from doing their Job (加上 if they do not focus on money.) Set a example of mine, I used to be a tutor when I was a undergraduate. My student is-->was a little boy who is 9.He often asked me many questions that I couldn’t answer-->my student, a nine-year old boy, often asked me... on the contrary, I was often inspired by his interesting ideas so that I became more and more energetic and thoughtful. Although, the salary is little-->was low, I got a lot of fun from this job.可以多写点他是怎么问你的, 让你思考很多. (实际家教也比较能挣钱, 比如一个小时30,按一个半小时算45. 一周3次课135, 你找3个家教就405,一个月就是1215.就晚上工作一会一千多挺好..)

Finally, the person work hard so as to live comfortably. Affluence can afford many nice things, such as  cars ,expensive jewellery, people will have a satisfaction when something meets their needs前后貌似不搭配. In other words, the object of the job is exactly a happiness, as well, the fun of a job is invaluable, more important than money. 字数不多吧..语言变化不大, 内容强壮不够,加油! 说的不对别介意黑.

ly8768UID: 2452066

1# emily-luck

I understand that nowadays it is important that for people to earn lots of money(语法错误). As a matter of fact, many people equate money with success: the more money you earned, you(the) more successful you are. From my point of view(my point of view，没这么说的from my point 就可以
了), we should do a job for the(没特指) happiness.

Firstly, people always work forty hours a week or more(这个不算论点吧). we should enjoy our work environment(享受工作环境？什么意思) so that we can feel more relaxing. Specially,we had better build a good friendship with co-workers. Because a(an) unpleasant, hostile friendship which will have a negative effect on our working and mental health. so, people must work delightfully.

没明白这段要说什么，和工作for happiness没关系吧

Secondly, people can gain a special fulfillment or pleasure from doing their Job. Set a example of mine(set an example是树立榜样的意思), I used to be a tutor when I was a undergraduate. My student is a little boy who is 9.He often asked me many questions that I couldn’t answer, on the contrary, I was often inspired by his interesting ideas so that I became more and more energetic and thoughtful. Although, the salary is little, I got a lot of fun from this job.


Finally, the person work hard so as to live comfortably. Affluence can afford many nice things, such as houses, cars ,expensive jewellery, people will have a satisfaction when something meets their needs. In other words, the object of the job is exactly a happiness, as well, the fun of a job is invaluable, more important than money.

这个字数也实在太少了，至少得写300字以上吧，而且没有结尾，你可以看看范文和别人是怎么写的，其实写作也就是八股文

woshichensidaUID: 2623391

与楼主共勉，我的字数也多不起来