9.28 作业（进军美利坚）

joyceliuUID: 2477232

In the recent years, there is a general controversyover the issue that weather an intelligent friend is better than a humorousone. Although some people claim that making friends with humorous persons canbring a lot of happiness to their lives, personally, I prefer to those clever friendsand I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.

First and foremost, there is no denying thatintelligent friends are very helpful. As is known to all, intelligence is soimportant that it will take large amounts of convenience to our daily lives. Admittedly,it is impossible that everybody is very bright. However, stay with those intelligentfriends will absolutely benefit you in many aspects. For instance, suppose youhave a deep conflict with your boss about the final decision of a project, if aska stupid friend for help, perhaps, he will tell you to simply comply to theleader, however, a clever friend may give some specific advice, in which youcan not only express your own idea, but also avoid incentive the boss. This isdefinitely the optimal method to deal with this dilemma. What is more, a wisdomfriend can also offer you help in choosing a career, keeping a harmoniousrelationship with colleagues as well as enhance your reputation round thenearby neighborhood. Accordingly, it is obvious that friends with highintellect are conducive to us vastly.

In the second place, through learning from intelligentfriends, people are more likely to improve themselves in a large degree. Since,those intelligent people are usually very successful in their own workingfield, as their friend, you are prone to receive some positive influence. Hereis my own experience, despite I am a student majored in clinical medicine, Ihad made a variety of friends with other majors, additionally, all of them arevery intelligent. Therefore, every time when I talk with them together, I cannot only broaden my knowledge scope, know some latest development in several particularareas, but also strengthen my own logical as well as critical thinking ability.Besides, it could also motivate me to study my own major more efficientlybecause of the interrelationship among disciplines. Ultimately, I could reallyget a big progress in self development.

Last but not least, friends with high intellect areoften quite humorous than ordinary people. It is universally acknowledged thathumor is the product of intelligence, so clever individuals are excellent atjoking, meanwhile bring pleasure to people.

To sum up, taking into account of the discussionmentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is wise andreasonable to make friends with intelligent persons.
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cinderella1016UID: 2666652

In the recent years, there is a general controversy over the issue that weather {whether} an intelligent friend is better than a humorous
one. Although some people claim that making friends with humorous persons can
bring a lot of happiness to their lives, personally, I prefer to those clever friends
and I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.

First and foremost, there is no denying that
intelligent friends are very helpful. As is known to all, intelligence is so
important that it will take large amounts of convenience to our daily lives {benefits our lives in many ways}. Admittedly,
it is impossible {unlikely} that everybody is very bright. However, stay with {keeping in touch with}
those intelligent
friends will absolutely benefit you {do you good} in many aspects. For instance, suppose you
have a deep {are in sharp} conflict with your boss about {over} the final decision of a project, {.} if {if you} ask {turn to} a stupid friend {someone with mediocre intelligence} for help, perhaps, he will {probably} tell you to simply comply to the
leader {ask you to follow your boss’s idea}, {.} however {However}, a clever friend may give {offer} some specific advice, in which you
can not only express your own idea, but also avoid incentive the boss {with the help of which you will have your idea understood without offending your boss}. This is
definitely the optimal method to deal with this dilemma. What is more, a wisdom {wise} friend can also offer you help {do you favors} in choosing a career, keeping a harmonious
relationship with {dealing with your} colleagues as well as enhance {enhancing} your reputation round the
nearby neighborhood. Accordingly, it is obvious that friends with high
intellect {intelligence} are conducive to us vastly {really helpful}.

In the second place, through learning from intelligent
friends, people are more likely to improve themselves in {to} a large degree. Since,
{As} those intelligent people are usually very successful in their own working
field {careers}, as their friend, you are prone to receive some positive influence {get some inspiration}. Here
is my own experience, {.} despite {Although} I am a student majored in clinical medicine, I
had {have} made a variety of friends with other majors {students majored in other subjects}, {.} additionally {Additionally }, all of them are
very intelligent. Therefore, every time when {whenever} I talk with them together, I cannot only {not only can I} broaden my knowledge scope {更虚一点的可以用horizon}, know some {catch up with}
latest development in several particular
areas, but also strengthen my own logical as well as {and} critical thinking ability.
Besides, it could also motivate me to study my own major more efficiently
because of the interrelationship among disciplines. Ultimately, I could really
get a big progress in self development.
{chinglish}

Last but not least, friends with high intellect {intelligence} are
often quite {more} humorous than ordinary people. It is universally acknowledged that
humor is the product of intelligence, so clever individuals are excellent at
joking, meanwhile bring pleasure to people. {牵强}

To sum up, taking into account of the discussion
mentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is wise and
reasonable to make friends with intelligent persons.

cinderella1016UID: 2666652

有下划线的部分，是可以去掉的。

格式菜了点，凑合看吧~

joyceliuUID: 2477232

3# cinderella1016
多谢了，这篇是计时写的，看来还是好多问题，继续努力吧

joyceliuUID: 2477232

重新改好的
In the recent years, there is a general controversy over the issue that whether an intelligent friend is better than a humorous one. Although some people claim that making friends with humorous persons can bring a lot of happiness to their lives, personally, I prefer to those clever friends and I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.

First and foremost, there is no denying that intelligent friends are very helpful. As is known to all, intelligence is so important that it will benefit us in a variety of ways. Admittedly, it is unlikely that everybody is very bright, keeping in touch with those intelligent friends will absolutely do you good in many aspects. For instance, suppose you are in sharp conflict with your boss over the final decision of a project, if you turn to someone with mediocre intelligence, he will probably tell you to simply follow the leader’s idea. Nevertheless, a clever friend may give some specific advice, with the help of which you can make your opinions understood without offending the boss. This is definitely the optimal method to deal with this dilemma. What is more, a wise friend can also do you favors in choosing a career, keeping a harmonious relationship with colleagues as well as enhancing your reputation in your neighborhood. Accordingly, it is obvious that friends with intelligence are conducive to us.

In the second place, through learning from intelligent friends, people are more likely to improve themselves to a large degree. Because those intelligent people are usually very successful in their own working field, as their friend, you are prone to get some inspiration. Here is my own experience, although I am a student majored in clinical medicine, I have made a variety of friends with students majored in other subjects. Additionally, all of them are very intelligent. Therefore, whenever I talk with them, not only can I broaden my knowledge horizon, catch up with the latest development in several particular areas, but also strengthen logical and critical thinking ability. This is likely to assist me in finishing my own tasks too. Ultimately, through having conversation with intelligent friends, I really make a great improvement in self-developing.

Last but not least, with intelligence, people can also become very humorous. Since, it is universally acknowledged that humor is originated from wisdom, clever friends are excellent at telling jokes, bring happiness to people around them.

To sum up, taking into account of the discussion mentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is wise and reasonable to make friends with intelligent persons.
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cinderella1016UID: 2666652

sigh。

你连改动都没仔细看。

joyceliuUID: 2477232

是说论证第三段么？有什么不好的能帮忙指出来么？我去时认真看过你的修改了， 不会说别的先谢谢吧

joyceliuUID: 2477232

错字：确实

joyceliuUID: 2477232

你是说前后那几句模板是么？我疏忽了，不过好像也可以这么用

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

刘兄给你改很多了, 我也顺便学习学习..白天出去了又被别人骗做美容...不好意思才给看. 刘兄改的很详细的说. 我感觉里面有的词汇用的不很合适, stupid, clever不如smart听着顺耳....哪天刘兄也给我的也改改的说哈.

ly8768UID: 2452066

1# joyceliu

In the recent years, there is a general controversy over the issue that(that和whether重复) weather an intelligent friend is better than a humorous one. Although some people claim that making friends with humorous persons can bring a lot of happiness to their lives, personally, I prefer to those clever friends and I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.

First and foremost, there is no denying that intelligent friends are very helpful. As is known to all, intelligence is so important that it will take large amounts of convenience to our daily lives. Admittedly, it is impossible that everybody is very bright(这句话没什么意义). However, stay(staying) with those intelligent friends will absolutely benefit you in many aspects(重复了，这个意思翻来覆去说了两遍). For instance, suppose(supposing) you have a deep conflict with your boss about the final decision of a project, if ask a stupid friend for help, perhaps, he will tell you to simply comply to the leader, however, a clever friend may give some specific advice, in which you can not only express your own idea, but also avoid incentive the boss(这个举例子的时候还是不要说stupid friend就说intelligent friend的好处就可以了). This is definitely the(an) optimal method to deal with this dilemma. What is more, a wisdom(wise) friend can also offer you help in choosing a career, keeping a harmonious relationship with colleagues as well as enhance(enhancing) your reputation round the(去掉) nearby neighborhood. Accordingly, it is obvious that friends with high intellect are conducive to us vastly.

In the second place, through learning from intelligent friends, people are more likely to improve themselves in a large degree. Since, those intelligent people are usually very successful in their own working field(career), as their friend, you are prone to receive(receiving) some positive influence. Here is my own experience, despite I am a student majored(majoring) in clinical medicine, I had made a variety of friends with other majors(这个实在没看出有转折的意思), additionally, all of them are very intelligent. Therefore, every time when I talk with them together, I cannot only broaden my knowledge scope, know some latest development in several particular areas, but also strengthen my own logical(logic) as well as critical thinking ability. Besides, it could also motivate me to study my own major more efficiently because of the interrelationship among disciplines. Ultimately, I could really get a big progress in self development.

Last but not least, friends with high intellect are often quite humorous than ordinary people. It is universally acknowledged that humor is the product of intelligence, so clever individuals are excellent at joking, meanwhile bring pleasure to people.

To sum up, taking into account of the discussion mentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is wise and reasonable to make friends with intelligent persons.

错别字实在是太多了啊，这个得改啊

joyceliuUID: 2477232

虚心接受批评，谢谢大家了