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scarlettzfUID: 2594692

Should we put more emphersis on the access internet instead of public transportation?

            Nowadays, internet is more and more important in daily life. Some of us can even hardly live without it!
and internet can bring us a lot of information and knowledge, and in this modern world, these two can earn you everything ,to be exaggerately spoken. On the contrary, the public transportation seems a little less important. Since it’s a system that can be traced hundred years ago, it seems that this public transportation is not an eager issue right now. So, many governments choose to put more money to build more access of the internet, and neglect or put less emphersis on this later issue. However, in my opinion, public transportation is more important. It matters with more people’s interest. And we should use more money to build convenient public transportation system.
            To begin with, the development degree of the public transportation can stand the development degree of a country. We can make a comparision between China and Switzerland. During last summer, I went to Switzerland. I was a little shocked by the development degree of the country’s transportation system, especially the railway and the tram. Every trip of the any transportation mean, it has a correct time to arrive and to start. But in china, people hardly know the time. And there are many ways of the public transportation system in Switzerland, including tram, bus, railway and train… each of them are linked tightly to each other, and it just looks as a big net covering the whole country. So, you can almost go wherever you want. That gives me a lot of convenience during the whole trip.
             Secondly, the public transportation plays such an important part in every citizen’s life that people cannot lead a normal and efficient life without it. Taking me as an instant, I live far from our school and because I am only a student, I don’t own a car and I cannot afford the convenient taxi. So the public transportation is so key to me. So, in a word, public transportation makes our work and study more efficient and meaningful, and it makes the journey of life more colorful and joyful.
             Last but not least, to build better public transportation is the target of the whole world, which need environment protection badly, and which need all of us living on this beautiful water planet to do something. All of us should take public transportation. And thus, we can improve the efficiency of the burning carbon and reduce the CO2 which is let out from the cars.
             In all, public transportation is so important that it not only matters with our daily life, but also matters to our next generation in the long term. So, put more money to build a convenient and welcoming public transportation system is what we now badly need.

daisy840228UID: 2684617

Should we put more emphersis on the access internet instead of public transportation?5 T5 D% g8 }* g- t9 j& q Nowadays, internet is more and more important in daily life. Some of us can even hardly live without it! # I3 v  u! f5 \8 l! E* a and（And，不确定！之后是否要大写，可能我修改不正确） internet can bring us a lot of information and knowledge, and （太多and，建议. In）in this modern world, these two can earn you everything ,to be exaggerately spoken. On the contrary, the public transportation seems a little less important. Since it’s(is) a system that can be traced hundred years ago, it seems that this public transportation is not an eager issue right now. So, many governments choose to put more money to build more access of the internet, and neglect or put less emphersis on this later issue. However, in my opinion, public transportation is more important. It matters with more people’s interest. And we should use more money to build convenient public transportation system.. _8 N: g; |6 u3 n  y6 u7 z& r         To begin with, the development degree of the public transportation can stand the development degree of a country. We can make a comparision between China and Switzerland. During last summer, I went to Switzerland. I was a little shocked by the development degree of the country’s transportation system, especially the railway and the tram. Every trip of the any transportation mean, it has a correct time to arrive and to start. But in china, people hardly know the time. And there are many ways of the public transportation system in Switzerland, including tram, bus, railway and train… each of them are linked tightly to each other, and it just looks as a big net covering the whole country. So, you can almost go wherever you want. That gives me a lot of convenience during the whole trip.        Secondly, the public transportation plays such an important part in every citizen’s life that people cannot lead a normal and efficient life without it. Taking me as an instant, I live far from our school and because I am only a student, I don’t own a car and I cannot afford the convenient taxi. So the public transportation is so key to me. So,(连续3个so了，建议去掉） in a word, public transportation makes our work and study more efficient and meaningful, and it makes the journey of life more colorful and joyful.         Last but not least, to build better public transportation is the target of the whole world, which need environment protection badly, and which need（which need去掉，重复了） all of us living on this beautiful water planet to do something. All of us should take public transportation. And thus, we can improve the efficiency of the burning carbon and reduce the CO2 which is let out from the cars.       In all, public transportation is so important that it not only matters with our daily life, but also matters to our next generation in the long term. So, put more money to build a convenient and welcoming public transportation system is what we now badly need. 我觉得写得挺好的，逻辑清晰，语法错误也少

kathryn慕云UID: 2638683

       Nowadays, Internet is more and more important in daily life. Some of us can even hardly live without it! 4 o" z$ l/ m. q( Q" vAnd Internet can bring us a lot of information and knowledge, and inthis modern world, these two can earn you everything ,to be exaggeratedly spoken. On the contrary, the public transportation seems alittle less important. Since it’s a system that can be traced hundredyears ago, it seems that this public transportation is not an eagerissue right now. So, many governments choose to put more money to buildmore access of the Internet, and neglect or put less emphasis on thislater issue. However, in my opinion, public transportation is moreimportant. It matters with more people’s interest. And we should usemore money to build convenient public transportation system.(第一段我老是不知道如何和自己的观点联系起来，向你学习哈)# T( I, F3 V: c: f8 C# W4 \
           To begin with, the development degree of the publictransportation can stand the development degree of a country. We canmake a comparison between China and Switzerland. During last summer, Iwent to Switzerland. I was a little shocked by the development degreeof the country’s transportation system, especially the railway and thetram. Every trip of the any transportation mean, it has a correct timeto arrive and to start. But in china, people hardly know the time. Andthere are many ways of the public transportation system in Switzerland,including tram, bus, railway and train… each of them are linked tightlyto each other, and it just looks as a big net covering the wholecountry. So, you can almost go wherever you want. That gives me a lotof convenience during the whole trip.这段可以再加上一个例子
  x# [% d4 Y8 v9 U            Secondly, the public transportation plays such an importantpart in every citizen’s life that people cannot lead a normal andefficient life without it. Taking me as an instant, I live far from ourschool and because I am only a student, I don’t own a car and I cannotafford the convenient taxi. So the public transportation is so key tome. So, in a word, public transportation makes our work and study moreefficient and meaningful, and it makes the journey of life morecolorful and joyful.
3 f3 j$ F, N# y0 A% F5 g, ?. b; t            Last but not least, to build better public transportation isthe target of the whole world, which need environment protection badly,and which need all of us living on this beautiful water planet to dosomething. All of us should take public transportation. And thus, wecan improve the efficiency of the burning carbon and reduce the CO2which is let out from the cars.
4 }+ I9 G8 H% c+ W. M            In all, public transportation is so important that it notonly matters with our daily life, but also matters to our nextgeneration in the long term. So, put more money to build a convenientand welcoming public transportation system is what we now badly need.
我没发现什么语法错误，呵呵，我觉得你的作文很好哈。。。向你学习
toefl作文和G的作文是不同的，没那么复杂
结构一般就是开头，中间两个主体锻，最好再加一个让步段，最后结尾（要求是猪头，龙肚，猪尾就可以啦）
中间主体段每说一个观点就必须有detail的支撑。。。

scarlettzfUID: 2594692

9月30号作文（这篇刚开始一直不知道怎么写，写了近一个小时。。。）
Should movie be entertainment or serious?

Movies have become the most common and important entertainment in our daily life. And there are various kinds of movie. Some are very comedy while some are soulful; some are idealistic while some are realistic; some are just for fun, while some trigger us to think more. In this multi-cultural world, it is hard to say whether movies should be more entertainment or should be more serious. In my perspective, the reason why movies are good and so world-wide famous is just due to its various types. Thus , movies can be both entertainment and serious.

To begin with, most of people watch movies and make it a way to relax themselves and have fun. Nowadays, people are facing a more and more competitive society. They burden too much weight mentally. So they have to find a way to take off all the burden and bring them away from reality for a while. In this condition, the more entertaining the movies, the better result of watching them. People only urge for a silly laugh, a easy plot and a warm feeling.

However, besides the entertainment value, movies can also be used as a broadcasting tool and knowledge spreader for the citizens on a lot of serious issues; and as the large influence movies always have, the result can be very good in the form of a hot discussion and so on. Take China for example, usually as the national celebrating day coming near, some movies, which are about the history of the country or about the stories of the heroes of the country, will be show on the theatre. Thus, they will remind the citizens about the historical matters or people. In this way, the spirit of the whole country will be cheered up and the government broadcast its good lead and management successfully in some extent.

Actually, it is not contradictory for a movie being both entertainment and serious. A good comedy can bring people a big laugh, but after the laugh, people always sink to think more. Take Charlie Chaplin for example. People cannot help laughing for his funny action and the kind of weird appearance. But the movie is actually about the reality in the old industry society in America, where and when works faced with an unfair treat and terrible working and living environment. All invoke us to think more and seriously about the system of the society.

In all, no matter it is more entertainment or serious, we can get a lot from a good movie. Not only can we get relaxed in some extent, but also do we learn something and broaden our views.

fish1044UID: 2190500

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    Movies have become the most common and important entertainment in our daily life. And there are various kinds of movie. Some are very comedy(cheerful会不会好点？) while some are soulful; some are idealistic while some are realistic; some are just for fun, while some trigger(Stimulate?) us to think more. In this multi-cultural world, it is hard to say whether movies should be more entertainment(ing) or should be more serious. In my perspective, the reason why movies are good and so world-wide famous is just due to its various types. Thus , movies can be both entertainment and serious.
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    To begin with, most of people watch movies and make it a way to relax themselves and have fun. Nowadays, people are facing a more and more competitive society. They burden too much weight mentally. So they have to find a way to take off all the burden and bring them away from reality for a while. In this condition, the more entertaining the movies are, the better result of watching them(没看懂想表达什么). People only urge for a silly laugh, a easy plot and a warm feeling.
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    However, besides the entertainment value, movies can also be used as a broadcasting tool(medium) and knowledge spreader（propagator会专业一点） for the citizens on a lot of serious issues; and as the large influence movies always have, the result can be very good in the form of a hot discussion and so on. Take China for example, usually as the national celebrating day coming near, some movies, which are about the history of the country or about the stories of the heroes of the country, will be show on the theatre. Thus, they will remind the citizens about the historical matters or people. In this way, the spirit of the whole country will be cheered up and the government broadcast its good lead(ership) and management successfully in some extent.



Actually, it is not contradictory for a movie being both entertainment and serious. A good comedy can bring people a big laugh, but after the laugh, people always sink to think more. Take Charlie Chaplin for example. People cannot help laughing for his funny action and the kind of weird appearance. But the movie is actually about the reality in the old industry society in America, where and when works faced with an unfair treat and terrible working and living environment. All invoke us to think more and seriously about the system of the society.1 _4 x5 O8 H/ m+ K% R/ N! J  Z


In all, no matter it is more entertainment or serious, we can get a lot from a good movie. Not only can we get relaxed in some extent, but also do we learn something and broaden our views.


作文写的不错啊，我应该向你学习呢。