10.4作文

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Nowadays, with the rapid development of the technology and the society, we human beings have much choice than before in clothing. So the problem comes: should we prank ourselves up with costumes of all description both in our offices and on campus? In my perspective, I’m on the side of opposite one. Here are my reasons.
First and for most, there are all kinds of regulations and disciplines in our real world, and it is just those laws that make our lives ordered. We need something to restrict our behavior,, not just doing as one wishes to. Without those disciplines, our world would become unordered and our lives will become a mess. For instance, if we don’t set up some laws of dressing, then everyone would just dress whatever they like. That would make our management of our school and corporation more difficult.On the other hand,if we have some rules on dressing, for instance,wearing uniform at office, it would strengthen our sense of  teamwork.
Secondly, generally speaking, our attention would be attracted to our clothing instead of what should be done. Just imagine that if everyone in our classroom dressed eccentricly, what would happen? For instance, in my senior middle high school, before we are uniformed, we would always get our topic on our clothing when the class is over. “Look, he is dressed in ADIDAS.’’ “Well, what a cool NIKE basketball shoes!” The classroom was permeated by those kind of comments,. This had led to a habit of corruption to a certain extent. But when we are forced to dress in our uniform, during the break of two classes, we weren’t going to discuss the clothes---everyone is the same! So we would talk about our subjects most of the time. And in this way ,we just do what we students should do .
So, in a word, we should have the rules about the types of clothing that people are allowed to work and school .Only in this way can way make our lives more disciplined and more productive.

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Nowadays, with the rapid development of the technology and the society, we human beings have much choice than before in clothing. So the problem comes: should we prank ourselves up with costumes of all description both in our offices and on campus? In my perspective, I’m on the side of the opposite one. Here are my reasons.

First and for most, there are all kinds of regulations and disciplines in our real world, and it is just those laws（还有道德morality，分析不严谨，建议去掉just） that make our lives ordered. We need something to restrict our behavior, not just doing as one wishes to. Without those disciplines, our world would become unordered and our lives will become a mess. For instance, if we don’t set up some laws of dressing, then everyone would just dress whatever they like. That would make our management of our school and corporation more difficult.On the other hand,if we have some rules on dressing, for instance,wearing uniform at office, it would strengthen our sense of  teamwork. （写了很多规则的重要意义，有小跑题，建议focus on论述着装是否需要规则化；而且一段论述两个分观点1.秩序，2.集体感，有些分段不清，建议分为两段）

Secondly, generally speaking, our attention would be attracted（建议用disattract，改表述角度） to our clothing instead of what should be done. Just imagine that if everyone in our classroom dressed eccentricly, what would happen? For instance, in my senior middle high school, before we are uniformed, we would always get our topic on our clothing when the class is over. “Look, he is dressed in ADIDAS.’’ “Well, what a cool paire of NIKE basketball shoes!” The classroom was permeated by those kind of comments,. This had led to a habit of corruption（建议换词indulge in luxury goods） to a certain extent. But when we are forced to dress in our uniform, during the break of two（建议去掉） classes, we weren’t going to discuss the clothes---everyone was dressed in the same way. So we would talk about our subjects instead most of the time. And in this way ,we just do what we students should do .

So, in a word, we should have the rules about the types of clothing that people are allowed to wear at work or in school .Only（显然服装不是秩序和效率的全部，建议去掉） in this way can way make our lives more disciplined and more productive.

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Nowadays, with the rapid development of the technology and the society, we human beings have much (more) choice than before in clothing. So the problem comes: should we prank ourselves up with costumes of all description both in our offices and on campus? In my perspective, I’m on the side of opposite one (the opposite). Here are my reasons.
First and for most, there are all kinds of regulations and disciplines in our real world, and it is just (去掉)those laws that make our lives ordered. We need something to restrict our behavior,, not just doing as (改成what) one wishes to. Without those disciplines, our world would become unordered (改成disordered) and our lives will become a mess. For instance, if we don’t set up some laws of dressing, then everyone would just dress whatever they like. That would make our management of our school and corporation more difficult.On the other hand (最好前面有on one hand呼应),if we have some rules on dressing, for instance (改成like),wearing uniform at office, it would strengthen our sense of  teamwork.6 U' O: G6 S% g1 o2 ?  d: `
Secondly, generally speaking,（建议去掉） our attention would be attracted to our clothing instead of what should be done. Just imagine that if everyone in our classroom dressed eccentricly, what would happen? For instance, in my senior middle（去掉） high school, before we are uniformed, we would always get our topic on our clothing when the（去掉） class is over. “Look, he is dressed in ADIDAS.’’ “Well, what a cool 加上pair of NIKE basketball shoes!” The classroom was permeated by those kind of comments,. This had led to a habit of corruption to a certain extent. But when we are forced to dress in our uniform, during the break of two classes, we weren’t going （改成 would not be able） to discuss the clothes---everyone is （加上dressed，everynone不会the　same的。。。）　the same! So we would talk about our subjects （ 改成study） most of the time. And in this way ,we just do what we students should do .3 T9 s' F/ _3 b
So（去掉）, in a word, we should have the rules about the types of clothing that people are allowed to work and school .Only in this way can way make our lives more disciplined and more productive.
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