10.15作文，拍死我吧

doubledianUID: 2661760

In the recent years, there is a general controversy over the issue whether teacher should achieve more money than doctors, lawyers, and business leaders. Although some people claim that as teacher's hard working they should earning more than others. Personally, I hold the opinion that the number of money people earn depends on the achievement they make for other people than the career they have. So teachers should or not earn more money than others is hardly to say. And I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.


The main reason why I hold the above statement is that, although doctors, lawyers and business leaders seem sit on their own office without doing anything all days, they don't have a easier work than teachers do. Take the business leaders for example, everyone may be want to be a leader, because they can drink much delicious drinking while they are working, they do whatever they want even in working time, and they needn't do any hard work, all they should do is count the money they earn. But things are really like this? When the leader is boring with the depreciation of his company, you may not see his gaunt face. All days when leaders sit in their office they always think what to do to make their company more successful. This brainwork is more different to do than teacher's work. However, lawyers also sit in the office all day, when there is no business the only thing they do is sitting there. But once there is a business the lawyer should spend all their energy to do the work perfect.


There is another factor that people always think teachers are the engineer of human's life. They may dedicate their whole life to education, the work they do is more meaningful than others do. I can not deny this opinion, but I think all jobs people do are meaningful. Without doctors we may die in a serious disease, and the world may become disordered. Without lawyers we can not know those laws better, we may make mistakes all the time. And without business leaders we even can not create a wonderful word, and most people may lose their jobs. So no matter who, teachers or doctors, lawyers and business leaders should earn money reasonable.

eeqkchenUID: 2644469

In the recent years, there is a general controversy over the issue whether teacher（teachers) should achieve more money than doctors, lawyers, and business leaders. Although some people claim that as teacher's hard working they should earning(earn) more than others. Personally, I hold the opinion that the number of money people earn depends on the achievement they make for (the)other people than the career they have(delete). So teachers should or not(delete) earn more money or not than others is hardly to say. And I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.

The main reason why I hold the above statement(above) is that, although doctors, lawyers and business leaders seem sit on their own office(offices) without doing anything all days, they don't have a easier work than teachers do. Take the business leaders for example, everyone may be want to be a leader, because they can drink(take) much delicious drinking while they are working, they do whatever they want even in working time, and they needn't do any hard work, all they should do is (to) count the money they earn(earned). But things are really like this? When the leader is boring with the depreciation of his company, you may not see his gaunt face. All days when leaders sit in their office they always think (about) what to do to(which can) make their company more successful. This brainwork is more different to do(delete) than teacher's work. However(Furthermore), lawyers also sit in the office(offices) all day, when there is no business the only thing they do is sitting there. But once there is a business(an emergency event occurs) the lawyer should spend all their energy to(spare no effect to不遗余力地做) do（manage） the work perfect（eminently）.

There is another factor that people always think teachers are the engineer（engineers） of human's life. They may dedicate their whole life（lives） to education, the work（works）which they do is(are) more meaningful than others do. I can not deny this opinion, but I think all jobs people do（delete） are meaningful. Without doctors we may die in a（delete） serious disease（diseases）, and the world may become disordered. Without lawyers we can not know those laws better, we may make mistakes all the time. And without business leaders we even can not create a wonderful word, and most people may lose their jobs. So no matter who, teachers or doctors, lawyers and business leaders should earn money reasonable.

scutgongUID: 2564275

In the （一般来说，the可以删除吧）recent years, there is a general controversy over the issue whether teacher should achieve more money than doctors, lawyers, and business leaders. （题目说的是是否能取得一样多？）Although some people claim that as teacher's hard working they should earning （earn） more than others. Personally, I hold the opinion that the number of money people earn depends on the achievement they make for other people than the career they have. So teachers should or not earn more money than others is hardly to say. And I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.

The main reason why I hold the above statement is that, although doctors, lawyers and business leaders seem sit on their own office without doing anything all days（个人观点：感觉这句话有点中文）, they don't have a easier work than teachers do. Take the business leaders for example, everyone may be want to be a leader, because they can drink much delicious drinking（这里两个drink了，建议后者改为“wine”） while they are working, they do whatever they want even in working time, and they needn't do any hard work, all they should do is count the money they earn. But things are really like this? When the leader is boring（bored） with the depreciation of his company, you may not see his gaunt face. All days when leaders sit in their office they always think what to do to make their company more successful. This brainwork is more different to do than teacher's work. However, lawyers also sit in the office all day, when there is no business the only thing they do is sitting there. But once there is a business the lawyer should spend all their energy to do the work perfect. （对于这段话，虽然我能理解作者说的话，我的总体感觉是作者收中文的影响很深，有些词语不是英文的表达方式。然后作者对于词的重复使用比较严重，如sit）

There is another factor that people always think teachers are the engineer of human's life. They may dedicate their whole life to education, the work they do is more meaningful than others do. I cannot deny this opinion, but I think all jobs people do are meaningful. Without doctors we may die in a serious disease, and the world may become disordered. Without lawyers we cannot know those laws better, we may make mistakes all the time. And without business leaders we even cannot create a wonderful word, and most people may lose their jobs. So no matter who, teachers or doctors, lawyers and business leaders should earn money reasonable.

作者最后最好是拿出一段给个总结，这样更能体现作者的观点。