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shining_sjUID: 2485580

Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place. . w" X, Z# j

Whether peopole should live in the city or country all life rather than move to other places depends on which situation causes more benefits.In my opinion,I think that advantages of migration overweighted that of living stable.It has a gainful effect on both the country and individuals.

Fist of all, although frequent movement of populaiton results in the difficulties in statistics of national population and crime controls of governmet,it promots the trade of the commodities and global captial flows.These activities drive the flourish in business and activate the development of country economy.For example,it was the gold rush attracted thousands of people swarmed in California to seek their fortune and ultimatley led to the expasion of the southern United State economy.Moreover,it actuates the exchange of different culutres as well.When parts of minority people leave their native places,maybe in the remote mountainal regions,and settle in urban cities,they aslo impart the minority cultures to the majority.Their culutres will be perserved or passed by then.

Secondly,individuals have their own preferences of the living condition.Some people like live the place where season chages,while others prefer to residing in topic areas.And some individuals desire for a house with an beautiful ocean view located near the beach,but unfortunately they were born in inland cities.Of course,if people have enough ability to afford the costs,moving to a favor place is absolutely reasonable.On the other hand.since distinct areas provide diverse job opportunities,individuals can get a wider range of choice by mobility.Take Beijing as example,people came from a variety areas of different background would like to settle in Beijing,because Beijing as a large city offers more occupation with higher salaries.

In conculsion,despite of some disadvantages of population mobility,it leads to the growth of economy and the reciprocal communication of culutres.In addition,it conforms to the diversty of human nature.

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名字是个词儿UID: 2707493

Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place.

Whetherpeopole should live in the city or country all life rather than move toother places depends on which situation causes more benefits.In myopinion,I think that advantages of migration overweighted that ofliving stable.It has a gainful effect on both the country[这里会不会容易与前面表示农村的country弄混？可以换成nation] andindividuals.

Fistof all, although frequent movement of populaiton results in thedifficulties in statistics of national population and crime controls ofgovernmet,it promots the trade of the commodities and global captialflows.These activities drive the flourish in business and activate thedevelopment of country economy.Moreover,it actuates the exchange ofdifferent culutres.For instance,when parts of chinese minority leavetheir native places,maybe in the remote mountainal regions,and settlein urban cities,they aslo bring the minorty cultures to themajority.Their culutres will be perserved or passed by then.

Secondly,individualshave their own preferences of the living condition.Some people likelive[语法，两个动词不能连用] the place where season chages,while others prefer to residing[要么去掉to，要么换成reside] intopic areas.[这句话，与城乡对比有关系么？]Of course,if people have enough ability to afford thecosts,moving to a favor[变成形容词性] place is absolutely reasonable.On the otherhand.since distinct areas provide diverse job opportunities,individuals can get a wider range of choice bymobility.Take Beijing as example[take...as an example，或take...for example],people came from a variety areas ofdifferent background[复数] would like to settle in Beijing,because Beijing asa large city offers more occupation with higher salaries.  I- n' t3 {& y. G4 u0 Q8 f6 `1 X

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Inconculsion,despite of[去掉of] some disadvantages of population mobility,itleads to the growth of economy and the reciprocal communication ofculutres.In addition,it conforms to the diversty of human nature.

不仅想到个人，并且从国家的全局角度考虑，好思路，向你学习。
对长句和从句的把握也不错，时态什么的基本不错，结构也不乱。
Secondly那一段，我觉得有点跑题，并且用的例子与论点也不太匹配，可以调整下。运用词汇的能力不错，保持！

yuminjiaUID: 2659628

1# shining_sj

, T% ?, c) l' F" y6 |* ~& hWhether people should live in the city or country all life rather than move to other places depends on which situation causes more benefits. In my opinion, I think that advantages of migration overweighted（ 要么是overweigh,要么是over weight楼主自己查下验证）
that（改为those,和前面的advantage 平行） of living stable. It has a gainful effect on both the country and individuals.9 P" T' m( E) Z2 S6 b* C

" A- u0 Q2 |& i2 ^/ K6 {Fist of all, although frequent movement of populaiton results in the difficulties in statistics of national population and crime controls of government, it promotes the trade of the commodities and global captial flows. These activities drive the flourish in business and activate the development of country economy. For example, it was the gold rush that(强调句的that 不可以省) attracted thousands of people swarmed（改为swarming） in California to seek their fortune and ultimatley led to the expasion of the southern United State economy. Moreover, it actuates the exchange of different cultures as well. When parts of minority people leave their native places, maybe in the remote mountainal regions （山区不这么说，可以查一下）,and settle in urban cities, they also impart the minority cultures to the majority. Their culture will be preserved or passed by then.$ c% ^8 [5 w7 Y( L% u) L; j( v

4 r% T4 `7 {7 u1 KSecondly, individuals have their own preferences of the living condition. Some people like live the place where season changes, while others prefer to residing in topic areas. And some individuals desire for a house with an beautiful ocean view located near the beach, but unfortunately they were born in inland cities. Of course, if people have enough ability to afford the costs, moving to a favor place is absolutely reasonable. On the other hand. since distinct areas provide diverse job opportunities, individuals can get a wider range of choice by mobility. Take Beijing as example, people come from a variety areas of different background would like to settle in Beijing,because Beijing ,as a large city ,offers more occupation with higher salaries.
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In conculsion, despite of some disadvantages of population mobility, it leads to the growth of economy and the reciprocal communication of culture. In addition, it conforms to the diversity of human nature.

有些拼写的错误

几个句子结构的语法错误

其他很好，值得学习