12.4综合作文BYξ↗丫頭‰〥

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The listening and reading passage have a conflict of the opinion about whether painting was worked by Rembrabdt.The reading passage holds negative idea providing three points as evidences,which are contradicted by the following lecture.
To begin with,the lecture claims that the fur color was added by someone else 100 years after the painting was made to increase the value by making her looks more formal.This point rejects the content,there is an inconsistent about the way the woman is dressed in reading material.
In addition,the lecture goes on to discuss the issue on that the shadow on her face is .From the original painting,the woman wears a light and simple color clothes which can reflect color to illuminate her face.This also conflict the point the the light and shadow cannot fit each other in the reading material.
Furthermore,the lecture also oppose to the writer's explain by emphasizing that the wood panel can make painting more grand and valuable and the original painting was painted in single pieces of wood.On the other hand,the researchers have found that another painting of Rembrandt also used the wood which are from the same tree as the former one.

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12.5TPO4综合作文Byξ↗丫頭‰〥
                 The listening and reading passage have a conflict of opinion about whether dinosaurs were endotherms .The reading material hold the positive perspective providing three points as evidences,which are contradicted by the following lecture.
         To begin with,the lecture claims that the unendotherms animals also can live in polar region during the dinosaur period ,which reject the contents,only endotherms can live in such cold area in polar region.From the lecture,the temperature in the dinosaur period was much warmer than it in modern life,so it was warmer enough for unendotherms animals to live in and they could migrate to warmer area when the weather became cold.
        In addition,the lecture goes on to discuss the issue that the legs underneath its body used for supporting their weight,which also conflict the point that all endotherms have legs underneath for running in the reading material.In accordance with the lecture,the legs underneath its body are used to support their weight so that it could grow large enough and need not to run.
Furthermore,the lecture also oppose the writer's explain by emphasizing that dinosaur not only have Haversian canals but also grow ring in their bones .On the contrary, about the same problem,the writer claims that the canals make dinosaur grow rapid which is an important characteristic of endotherms.In order to demonstrate his perspective,the lecture persuades us with  the evidence that dinosaurs have three stages ,rapid growing,slow growing and stop growing,in growing period.So they couldn't be endotherms animals.

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不知道怎么回事，第三段从word黏贴到这就没空行了~~~辛苦帮我改的亲了~~~

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The listening and reading passage have a conflict of opinion about whether dinosaurs were endotherms .The reading material hold the positive perspective providing three points as evidences,which are contradicted by the following lecture.
         To begin with, the lecture claims that the unendotherms animals(冷血动物应该是ectotherm，以下同) also can live in polar region during the dinosaur period(最好用age或者era，以下同) ,which reject（overthrows） the contents (that)only endotherms can live in such cold area in（like） polar region. From the lecture, the temperature in the dinosaur period was much warmer than it in modern life（times）,so it was warmer enough for unendotherms animals（删去animals） to live in and they could migrate to warmer area when the weather became cold.(这一点看得很清楚，比我强)

        In addition, the lecture goes on to discuss the issue that the legs underneath its body used for supporting their weight, which also conflict the point that all endotherms have legs underneath for running in the reading material. In accordance with the lecture, the legs underneath its body are used to support their weight so that it could grow large enough and need not to
run.

Furthermore, the lecture also oppose the writer's explain by emphasizing that dinosaur not only have Haversian canals but also grow ring in their bones .On the contrary, about the same problem, the writer claims that the canals make dinosaur grow rapid which is an important characteristic of endotherms. In order to demonstrate his perspective, the lecture persuades us with  the evidence that dinosaurs have three stages ,rapid growing,slow growing and stop growing,in growing period.So they couldn't be endotherms animals.（这一段有个问题没有交待清楚，就是冷血动物在寒冷气候下生长速度放慢或者停止生长，而恒温动物即使在寒冷气候下也能保持很快的生长速度。恐龙的grow ring显示其生长规律与冷血动物一致。）

你的文章结构和用词都不错，注意要完整把握听力材料的原意，不要遗漏，大家一起努力，加油加油！

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The listening and reading passage have a conflict ofopinion[have conflict opinions] about whether dinosaurs were endotherms .The reading materialhold the positive perspective providing three points as evidences[providing three pieces of evedence to support its point],whichare contradicted by the following lecture
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         To begin with,the lecture claims that the unendotherms animalsalso can live in polar region during the dinosaur period ,which rejectthe contents,[去掉逗号，加that，以显示这个观点是reading passage中的]only endotherms can live in such cold area in polarregion.From the lecture,the temperature in the dinosaur period[when dinosaurs lived] was muchwarmer than it in modern life[than it is nowadays],so it was warmer enough for unendothermsanimals[删] to live in and they could migrate to warmer area when theweather became cold.5 Y! Z7 x1 b) m& {7 I- e
         In addition,the lecture goes on to discuss the issue that thelegs underneath its[整句话没有找到it的指代对象] body used for supporting their weight,
which alsoconflict the point that all endotherms have legs underneath for runningin the reading material.In accordance with the lecture,the legsunderneath its body are used to support their weight so that it couldgrow large enough and need not to run.
( i4 a- ^0 S) ~) O" r8 R         Furthermore,thelecture also oppose the writer's explain by emphasizing that dinosaurnot only have Haversian canals but also grow ring in their bones .Onthe contrary, about the same problem,the writer claims that the canalsmake dinosaur grow rapid which is an important characteristic ofendotherms.In order to demonstrate his perspective,the lecturepersuades us with  the evidence that dinosaurs have three stages ,rapidgrowing,slow growing and stop growing,in growing period.So theycouldn't be endotherms animals.［这段的结构有点点乱，先说lecture，然后on the contrary又说了一长句reading，再绕回来又说lecture。我一直觉得reading的部分用半句就够了。不过这段的内容你比我听得全。］

听力不错，基本没漏什么关键点。MM再多注意修饰一下语法。

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The listening and reading passage have a conflict opinion about what the Chaco Canyon used for.The reading passage lists three possible functions ,which are contradicted by the following lecture,
        To begin with,the reading material claims that the Chaco Canyon may be used as residential due to they have the similar outlook with the Southwest societies.In contrast ,the lecture argue that although they have the similar outlook , there are many differences inside.For example,there are too few fire places for so many people cooking and no enough room for them .In a word,it couldn't be used for residential.
        In addition,the lecture goes on to discuss the issue about that the Chaco Canyon couldn't be used for storing grain maize,which also conflict the point in the reading material.In accordance with the lecture,there are almost no containers to hold so many grain maize on the floor in these houses and it is unbelievable that use so large house just to store grain maizes.
Furthermore,the lecture also oppose the writer's expectation by emphasizing that there are also many other material besides broken pots close to the house, such as sands,stone and so on .So the speaker claims that it just was a trash place that people threw stuff there rather than ceremonial centers.On the contrary ,the writer insisted that it must be ceremonial centers by providing evidence that there were many broken pots on the ground.

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刚才发的是12.9号的TPO5的综合作文~~~大家狠拍哈~~~

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The listening and reading passage(删去) have a conflict opinion about whatthe(structures in) Chaco Canyon used for.The reading passage lists three possiblefunctions ,which are contradicted by the following lecture,% g, V( ~& H  b! B  V2 Q9 n% ]
        To begin with,the reading material claims that the Chaco Canyonmay be used as residential due to they have(their)the similar outlook withthe Southwest societies.In contrast ,the lecture argue that althoughthey have the similar outlook , there are many differences inside.Forexample,there are too few fire places for so many people cooking and noenough room for them (那个最大的能容纳100家庭的建筑只有10个灶台要提到...).In a word,it couldn't be used for residential.
     In addition(与goes on重复？),the lecture goes on to discuss the issue about that theChaco Canyon couldn't be used for storing grain maize,which alsoconflict the point in the reading material.In accordance with(意思不对，这个直接用according to吧) thelecture,there are almost no containers to hold so many grain maize onthe         Furthermore,thelecture also oppose(opposes) the writer's expectation(opinion) by emphasizing that thereare also many other material besides broken pots close to the house,such as sands,stone and so on(前面有such as了，删去) .So the speaker claims that it just was atrash place that people threw stuff there rather than ceremonialcenters.On the contrary ,the writer insisted that it must be ceremonialcenters by providing evidence that there were many broken pots on theground.（感觉这一句放在前面收要好些）

观点大致齐备了，那个细节估计你也听到了，但是感觉重复没写上去...另外，有些用词要注意。

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TPO7~~~辛苦帮我改的亲们~~~狠拍~~多多提意见哈~~
             The listening and reading passage have a conflict of opinion about the pros and cons of the practice.The reading material outlines its major negative effects,which are contradicted by the following lecture.
        To begin with,the lecture claims that the American don't treat the advertisements as the same.They trust the advertisement made by the independent certification agency which has the international reputation.These rejects the content,American consumers don't value or pay attention on these label due to there are too many labels on products now mentioned,which mentioned in the reading material.
        In addition,the lecture goes on to discuss the issue that price has little influence on consumers ,which also conflict the point that they are strongly motivated by price so that companies prefer to sell cheaper prodects.According to the lecture,a price just has influence on consumers' decision when the price is much higher or lower than others. In another word,it doesn't make any sense when  there is only less 5percent higher.
        Furthermore,the lecture also opposes to the writer's expectation by emphasizing that there will have many foreign companies enter the market in American if there are few companies sell the certified wood in home.In this situation,American companied have to face huge foreign competition.On the contrary ,about the same problem,the writer insisted that American companies sell most product in home so that they needn't keep up with the rest of world.
To sum up, all the three evidences of the lecture illustrate that the speaker disagree with the points mentioned in the reading materials.

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The listening and reading passage(passages) have a conflict of opinion (没见过这种表达呀:O .可以用show conflict opinions)about the pros and cons（好短语，赞一下！） of the practice（这个是什么意思？没看懂。如果是好短语请告诉一下我，我要收了。嘿嘿！）.The reading material outlines its major negative effects,which are contradicted by the following lecture.

To begin with,the lecture claims that the American don't treat the advertisements as the same.（尽量少要用听力里面的原话哦！）They trust the advertisement made by the independent certification agency（貌似广告不是他们打的吧？是companies打的广告，agency给的证明吧？） which has the international reputation.These rejects （数不一致）the content, American consumers don't value or pay attention on these label due to （后面不能直接跟句子哦！可以跟名词性短语。）there are too many labels on products now mentioned（可以改为many labels  on products）,which mentioned in the reading material(由于文章已经超了40多字，这句话可以不要了。).

In addition,the lecture goes on to discuss the issue that price has little influence on consumers ,which also conflict（conflicts） the point that they are strongly motivated by price so that companies prefer to sell cheaper prodects. According to the lecture,a price just has influence on consumers' decision when the price is much higher or lower than others(这个最好用自己的话转述一下). In another word,it doesn't make any sense when  there is only less 5（five。我的老师告诉我托福作文中不要出现阿拉伯数字和缩写词）percent higher. / |& t

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Furthermore,the lecture also opposes to the writer's expectation by emphasizing that there will have （是想用there be 句型么？have和there be貌似有仇，不能同时出现哦）many foreign companies enter（两个动词打架了呢! 前面用there wil be 和话，这里就用entering. ） the market in American if there are few companies sell (和前面一样的错误，改成selling就可以啦！)the certified wood in home.In this situation,American companied（companies） have to face huge foreign competition.On the contrary ,about the same problem,the writer insisted(用一般现在是就好insists) that American companies sell most product(products) in home so that they needn't keep up with the rest of world.(这里没有必要把阅读里面的理由说的这么详细，如果要提一下的话最好在前面提一下，放在后面总觉得强调了reading的内容)3 w9 r0 O$ w3 |3 z

To sum up, all the three evidences of the lecture illustrate that the speaker disagree（disagrees） with the points mentioned in the reading materials. (最后一段总结段可以不要。本来考生就容易把字数写超。虽然ETS没有明确说超字数会扣分，但是题目既然要求了，超字数还是会影响得分的。)

丫头， 不好意思啦！下次你尽管带刀来砍我，我热烈欢迎“报仇”。嘿嘿！:$

总述：文章把阅读和听力的要点都写出来了，只是对阅读的内容可以做一些删减。我也要回去好好研读OG对综合写作的要求。
丫头的复合句用的不错，注意一点就是时态，像第三人称单数，名词的数，there be 和have 的纠葛问题，这些稍微细心一点会很容易改正的。加油！

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The listening and reading passage have a conflict of opinion about the pros and cons of the practice.The reading material outlines its major negative effects,which are contradicted by the following lecture.
        To begin with,the lecture claims that the American don't treat the advertisements as the same.They trust the advertisement made by the independent certification agency which has the international reputation这句话写的好，赞！.These rejects the content,+ that American consumers don't value or pay attention on these label due to there are too many labels on products now mentioned,which mentioned in the reading material.
    In addition,the lecture goes on to discuss the issue that price has little influence on consumers ,which also conflict the point that they are strongly motivated by price so that companies prefer to sell cheaper prodects.According to the lecture,a price just has influence on consumers' decision when the price is much higher or lower than others. In another word,it doesn't make any sense when  there is only less 5percent higher. 少说了一点，当价格差别不大时，人们越来越关注环境保护等
      Furthermore,the lecture also opposes to the writer's expectation by emphasizing that there will have many foreign companies enter 改entering the market in American if there are few companies sell the certified wood in home.In this situation,American companied have to face huge foreign competition.On the contrary ,about the same problem,the writer insisted that American companies sell most product in home so that they needn't keep up with the rest of world.
To sum up, all the three evidences of the lecture illustrate that the speaker disagree with the points mentioned in the reading materials.
文章结构清晰，逻辑也不错，第二点可能少讲了一些内容，但主要论点都概括了，楼主还要注意一些语法错误，向你学习！

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TPO8~~~       
                The listening and reading passage have a conflict of opinion about whether the memoir of Chevalier was accurate.The reading holds that he distorted many things in it,providing there points as evidence,which are contradicted by the following lecture.
        To begin with,the lecture claims that borrowing money from merchant doesn't means he was poor ,which rejected the content,Chevalier couldn't be wealthy as he said in the reading passage.From the lecture,Chevalier may sold things to merchant to get money spend on parties and gambling.
        In addition,the lecture goes on to discuss the issue that the conversation recorded in the memoir was accurate,which also conflict the point that he couldn't write exact conversation in many years later.According to the lecture,Chevalier wrote down everything he could remember especially the important things in the evening.So in this way , it must be precise due to he refered to these notes while writing the memoir in many years later.
        Furthermore,the lecture also oppose the writer's expectation by emphasizing that it is true that Chevalier escaped the prison from the ceiling.On the contrary,about the same problem,the writer thinks he must be freed by jailers who got bribes.In order to demonstrate her perspective,the lecture persuades us with the evidences that there were many people still in that prison even had more powerful friends.According to the record in government,the ceiling in the prison was repaired just after he escaping.

daboraUID: 2574809

The listening and reading passage have a conflict of opinion 这个词组用的很好噢,言简意赅,采用了about whether the memoir of Chevalier was accurate.The reading holds that he distorted many things in it,providing there points as evidences,which are contradicted by the following lecture.
       To begin with,the lecture claims that borrowing money from merchant doesn't means he was poor ,which rejected 看看opposed可行，总觉得reject是拒绝的意思the content,Chevalier couldn't be wealthy as he said用describe如何呢，建议下，哈哈 in the reading passage.From the lecture,Chevalier may sold 用might sellthings听力中原文是properties to merchant sto get money spend改t on parties and gambling.
        In addition,the lecture goes on to discuss the issue that the conversation recorded in the memoir was not accurate,which also conflict the point that he couldn't write exact conversation in 删掉many years later.According to the lecture,Chevalier wrote down everything he could remember ，especially the不要 important things in the evening.So in this way , it must be precise due to 丫头可想过due to 后面是否可以跟丛句，考虑下in that he refered to these notes while writing the memoir in many years later.
     Furthermore,the lecture also oppose the writer's expectation by emphasizing that it is true that Chevalier escaped the prison from the ceiling.On the contrary,about the same problem,the writer thinks he must be freed by jailers who got bribes.In order to demonstrate her perspective,the lecture persuades us with the evidences that were 不要many people still in that prison even had more powerful friends.According to the record in government,the ceiling in the prison was repaired just after he escaping改为had escaped丫头的这篇作文总体上内容都写全了，但是在文章的末尾明显单薄了，可以加句如it seems impossible for him to offer opportunities to bribe jailers as a result.另外可以另起一段对上面的三段作一个小小的总结，呵呵，小小建议哈，总体逻辑上都挺不错，很多的语法错误要注意哦