issue130【红尘笑看沧桑】互改小组作业 by maggie

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Issue130"Howchildren are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately,we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a bettersociety."

Iagree with the speaker’s assertion that “How children are socialized todaydetermines the destiny of society”. It signifies the importance ofsocialization in modern life. When comes to the speaker’s second assertion thatwe have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a bettersociety, I believe it has to do with the definition of the word “ better”.

Firstly,I agree on the speaker’s assertion that the destiny of the society isdetermined by the extent the children are socialized. It is true that there’remany other qualities of the man affect the development of our society. Like thevalues such as honest, persistent, probity, kindness, but the socialization ofthe people undoubtedly plays a key determinant. I would like to extend thisidea by the definition of “socialization”. Socialization, which means thepeople in the society cooperating with each other to work efficiently to meetthe need of man. It emphasizes on a man’s ability to exchange ideas,communicate and cooperate with others. People are born, to some extent, to besocialized. Robinson’s life on an isolated island for 30 years or so isactually impossible to happen in the real life. Only for socialization, we cancooperate with others, we can make our dreams to land on the moon come true.Only to be socialized, we can make full consideration of every project we aregoing to implement no matter in which respect of social construction. See theprogress we have got in this 200 years, is more than the total of the past 2000years. It is contribute to socialization whose extent has much enhanced sincethe past 200 years. Children is the future of our society, so hoe the childrenare socialized determines the destiny of our society.

While,some may argue, with the modernization and industrialization, we are livingmore in the world of ourselves, physical contacts are much less than before. Isthe doom of our society is approaching? Well, in my view, with the advancedtechnology, we can contact with each other much more convenient than everbefore, we are in fact socialized in a totally different way from before. Themodernization strengthen our extent of socialization which means, our societywell develop much more prosperous.

Thespeaker then asserts that we have not yet learned how to raise children tobring about a better society. What is a better society? If we define a better societyto be better technological advanced, sufficient in material life, I believe wecan attain that goal not long before. However, if we define a better society tobe better developed in moral level, psychologically quality as well astechnology, we still have a long way to go. As the fierce competition, we raisechildren emphasizing too much on their academically ability, cultivate them tobe specialists in virious fields to let our world go around faster whileignoring the comprehensive development of them. They have formed thecompetition awareness since childhood, the relationship between classmates arecompetitors rather than sincere friends. They are not so happy as before. That’salso a cause of higher happening of psychological problems. The extent to whichthe technology now attains is enough for us to lead a convenient life. It istime for us to concentrate more on other aspects of life like the interests, characterof them as we come to the question of how to raise children. After all, what weall have dome or well to do is to bring us a comfortable life both materiallyand mentally.


Insum, I agree the writer’s assertion that the destiny of society is determinedby the children’s socialization, for none of the accomplishment or advancementcan be made by only one individual. And we still have a long way to go to raisechildren to attain ort final goal—to be comfortable both in materially andmentally.

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Issue130"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society." I agree with the speaker’s assertion that “How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society”. It signifies the importance of socialization in modern life. When comes to the speaker’s second assertion that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society, I believe it has to do with the definition of the word “ better”. Firstly, I agree on the speaker’s assertion that the destiny of the society is determined by the extent the children are socialized. It is true that there’re many other qualities of the man affect the development of our society. Like the values such as honest, persistent, probity, kindness, but the socialization of the people undoubtedly plays a key determinant. I would like to extend this idea by the definition of “socialization”. Socialization, which means the people in the society cooperating with each other to work efficiently to meet the need of man.(这句话是不完整的~~~定义the true meaning of socialization) It emphasizes on a man’s ability to exchange ideas, communicate and cooperate with others. People are born, to some extent, to be socialized. Robinson’s life on an isolated island for 30 years or so is actually impossible to happen in the real life. Only for socialization, we can cooperate with others, we can make our dreams to land on the moon come true. Only to be socialized, we can make full consideration of every project we are going to implement no matter in which respect of social construction. See the progress we have got in this 200 years, is more than the total of the past 2000years. It is contribute to socialization whose extent has much enhanced since the past 200 years. Children is the future of our society, so hoe the children are socialized determines the destiny of our society.（这段有疑惑需要解答： of course I could be wrong~~~题目里写着how children are socialized determine~~~ 其中 how怎么理解，我同意socialization的好处，but how~~这一段更让我感受到没有社会化和社会化的区别，但并不是how社会化，似乎与题目给我的理解不同~~~另外，教孩子be honest persistent 算不算也是社会化的一种呢？在教授孩子方面我们有很多种社会化~~有的崇尚物质追求，有的崇尚自我价值的实现，有的崇尚精神世界的丰富，有的崇尚集体价值的展示~~~在这里选是不是种how？一家之言啊~~~）
While, some may argue, with the modernization and industrialization, we are living more in the world of ourselves; physical contacts are much less than before. Is the doom of our society is (delete it~~~)approaching? Well, in my view, with the advanced technology, we can contact with each other much more convenient than ever before, we are in fact socialized in a totally different way from before. The modernization strengthen our extent of socialization which means, our society well develop much more prosperous.（so 因为上一段的行文，这里再反驳了下所谓的科技进步造成社会化必要性减弱的观点~~~承接上文，great~~~但是还是whether children are socialized 而不是how children are socialized~~~）
The speaker then asserts that we have not yet learned how to raise children to bring about a better society. What is a better society? If we define a better society to be better technological advanced, sufficient in material life, I believe we can attain that goal not long before. However, if we define a better society to be better developed in moral level, psychologically quality as well as technology, we still have a long way to go. As the fierce competition, we raise children emphasizing too much on their academically ability, cultivate them to be specialists in virious(various) fields to let our world go around faster while ignoring the comprehensive development of them. They have formed the competition awareness since childhood, the relationship between classmates are competitors rather than sincere friends. They are not so happy as before. That’s also a cause of higher happening of psychological problems. The extent to which the technology now attains is enough for us to lead a convenient life. It is time for us to concentrate more on other aspects of life like the interests, character of them as we come to the question of how to raise children. After all, what we all have dome or well to do is to bring us a comfortable life both materially and mentally.（这一段是强调教育孩子要精神上和物质上双丰收~~如果前面在讲how的时候能够把教育成物质至上社会会怎样，教育成精神至上社会会怎样？教育成双丰收会怎样？~~~~这样的话，题目两个之间本身的逻辑就连起来啦~~~而现在前半部分没有点出how~~~而只说了需要社会化，后面的论证就不充分啦）
In sum, I agree the writer’s assertion that the destiny of society is determined by the children’s socialization, for none of the accomplishment or advance ment can be made by only one individual. And we still have a long way to go to raise children to attain ort final goal—to be comfortable both in materially and mentally.（给我打开了不同思路~~~事实上在改文章时我也更了解该怎么行文了~~~当然希望maggie同学能把空格之类的弄好~~~ok~~）