1.6 作业 Games are as important for adults

yuminjiaUID: 2659628

1.6 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

  Considering the benefits for adults brought by playing games, I completely agree with the statement that games are as important for adult as they are for children.

  To begin with, it is undeniable that playing games can help adult keep healthy after their tedious working days. For example, as far as we know, majority of little boys would like to play basketball after class and it is helpful for their growth. Although we are adults, we still need to keep fit. From a recent survey statistic, scientists find that adults are more likely to be sick for some reasons, such as stress from jobs and family chores. In this case, playing games outdoor regularly can help us release stress and relax ourselves, thus keeping our body more healthy and energetic.

  Furthermore, it is indisputable that adults can build up a closer relationship by playing games. Take my brother Tom for example. he was intrinsic person and seldom had communication with his team members in his company. By playing football together in activity arranged by company's club, he found that he were more willing to talk with his colleagues and share their common interests. Now, he becomes a chairman in this sports clubs and usually calls more new colleagues in the company to participate their games. So, playing games can easily tie adults' relationships closer.

  Finally, it is obvious that adults can also cultivate cooperation awareness by playing games. Take our project team for another instance. Almost all the team members are expertise in their fields. When we were recruited in this project team, we didn't concern about other's suggestions and seldom had team meeting or discuss. Indeed, we were lack of a teamwork and collaboration. To cultivate our cooperation spirit, we planned to play some team games. Though playing such games, we could easily get familiar with each other and learn to assist other person in completing the whole project.

  Judging from the evidences I offered above, playing games can keep our body healthy, tie our relationship more closely in a team and help adults cultivate leadership. It is apparent to find the superiorities of playing games for adults. So, although we're adults, games are still as vital as they are for children.

shirley072UID: 2712200

Considering the benefits for adults brought by playing games, I completely agree with the statement that games are as important for adult as they are for children.
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To begin with, it is undeniable that playing games can help adult keep healthy after their tedious working days. For example, as far as we know, majority of little boys would like to play basketball after class and it is helpful for their growth. Although we are adults, we still need to keep fit. From a recent survey statistic, scientists find that adults are more likely to be sick for some reasons, such as stress from jobs and family chores. In this case, playing games outdoor regularly can help us release stress and relax ourselves, thus keeping our body more healthy and energetic.' v: n5 X9 T4 V- q3 ]* e& f

Furthermore, it is indisputable that adults can build up a closer relationship by playing games. Take my brother Tom for example. he was intrinsic (introverted) person and seldom had communication with his team members in his company. By playing football together in activity (which was) arranged by company's club, he found that he were more willing to talk with his colleagues and share their common interests. Now, he becomes a chairman in this sports clubs and usually calls more new colleagues in the company to participate their games. So, playing games can easily tie adults' relationships closer.

Finally, it is obvious that adults can also cultivate cooperation awareness by playing games. Take our project team for another instance. Almost all the team members are expertise in their fields. When we were recruited in this project team, we didn't concern about other's suggestions and seldom had team meeting or discuss. Indeed, we were lack of a teamwork and collaboration. To cultivate our cooperation spirit, we planned to play some team games. Though playing such games, we could easily get familiar with each other and learn to assist other person in completing the whole project.

Judging from the evidences I offered above, playing games can keep our body healthy, tie our relationship more closely in a team and help adults cultivate leadership. It is apparent to find the superiorities of playing games for adults. So, although we're adults, games are still as vital as they are for children.

总的来说，我一直觉得楼主的语言应用很不错呵呵，句子都很顺畅，读着很舒服，条例又清晰。
我就说一点我的感觉吧。我觉得这个题目的关键是与children做比较是否一样重要。本文在第一个例子做了比较，而后来的两个例子基本上集中在说game对于adult的好处，这个也对，但是我觉得可以在这两个例子的最后若有若无的加上其实这个game对于小孩的好处同样也适用于大人，这样更加切题呢：）