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The above statement poses a hot topic on contradiction of people's personal enjoyments and responsibilities. And the speaker tends to think people now are dedicating more on personal likeness than on what they should do. I strongly disagree with this opinion because I think that to pursue one's individual enjoyment does not contradict to assume the responsibility.
   

Admittedly, people nowadays increasingly enjoy freedom to pursue personal enjoyment than before. As the development of democracy, the ideas and behaviors of individual are respected and encouraged to some extent. For instance, students can choose any major which they favor mostly; graduates can participate in whatever professions they are interested in; citizens possess absolute freedom on free press and behaviors they like. Briefly, people have much time and freedom to do their favorite things.
   

However, spending much time on personal enjoyment does not indicate that people ignore their accountability which should be taken. Let's take a college student in art for example. Generally, students in art major should spend much time on reading and appreciating art history, biography of artists and art works. Yet, the student favors more on economics. He probably continues to earn his degree on art with great interest in economic as well. Or he may pursue a second degree on economics. No matter what his decision is, he takes his responsibility to become a worthy student of his major.
   

To sum up, it is unreasonable to separate apart what people like to do and what they should do. The pursuit on personal enjoyment and assumption on accountability are interwoven. They do not contradict to each other. The effort and time on personal enjoyment does not equal to the ignorance on people's responsibility because of the objective requirement from each identity. Moreover, personal hobbies are good catalyst for improvement on the original professions.

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Theabove statement poses a hot topic on contradiction of people's personalenjoyments and responsibilities.[好句子，收了～] And the speaker[speaker?是独立作文，不是综合，怎么会有speaker] tends to think peoplenow are dedicating more on personal likeness than on what they shoulddo. I strongly disagree with this opinion because I think that topursue[pursuing] one's individual enjoyment does not contradict to assume[assuming] theresponsibility.: y+ f. P- C# Y
   
Admittedly, people nowadays increasingly enjoy [加more] freedomto pursue personal enjoyment than before. As the development ofdemocracy, the ideas and behaviors of individual are[the concept of indivisualism is] respected andencouraged to some[to a greater] extent. For instance, students can choose any majorwhich they favor mostly; graduates can participate in whateverprofessions they are interested in; citizens possess absolute[作文重视严谨逻辑，这么绝对的词不建议出现] freedomon free press[free press，学到] and behaviors they like.[这几个例子貌似不是在讲enjoyment] Briefly, people have much timeand freedom to do their favorite things.. z6 W5 ]$ M% ]; N# {$ {9 D( I
   
However,spending much time on personal enjoyment does not indicate that people ignore their accountability[查了英文解释，虽然也是尽责任的意思，但好像没见过有take accountability这么用的。还是老实用responsibility比较好] which should be taken. Let's take a college student in art for example.[Let's take...口语化] Generally, students in art major should spend much time on reading and appreciating art history, biography ofartists and art works. Yet, the student favors more on economics. He probably continues to earn his degree on art with great interest in economic as well. Or he may pursue a second degree on economics. No matter what his decision is, he takes his responsibility to become a worthy student of his major.［既然不同意题目中的statement，就要理由充分地驳倒它，个人感觉你这个例子说服力不够。只是一个特例，还是“可能”，并且没强调出现代和古代的区别。你论述的更像是personal interest，而不是personal enjoyment］

你你，让步段之后，只有一段论述，就结尾了？单薄了吧。

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To sum up, it is unreasonable to separate apart[separate和apart能连用？再说题目中的意思并不是要将enjoyment 和 what they should do分开，而是说人们过于关注前者而放弃后者] what people like to do and what they should do. The pursuit on[pursuit不能接on] personal enjoyment and assumption on accountability[貌似assume和accountability这两个词出现得有点太频繁了呢] are interwoven[好华丽的词～收了，不知道我记不记得住]. They do notcontradict to each other. The effort and time [consumed] on personal enjoyment does not equal to the ignorance on[of] people's responsibility because of the objective requirement from each identity.[语法正确，句义空洞] Moreover, personal hobbies are good catalyst for improvement on the original professions.[你这最后一句话明明可以扩展成一个很充实的论述段的]

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非常感谢名字同学的点评，一定虚心接受，认真改进，呵呵