integrated writing by cox

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TPO1

  The lecturer raises the serious counterarguments against the reading paragraphs by providing different ideas drastically regarding that increasing companys' profits, reducing unemployment and more extra time employees can spend , if employees work a four-day week.
  While the author claims that having fewer overworked and error-prone employees for the same money leads to the increasing of company profits, the lecturer points the fact that  hiring new employees need the cost of training and more
offices and computers , which would increas company cost. Therefore , it is unlikely that company can make more profits.
  Contrary to the author's statement that this option would reduce unemployment rates, the lecturer  argue that this case will never happen. Instead, conpanies do know that hiring more employees increase the cost. Undoubtedly , they can order the four-day employees to do the same amount of work used to be. So, there is no additional emloyees for companies and the unemployment couldnot decrease.
  Another argument raised in the lecture is that individual employees couldnot benefit from the four-day work, and this directly contradicts what is stated in the passage. The lecturer claims that the four-day worker gaining lower money leads to the dreasing of their life quality. Moreover, they almost have no chance to get promotion and even lost their jobs.
  So, the contents in the passage are contradicted by the lecturer and the lecturer has totally different ideas on the points by the passage.

beverly910614UID: 2728081

:)Sorry, I'm late~!
I would write all about my opinions on this essay, maybe some points you don't like to read, because I may do a  little strict for them. (这叫狠拍~) If you don't like this recorrect style of mine, just let me know. Thank you very much.

The lecturer raises the serious counterarguments(don't use this word, because it's not directlly enough. ) against the reading paragraphs by providing different ideas drastically regarding that increasing companys' profits, reducing unemployment and more extra time employees can spend , if employees work a four-day week.(This sentance is so-so. in TOEFL test, you are only required to illustrate ideas clearly, not to show how writing skills you are good at, especially when you cannot write enough "ENGLISH"!!   Also, this sentance has big problem, may be you can revise it )
  While the author claims that having fewer overworked and error-prone employees for the same money leads to the increasing of company profits, the lecturer points the fact that  hiring new employees need the cost of training and more offices and computers , which would increas company cost. Therefore , it is unlikely that company can make more profits.(the last sentence is unnecessary.)

Contrary to the author's statement that this option would reduce unemployment rates, the lecturer  argue that this case will never happen. Instead, conpanies do know that hiring more employees increase the cost. Undoubtedly , they can order the four-day employees to do the same amount of work used to be. So, there is no additional emloyees for companies and the unemployment could(would)not decrease.   

Another argument raised in the lecture is that individual employees couldnot benefit from the four-day work, and this directly contradicts what is stated in the passage. The lecturer claims that the four-day worker gaining lower money leads to the dreasing of their life quality. Moreover, they almost have no chance to get promotion and even lost their jobs.

So, the contents in the passage are contradicted by the lecturer and the lecturer has totally different ideas on the points by the passage.

BY PET

fatruiUID: 2726256

i am late too。

The lecturer raises the serious counterarguments against the reading paragraphs by providing different ideas drastically regarding that increasing companys' (companies’s)profits, reducing unemployment and more extra time employees can spend , if employees work a four-day week.(这句有语法问题，increasing和reducing的用法后面unemployment and （reducing more extra time）根据平衡原则)
  While the author claims that having fewer overworked and error-prone employees for the same （是same money吗？）money leads to the increasing of company profits, the lecturer points the fact that  hiring new employees need the cost of training and more offices and computers, which would increase(increase) company cost. Therefore, it is unlikely that company can make more profits（as the author argued）
  Contrary to the author's statement that this option would reduce unemployment rates, the lecturer  argue that this case will never happen. Instead, companies(companies) do know that hiring more employees increase the cost. Undoubtedly,（这里很赞，学习了，我都没有提及） they can order the four-day employees to do the same amount of work used to be. So, there is （surely）no additional employees(employees) for companies and the unemployment could not decrease.
  Another argument raised in the lecture is that individual employees(employees) could not benefit from the four-day work, and this directly contradicts what is stated in the （reading）passage（怎么没有说reading passage的内容呢？）. The lecturer claims that the four-day worker gaining lower money leads to the dreasing(decreasing) of their life quality. Moreover, they almost have no chance to get promotion and even lost their jobs.（学习，这些内容都没有写下来）  So, the contents in the passage are contradicted by the lecturer and the lecturer has totally different（different是不同不是相反应该用opposite吧？） ideas on the points by the passage.

总结：很好，就是细节的表达可以再注意一下，不好意思，我迟到了。

By Fatrui

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tpo2 by cox
  
  The lecturer raises the serious arguments by providing drastically different ideas regarding that team has many advantages to complete certain new projects.
  While the author's claims that a group of people have wider sources and can make more creative and risky solutions, the lecturer points out the fact that in a team some members have free rights and no contributions. When the project has been done well by the team, the recognition would be the whole while the people who contribute more have been named by the public and do not feel well. Moreover, some members may move quickly, because they feel too long to reach the   consensus and too many meetings to build the agreement among group members.
  Contrary to the reading paragraphs that team members can be very rewarding from the team process, the lecturer argues that this case will never happen. Instead, some managers always influence over what their group did and if the influence may not work, the work would failed and   has further meaning. Some members convince the group that the plan is more creative while others warn the group that the plan need to move directions and may not work. Certainly, the work would fail. However, the blame would be placed on the whole team, which is not fair to the helpful members.

beverly910614UID: 2728081

The lecturer raises the serious arguments by providing drastically different ideas regarding that team has many advantages to complete certain new projects.
模板有绿色标明 学习一下 呵呵
  While the author's claims that a group of people have wider sources and can make more creative and risky solutions, the lecturer points out the fact that in a team some members have free rights(riders) and no contributions. When the project has been done well by the team, the recognition would be the whole while the people who contribute more have been named by the public and do not feel well. Moreover, some members may move quickly, because they feel too long to reach the   consensus and too many meetings to build the agreement among group members.
  Contrary to the reading paragraphs that team members can be very rewarding from the team process, the lecturer argues that this case will never happen. Instead, some managers always influence over what their group did and if the influence may not work, the work would failed and   has further meaning. Some members convince the group that the plan is more creative while others warn the group that the plan need to move (这句式学习了~)directions and may not work. Certainly, the work would fail. However, the blame would be placed on the whole team, which is not fair to the helpful members.

Great~~!!你用了好多被动语态。哈哈~没什么问题~~~！！
加油~！

fatruiUID: 2726256

The lecturer raises the serious arguments by providing drastically different ideas regarding that team has many advantages to complete certain new projects.

  While the author's（author） claims that a group of people have wider sources and can make more creative and risky solutions, （应该加个原因吧？）the lecturer points out the fact（the fact可以不要） that in a team some members have free rights and no contributions. When the project has been done well by the team, the recognition would be the whole （whole team members）while the people who contribute more have been named by the public and do not feel well. Moreover, some members may move quickly, because they feel too long to reach the consensus and too many meetings to build the agreement among group members.（感觉后面这里有点混乱啊）

  Contrary to the reading paragraphs that team members can be very rewarding from the team process, the lecturer（还是professor吧） argues that this case will never happen. （这样简洁的开头，学习了）Instead, some managers always influence over what their group did and if the influence may not work, the work would failed and   has further meaning（为什么有further meaning？）. Some members convince the group（the group 去掉） that the plan is more creative while others warn the group that the plan need to move directions and may not work. Certainly, the work would fail. However, the blame would be placed on the whole team, which is not fair to the helpful members.(最后一句表达很赞)

By Fatrui
不好意思 迟到了