【big fish】2月23日习作 issue No.27---by topran

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写的我好痛苦啊，看来还是读的少，也缺章法，还得下苦功，大家尽情拍哈~~~~
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TOPIC: ISSUE27 - "No one can possibly achieve success in the world by conforming to conventional practices and conventional ways of thinking."
WORDS: 239
TIME: 01:00:00
DATE: 2010-2-24 0:15:12

The extreme opinion always worth to argue ,so as this topic : the success can only been achieved by break the edge or think out of the box. All roads leads to Rome so as the success which always can be achieved by hard working and little luck .It's true that challenge the tradition is a good way to make surprise , and some of these surprise come with success. It is also not too hard to find the negative side of the convention like it can block our mind and make people conservative .But let's do not neglect the bright side of convention and rethink profoundly that do we overlook the power of creativity.

To begin with ,convention does have its merits. if a kinds of thinking style or manner of execution become into convention ,it must stand the test of times which means it has been used or tried by thousands of people , if there is a better way , then the old one will be replaced and wash out by the trend. As the old saying goes “ he who laugh last laughs best" ,convention is defiantly winner in the competition . Take the wine industry as an example , as time goes by and technology develop, the best chateaux’s are still keep their tradition way to make wine , the grape must be picked by hand at certain temperature and the wood of cast need to be produced by the special procedure .There is no doubt that the one who can produce such luscious wine is
successful.

Even some groundbreaking things are
based on conventional thinking and conventional practices . And this situation is quite easy to find in the science world . Almost all the science work has its conventional frame structure , the experiment need to be proceeded by the certain procedure and these procedure has been used by numerous years . And countless invention and result has been pushed out by these traditional frame work .Like the double blind trial used in medical research , this trial is the most efficient way to testify the effective of drug , no matter how groundbreaking this drug is , it must pass the double blind trial to prove its effect .

It's undeniable that creativity take curtail part in the development .Without it, our society will lost the motivation
and vitality . If there is no one ever dreamed of to fly in the human history , there won't be acrobatics and aeronautics today ; if there is no one has idea of "living today and spend tomorrow's money", there won't be credit card and credit system which is the essences of financial market . But can we just live in our unrestrained and vigorous imagination ? Of course not , we need work hard for it , down to the earth , follow the rules. We can challenge tradition and convention , but we can never live without them . let alone the success.

In the end , we need think out of the box and we also need the help of tradition and convention at the same time. Creativity is significant but it does not as magic as the wonderful lamp in Aladdin’s hand ,which will not give us what we want without any effort. Keep emphasis the important of creativity and neglect the power of convention is not a right path to success , So we should cautious with our limited counters in this bet , balance them well and make us win the success
.

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The extreme opinion always worth to argue ,so as this topic : the success can only been achieved by break the edge or think out of the box. All roads leads to Rome so as the success which always can be achieved by hard working and little luck .It's true that challenge the tradition is a good way to make surprise , and some of these surprise come with success. It is also not too hard to find the negative side of the convention like it can block our mind and make people conservative .But let's do not neglect the bright side of convention and rethink profoundly that do（whether） we overlook the power of creativity.

To begin with ,convention does have its merits（为什么加s？）. if a kinds（kind） of thinking style or manner of execution become（becomes） into convention ,it must stand the test of times（time） which means it has been（must have been） used or tried by thousands of people , if there is a better way , then the old one will be replaced and wash out by the trend （of...）. As the old saying goes “ he who laugh last laughs best" ,convention is defiantly winner in the competition . （为什么是传统的胜利呢，我们的发展不是新的更好的取代旧事物吗？留下来的一定是传统的吗？到底什么才是传统呢，当一个新的方法出来后取代了老的方法，谁又知道我们现在用的传统方法不会被以后更好的所取代呢）Take the wine industry as an example , as time goes by and technology develop, the best chateaux’s are still keep their tradition way to make wine , the grape must be picked by hand at certain temperature and the wood of cast need to be produced by the special procedure .There is no doubt that the one who can produce such luscious wine is successful. （我觉得这个例子还可以，但是落脚点应该放在这种酒很受欢迎，得到大家的认可上面，单是说香甜感觉不够充分）

Even some groundbreaking things are based on conventional thinking and conventional practices . And this situation is quite easy to find in the science world . Almost all the science work has its conventional frame structure , the experiment need to be proceeded by the certain procedure and these procedure has been used by numerous years . And countless invention（s） and result（s） has（have） been pushed out by these traditional frame work .Like the double blind trial used in medical research , this trial is the most efficient way to testify the effective of drug , no matter how groundbreaking this drug is , it must pass the double blind trial to prove its effect .（实验确是有他基本的一些传统做法，但这些做法当初被发明出来的时候是不是也是因为不同寻常的考虑呢，我认为这个例子不够充分，没有很好的说明发明跟传统观念的联系，实验一直沿用的方法就变成传统了，而要真正取得成功靠这些传统就可以吗，还是要有不同的思维吧？）

It's undeniable that creativity take curtail（crucial） part in the development .Without it, our society will lost the motivation（觉得不恰当，社会失去动力？该说社会的前进失去动力要好些） and vitality . If there is no one ever dreamed of to fly in the human history , there won't be acrobatics and aeronautics today ; if there is no one has idea of "living today and spend tomorrow's money", there won't be credit card and credit system which is the essences of financial market . But can we just live in our unrestrained and vigorous imagination ? Of course not , we need work hard for it , down to the earth , follow the rules. We can challenge tradition and convention , but we can never live without them . let alone the success. （我觉得还要再着重讲下去，突出努力和运气的比重，来说明光有unconventional thinking不一定就能带来成功）

In the end , we need think out of the box and we also need the help of tradition and convention at the same time. Creativity is significant but it does not as magic as the wonderful lamp in Aladdin’s hand ,which will not give us what we want without any effort. Keep emphasis （on）the important（importance） of creativity and neglect the power of convention is not a right path to success , So we should cautious with our limited counters in this bet , balance them well and make us win the success .

我觉得这篇题目难就难在找不到一个合适的科学上的例子来说明conventional thinking也能获得成功。你的文章字数少了点哦，我觉得你开始写就不要在乎时间，先把字数写到，练练句子，等能差不多写够了，有个自己的思路了，再来限时。文章中有一些单复数的问题（不知道为什么，我对这个总是比较敏感，会读得不太舒服），自己写的时候注意下。总的来所，这篇文章条理清晰，但是论证觉得有点不够充分。语言上的话好像没什么语法问题，就是要注意下怎么样地道的表达，还有变换形式。我也在学习阶段呵，有的说的不对的或者改的不对提出来再讨论咯  ……

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The extreme opinion always worth to argue ,so as this topic : the success can only been achieved by break the edge or think out of the box. All roads leads to Rome so as the success which always can b ...
jenius4869 发表于 2010-2-24 17:00

恩，今天翻来看看昨天这两篇文写的真是烂啊，一点思路都没有，今天要看看你们写的，好好取经~~~~~