[big fish] 3月23日 ISSUE27 by wowoyuweiwei

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In the history, the reason for many people who achieved great success is they jumped out of the traditional ways of thinking and practicing. With the help of new methods to study, these successful persons discovered new theories or gained more wealth. However, in some other realms, the best way to make dream come true is to follow the experience which may guide us to the right direction in the quickest way. Therefore, whether to chose the conventional practice and conventional ways of thinking should be taken into consideration case-by-case. The best way to succeed is to combine innovation and convention.


At every beginning, when looking at the great achievements human have attained, we can figure out that most of them were accomplished by the new ways. Take science as example.
If people always think as our ancestors and practice as former scientists, we can not get quantities of new theories or any inventions which contribute a lot to the modern society. Thanks to innovative minds, Copernican doubt the used geocentric regarded as the truth by the whole society. In peoples' perspective, the sun spins around the earth which can solve the phenomenon the sun rises up everyday in the morning and goes down right before the darkness. Their eyes led them to a wrong direction. Luckily, based on the further study of cosmos, Copernican pointed out the mistake in former theory. At the same time, he developed geocentric which made him dead at last. From this, we can realize the importance of the innovative ideas taking the place of conventional ones.

However, in some other realms, new ideas can not always bring us success. In traditional service industry, the right choice is to finish the tasks in conventional ways. For instance, what an accountant should do is to count the interest of a company exactly. To do this, he or she need the basic skills and follow what others do. In this way, they can accomplish the work not only in the shortest time but also accurately. What is more, the conventional practices can help prevent them from making mistake which may lead great problems. When it comes to athletes, it is the same. For the medal, they need to train everyday imitating the former ones whose experience tells the most effective method to improve the score.
So, it is also required to take conventional practice in some certain realms.

Thirdly, a good combination of innovation and convention can greatly contribute to people's business. With the help of conventional practices and thinking, we can absorb useful experience help achieve our dreams. On the other hand, it is more likely for us to develop new subject or attain more success. As a lawyer, he or she must learn the basic laws and how former lawyers work in each case which help to acknowledge what others will do and prepare how to beat. Then, furthermore, it is better for this lawyer to consider different ways to judge a certain affair. Only in this way, there is more possibility for him or her winning the lawsuit.

In summary, the best means to accomplish one’s dream is to combine conventional practice and thinking with innovative ideas with fewer mistakes.

jjooyyUID: 2704028

In the history, the reason for many people who achieved great success is they jumped out of the traditional ways of thinking and practicing. With the help of new methods to study, these successful persons discovered new theories or gained more wealth. However, in some other realms, the best way to make dream come true is to follow the experience which may guide us to the right direction in the quickest way. Therefore, whether to chose the conventional practice and conventional ways of thinking should be taken into consideration case-by-case. The best way to succeed is to combine innovation and convention.

At every beginning, when looking at the great achievements human have attained, we can figure out that most of them were accomplished by the new ways. Take science as example. If people always think as our ancestors and practice as former scientists, we can not get quantities of new theories or any inventions which contribute a lot to the modern society. Thanks to innovative minds, Copernican doubt the used geocentric regarded as the truth by the whole society. In peoples' perspective, the sun spins around the earth which can solve the phenomenon the sun rises up everyday in the morning and goes down right before the darkness. Their eyes led them to a wrong direction. Luckily, based on the further study of cosmos, Copernican pointed out the mistake in former theory. At the same time, he developed geocentric which made him dead at last（隐晦一点吧。。）. From this, we can realize the importance of the innovative ideas taking the place of conventional ones. 没怎么讲conventional 的样子，虽然你的例子谈到了

However, in some other realms, new ideas can not always bring us success. In traditional service industry, the right choice is to finish the tasks in conventional ways. For instance, what an accountant should do is to count the interest of a company exactly. To do this, he or she need the basic skills and follow what others do. In this way, they can accomplish the work not only in the shortest time but also accurately. What is more, the conventional practices can help prevent them from making mistakes which may lead great problems. When it comes to athletes, it is the same. For the medal, they need to train everyday imitating the former ones whose experience tells the most effective method to improve the score.So, it is also required to take conventional practice in some certain realms.

Thirdly, a good combination of innovation and convention can greatly contribute to people's business. With the help of conventional practices and thinking, we can absorb useful experience help achieve our dreams. On the other hand, it is more likely for us to develop new subject or attain more success. (更可能创新？)As a lawyer, he or she must learn the basic laws and how former lawyers‘ work in each case which help to acknowledge what others will do and prepare how to beat others. Then, furthermore, it is better for this lawyer to consider different ways to judge a certain affair. Only in this way, there is more possibility for him or her winning the lawsuit.

In summary, the best means to accomplish one’s dream is to combine conventional practice and thinking with innovative ideas with fewer mistakes（文中没提到吧）.
1.连接连贯 语言流畅 观点明确
2.每段在举例后没有跟详细的论证观点，有单纯为举例而举例之嫌