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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give every member of the team the same grade when the team finishes a project.

Is it necessary for the universities to give every member of a team the uniform grade when they complete a project together? I generally agree with this suggestion, because, with a same reward of each member after they finish a project is extremely important for the team cooperation in the future, maybe for the next task. However, a distinguishing method for spur every member besides the former uniform grade they got is also indispensable for the competition within the team unit.

It is a indisputable fact that a uniform reward such as the same grade which given by the universities play a significant and essential role in enforce the cooperation relationship among each member of a team. And cooperation is necessary among team members if they want to achieve the goal they set, perhaps in a sporting event or in a political race, in order to win the competition; it is equally important to understand that cooperation is of great importance for the team members, in that same sporting event or political race, inasmuch as the members need to be in agreement as to the basic ground rules of the game or election in order to beat their competitors.

However, a extra method to impulse each member in a distinguishing way is also needed, because, with the aid of the method, the members of the team can appreciate their own ideas to contribute more to the team with press. For example, in most of the international companies, their employees who in a same rank usually receive a same salary. However, the bonus is given according to their contribution to the corporation, which is must be different each other.

In the final analysis, both the same and distinguishing reward methods are necessary for a team, because, the cooperation and competition among the team members should be coexisted if the team wants to finish their task. So, for universities, not only should give a same grade after the team completes a project, but a little difference is also important.
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发表于 2010-4-10 17:32:40 |只看该作者
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give every member of the team the same grade when the team finishes a project.

Is it necessary for the universities to give every member of a team the uniform grade when they complete a project together? I generally agree with this suggestion, because,(不能做插入语,可以另起一句) with(去掉) a same reward of each member after they finish a project is extremely important for the team cooperation in the future, maybe for the next task(感觉没多大意思,可以去掉). However, a distinguishing method for spur(spuring) every member besides the former uniform grade they got is also indispensable for the competition within the team unit.(这段观点不明显,需要一句能简单概括的句子)

It is a indisputable fact that a uniform reward such as the same grade which given by the universities play a significant and essential role in enforce(enforcing) the cooperation relationship among each member of a team. And cooperation is necessary among team members if they want to achieve the goal they set, perhaps in a sporting event or in a political race, in order to win the competition; it is equally important to understand that cooperation is of great importance for the team members, in that same sporting event or political race, inasmuch as the members need to be in agreement as to the basic ground rules of the game or election in order to beat their competitors.(这句话太长了,读得快断气了,而且看不懂)

However, a extra method to impulse each member in a distinguishing way is also needed, because, (不能当做插入语)with the aid of the method, the members of the team can appreciate their own ideas to contribute more to the team with press. For example, in most of the international companies, their employees who in a(the)same rank usually receive a same salary. However, the bonus is given according to their contribution to the corporation, which is must be different each other.

In the final analysis, both the same and distinguishing reward methods are necessary for a team(for judging a team work),because, (可以另起一句) the cooperation and competition among the team members should be coexisted if the team wants to finish their task. So, for universities, not only should give a same grade(should a same grade be given否则没有主语) after the team completes a project, but a little difference is also important.

论证有力,观点清晰。可以看出楼主语言功底很深,但是句子太冗长太复杂了,导致表达不清晰。可以拆成稍微短一点的句子,读起来更明了。成句子不一定能拿高分,关键要把意思表达清楚。还有because放在中间,两边用逗号都不对的,而且那样不能算一句话。
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发表于 2010-4-10 22:19:15 |只看该作者
Is it necessary for the universities to give every member of a team the uniform grade when they complete a project together? I generally agree with this suggestion, because, with a same reward of each member after they finish a project is extremely important for the team cooperation in the future, maybe for the next task. However, a distinguishing method for spur every member besides the former uniform grade they got is also indispensable for the competition within the team unit.很好辩证而且逻辑清晰,咱来写作风格有点像
It is a indisputable fact that a uniform reward such as the same grade which given by the universities play a significant and essential role in enforce the cooperation relationship among each member of a team. And cooperation is necessary among team members if they want to achieve the goal they set, perhaps in a sporting event or in a political race, in order to win the competition; it is equally important to understand that cooperation is of great importance for the team members, in that same sporting event or political race, inasmuch as the members need to be in agreement as to the basic ground rules of the game or election in order to beat their competitors.有点牵强,比赛时强调但也强调个体的不同作用对团队的影响,same reward与合作没有必然因果关系。

However, a extra method to impulse each member in a distinguishing way is also needed, because, with the aid of the method, the members of the team can appreciate their own ideas to contribute more to the team with press. For example, in most of the international companies, their employees who in a same rank usually receive a same salary. However, the bonus is given according to their contribution to the corporation, which is must be different each other.咱俩写作逻辑很像,难道你也搞G
In the final analysis, both the same and distinguishing reward methods are necessary for a team, because, the cooperation and competition among the team members should be coexisted if the team wants to finish their task. So, for universities, not only should give a same grade after the team completes a project, but a little difference is also important. 很好
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